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Oh well, since I stated I "review" articles in a GA discussion, I think I should get back to doing so. I don't know if starting with an article on the topic and nominated by this user would be the most appropriate, but we'll see how it works out...
I guess I will need to put the article on hold. In general, it looks very promising, and I believe that the major contributor would be willing to swiftly address any concerns voiced. Here they come:
The Edward R. Hills House, also known as the Hills-DeCaro House, is a house in the Chicago suburb of Oak Park, Illinois, most notable for being remodelled by Frank Lloyd Wright in his signature Prairie style.
Then a short roundup of the history of the house should follow (1-2 sentences) and of its architectural significance (1-2 again), but in all I believe the lead could be limited to one paragraph for such a short article, albeit with ample subsections.
OTOH, for what I can infer from the article, it is only the currently-standing structure that is the Edward R. Hills House, and the "remodel" was actually tearing down an old house and erecting a completely new building. I believe the current description is ambigious with regard to that, at least I am not sure what happened (surprisingly to myself, I am not familiar with this particular Wright design). If what I am saying is the case, the article should be written like that, only mentioning in the history of the building that there was an earlier structure on the plot. If something else - the article should state it in a less ambigious way.
OK, now some questions I couldn't find answers for, and the article leaves me wondering - you can alleviate that either by adding missing info or rephrasing so that those details go out of sight:
Now after going through the article a few times, I have some structuring suggestions. I'd do away with the "history" section and align the article in a somewhat chronological manner. I'd start with the "origins", then describe the "architecture" (I guess it would make more sense to discuss how given features relate to Wright's styles and other works here to help give readers some context), then "fire and restoration" (Hills' changes to the house should be included somewhere in either of those two sections).
On reading the "significance" section again, I believe that the fact that the house is a part of the historic district and was declared a Chicago landmark can be dealt with in the lead section (to highlight why it is notable), and the rest are not that relevant (when the district joined the National Register pertains to the district, not the house, and what houses Wright remodelled, rather than designed from scratch is a bit trivial to me - it is important that it was his area of activity). And, as I said, the description of the relations between the house's features and Wright's style development and other works would better be integrated in the architecture section.
I hope you will find time to work on this article while I put it on hold for a week. Once you're ready, I'd gladly get down to checking the references and other stuff that's left to completing the review. I am looking forward to promoting the article :D PrinceGloria 19:57, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
In response to all of the issues brought up in the GA review, I am now 80% complete with a major overhaul and expansion of this article. Here's were I am so far using the issues above as a guide:
Now for some changes I still want to make:
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Oh well, since I stated I "review" articles in a GA discussion, I think I should get back to doing so. I don't know if starting with an article on the topic and nominated by this user would be the most appropriate, but we'll see how it works out...
I guess I will need to put the article on hold. In general, it looks very promising, and I believe that the major contributor would be willing to swiftly address any concerns voiced. Here they come:
The Edward R. Hills House, also known as the Hills-DeCaro House, is a house in the Chicago suburb of Oak Park, Illinois, most notable for being remodelled by Frank Lloyd Wright in his signature Prairie style.
Then a short roundup of the history of the house should follow (1-2 sentences) and of its architectural significance (1-2 again), but in all I believe the lead could be limited to one paragraph for such a short article, albeit with ample subsections.
OTOH, for what I can infer from the article, it is only the currently-standing structure that is the Edward R. Hills House, and the "remodel" was actually tearing down an old house and erecting a completely new building. I believe the current description is ambigious with regard to that, at least I am not sure what happened (surprisingly to myself, I am not familiar with this particular Wright design). If what I am saying is the case, the article should be written like that, only mentioning in the history of the building that there was an earlier structure on the plot. If something else - the article should state it in a less ambigious way.
OK, now some questions I couldn't find answers for, and the article leaves me wondering - you can alleviate that either by adding missing info or rephrasing so that those details go out of sight:
Now after going through the article a few times, I have some structuring suggestions. I'd do away with the "history" section and align the article in a somewhat chronological manner. I'd start with the "origins", then describe the "architecture" (I guess it would make more sense to discuss how given features relate to Wright's styles and other works here to help give readers some context), then "fire and restoration" (Hills' changes to the house should be included somewhere in either of those two sections).
On reading the "significance" section again, I believe that the fact that the house is a part of the historic district and was declared a Chicago landmark can be dealt with in the lead section (to highlight why it is notable), and the rest are not that relevant (when the district joined the National Register pertains to the district, not the house, and what houses Wright remodelled, rather than designed from scratch is a bit trivial to me - it is important that it was his area of activity). And, as I said, the description of the relations between the house's features and Wright's style development and other works would better be integrated in the architecture section.
I hope you will find time to work on this article while I put it on hold for a week. Once you're ready, I'd gladly get down to checking the references and other stuff that's left to completing the review. I am looking forward to promoting the article :D PrinceGloria 19:57, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
In response to all of the issues brought up in the GA review, I am now 80% complete with a major overhaul and expansion of this article. Here's were I am so far using the issues above as a guide:
Now for some changes I still want to make:
Fox69 ( talk) 04:48, 7 April 2010 (UTC)
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