"As a sophomore, Opoku found his stride," - avoid idioms per
MOS:IDIOM
Done, changed to "As a sophomore, Opoku netted six goals in 18 appearances for the Cavaliers."
Wikilink the first mention of assist to
Assist (football) for non-soccer readers
Done, linked in "after finishing the season with two goals and three
assists."
"Opoku was named to the All-ACC Second Team at the end of the season." - season's end
Done
"He capped the season with his third consecutive all-conference nod," - acknowledgement
Done, changed to "He capped the season with his third consecutive all-conference honour".
"Opoku departed Virginia following the year, ending his collegiate career with 16 goals in 56 appearances for the Cavaliers." - this sentence requires a citation to a reliable source
"joining up with the club for the 2017 PDL season." - joining the club is sufficient
Done
"Opoku went on to appear four times on the year," - during
Done
"Opoku scored once in four total appearances on the year, and concluded his two seasons with the club having played eight times and scored once." - need to be cited to a reliable source
Done, linked to his PDL profile
Columbus Crew AC
"the first Generation Adidas player drafted by Columbus since Dilly Duka in 2010." - that statement needs to be supported by a reliable source
Done, moved the Massive Report reference to the end of the sentence since the ref covers that statement.
"beginning a stretch in which he appeared in four consecutive matches, and concluded the season with six appearances in all competitions." - another reliable source is needed here
@
MWright96: I believe I've just about covered everything you've brought up, let me know if any of my changes still ned a bit of adjustment. Otherwise, thanks for the review (the second you've done for one of my nominations, I believe!)
21.colinthompson (
talk)
23:17, 22 February 2019 (UTC)reply
"As a sophomore, Opoku found his stride," - avoid idioms per
MOS:IDIOM
Done, changed to "As a sophomore, Opoku netted six goals in 18 appearances for the Cavaliers."
Wikilink the first mention of assist to
Assist (football) for non-soccer readers
Done, linked in "after finishing the season with two goals and three
assists."
"Opoku was named to the All-ACC Second Team at the end of the season." - season's end
Done
"He capped the season with his third consecutive all-conference nod," - acknowledgement
Done, changed to "He capped the season with his third consecutive all-conference honour".
"Opoku departed Virginia following the year, ending his collegiate career with 16 goals in 56 appearances for the Cavaliers." - this sentence requires a citation to a reliable source
"joining up with the club for the 2017 PDL season." - joining the club is sufficient
Done
"Opoku went on to appear four times on the year," - during
Done
"Opoku scored once in four total appearances on the year, and concluded his two seasons with the club having played eight times and scored once." - need to be cited to a reliable source
Done, linked to his PDL profile
Columbus Crew AC
"the first Generation Adidas player drafted by Columbus since Dilly Duka in 2010." - that statement needs to be supported by a reliable source
Done, moved the Massive Report reference to the end of the sentence since the ref covers that statement.
"beginning a stretch in which he appeared in four consecutive matches, and concluded the season with six appearances in all competitions." - another reliable source is needed here
@
MWright96: I believe I've just about covered everything you've brought up, let me know if any of my changes still ned a bit of adjustment. Otherwise, thanks for the review (the second you've done for one of my nominations, I believe!)
21.colinthompson (
talk)
23:17, 22 February 2019 (UTC)reply