Maybe some brief explanation of Australian federation would be useful to non-Australians in understanding the politics of the era. Just a sentence or two, nothing too elaborate.
You might want to explain the job of the Minister for Repatriation. Was it just about demobilization, or did he deal with veterans afterward, too?
Almost exclusively veterans; the portfolio eventually became Veterans' Affairs. I've tried to clarify the wording a little.
Frickeg (
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00:08, 26 August 2011 (UTC)reply
These changes are all good. I'm a little concerned about how closely the "Early life" section follows the Rutledge article -- some of the sentences are very close to the source. I understand that there's going to be some overlap in a chronological history -- things happened in that order, no matter how they're sourced -- but a little re-arranging might help. --
Coemgenus (
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15:54, 28 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Maybe some brief explanation of Australian federation would be useful to non-Australians in understanding the politics of the era. Just a sentence or two, nothing too elaborate.
You might want to explain the job of the Minister for Repatriation. Was it just about demobilization, or did he deal with veterans afterward, too?
Almost exclusively veterans; the portfolio eventually became Veterans' Affairs. I've tried to clarify the wording a little.
Frickeg (
talk)
00:08, 26 August 2011 (UTC)reply
These changes are all good. I'm a little concerned about how closely the "Early life" section follows the Rutledge article -- some of the sentences are very close to the source. I understand that there's going to be some overlap in a chronological history -- things happened in that order, no matter how they're sourced -- but a little re-arranging might help. --
Coemgenus (
talk)
15:54, 28 August 2011 (UTC)reply