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Reviewer: ΣПDiПG– STΛЯT 02:41, 9 December 2010 (UTC)
Non-reviewer comment - I believe the lead for this article is too long, as the prose doesn't require much of this lead. The lead is supposed to summarize what is to come in the article, not state everything that comes after. For a song of such little information and impact (NPOV-ly, of course) I highly doubt a 4-paragraph lead. Even a song of the status of 4 Minutes (Madonna song), a featured article does not have anything this long, and something for "Ego" should be in the vein of Sweet Dreams (Beyoncé Knowles song). Candy o32 23:44, 9 December 2010 (UTC)
Dear Enging-Start (sorry if i wrongly typed your user name), i have already shortened the intro,. By the way, you are reviewing the article. As you know, i have reverted your edits several times in the past. I hope it is not because of this that you told the article has sourceless information It's better we make everything clear right now so that we do not have any further misunderstandings later. By the way, i agree the intro is too long but as far as i know, an intro is supposed to summarized everything. I have removed the surplus information. And there is no need to compare it to other song of Beyonce (unless you are talking about "Why Don't You Love Me" and "Scared of Lonely") because no reviewer told that Beyonce chose to show her vocal limitations on other songs and they never mentioned that they could have also been placed ion the I Am... disc. I do not have anything against you. It's just that i wanted you to know all this. Jivesh boodhun ( talk) 05:52, 11 December 2010 (UTC)
Thank you. Look forward to be working with you more often. Jivesh • Talk2Me 04:54, 27 December 2010 (UTC)
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Reviewer: ΣПDiПG– STΛЯT 02:41, 9 December 2010 (UTC)
Non-reviewer comment - I believe the lead for this article is too long, as the prose doesn't require much of this lead. The lead is supposed to summarize what is to come in the article, not state everything that comes after. For a song of such little information and impact (NPOV-ly, of course) I highly doubt a 4-paragraph lead. Even a song of the status of 4 Minutes (Madonna song), a featured article does not have anything this long, and something for "Ego" should be in the vein of Sweet Dreams (Beyoncé Knowles song). Candy o32 23:44, 9 December 2010 (UTC)
Dear Enging-Start (sorry if i wrongly typed your user name), i have already shortened the intro,. By the way, you are reviewing the article. As you know, i have reverted your edits several times in the past. I hope it is not because of this that you told the article has sourceless information It's better we make everything clear right now so that we do not have any further misunderstandings later. By the way, i agree the intro is too long but as far as i know, an intro is supposed to summarized everything. I have removed the surplus information. And there is no need to compare it to other song of Beyonce (unless you are talking about "Why Don't You Love Me" and "Scared of Lonely") because no reviewer told that Beyonce chose to show her vocal limitations on other songs and they never mentioned that they could have also been placed ion the I Am... disc. I do not have anything against you. It's just that i wanted you to know all this. Jivesh boodhun ( talk) 05:52, 11 December 2010 (UTC)
Thank you. Look forward to be working with you more often. Jivesh • Talk2Me 04:54, 27 December 2010 (UTC)