Solid article, not too much wrong with it that I can see. Some brief comments:
Thank you!
Given that the page is not overlong, I'm wondering if we could use a brief paragraph about the author and/or previous works.
Done.
This is really just personal aesthetic preference, but I'm not the biggest fan of a structure that departs from prose paragraphs or bulleted lists. At the least, I'm wondering if we could dispense with the chapter subtitles (ie Modern Forms, Ancient Designs) and perhaps unbold chapter titles.
Unbolded all the chapter headings. I think it's probably best to keep the subtitles as they're far more explicit than the rather 'cute' chapter titles.
There's a few chapters starting with "Carroll..." and one that doesn't mention the book at all: I'm wondering if we could mix it up a bit, by saying "the section.." or "the chapter..." Not mandatory.
Done.
I think the image captions, and the drosophila embryo in particular, need to be tied a little more closely to the text, even if that makes them a bit wordier.
Done.
Some variation in tense in the reception section: consistent past tense is best, is it not?
Done.
Including the title of the review in the image caption seems a bit like journalese.
Solid article, not too much wrong with it that I can see. Some brief comments:
Thank you!
Given that the page is not overlong, I'm wondering if we could use a brief paragraph about the author and/or previous works.
Done.
This is really just personal aesthetic preference, but I'm not the biggest fan of a structure that departs from prose paragraphs or bulleted lists. At the least, I'm wondering if we could dispense with the chapter subtitles (ie Modern Forms, Ancient Designs) and perhaps unbold chapter titles.
Unbolded all the chapter headings. I think it's probably best to keep the subtitles as they're far more explicit than the rather 'cute' chapter titles.
There's a few chapters starting with "Carroll..." and one that doesn't mention the book at all: I'm wondering if we could mix it up a bit, by saying "the section.." or "the chapter..." Not mandatory.
Done.
I think the image captions, and the drosophila embryo in particular, need to be tied a little more closely to the text, even if that makes them a bit wordier.
Done.
Some variation in tense in the reception section: consistent past tense is best, is it not?
Done.
Including the title of the review in the image caption seems a bit like journalese.