"She is an eccentric fashion designer renowned for designing and creating the costumes of several famous superheroes before they are all forced to retire, having worked particularly closely with the superheroes Mr. Incredible and Elastigirl (
Bob and
Helen Parr), with whom she has maintained a close friendship." — Can be rephrased as "She is an eccentric fashion designer renowned for designing and creating the costumes of several famous superheroes before they are all forced to retire, having worked particularly closely with Mr. Incredible and Elastigirl (
Bob and
Helen Parr), both of whom she has maintained a close friendship with."
"various Pixar employees typically temporarily provide characters' voices" — Can be rephrased as "various Pixar employees typically provide characters' voices temporarily".
Are "Urban Cinefile", "STATUS" magazine reliable sources?
Yes, they are reliable for the statements they're supporting; Urban Cinefile is an online film review website similar to
James Berardinelli's ReelViews, while STATUS is an entertainment magazine in the vein of Entertainment Weekly or People, or perhaps more accurately like Interview.--
Changedforbetter (
talk)
16:48, 25 March 2018 (UTC)reply
"According to
Oscars.org, the character is inspired by both Head's signature glasses and "forthright personality"." — Rephrase it as "According to Head's entry in the
Academy of Motion Picture Arts and Sciences, the character is inspired by both her signature glasses and "forthright personality"."
"100 Greatest American and British Animated Films author Thomas S. Hischak" — You've mentioned the book and the author's full name in the development section. Just Hischak will do.
Some of the magazines/newspapers/websites linked in the previous section ("Rolling Stone", "Slash Film" which redirects to "/Film", "GamesRadar+", "Entertainment Weekly", "Screen Rant") are linked here again. Delink them.
"She is an eccentric fashion designer renowned for designing and creating the costumes of several famous superheroes before they are all forced to retire, having worked particularly closely with the superheroes Mr. Incredible and Elastigirl (
Bob and
Helen Parr), with whom she has maintained a close friendship." — Can be rephrased as "She is an eccentric fashion designer renowned for designing and creating the costumes of several famous superheroes before they are all forced to retire, having worked particularly closely with Mr. Incredible and Elastigirl (
Bob and
Helen Parr), both of whom she has maintained a close friendship with."
"various Pixar employees typically temporarily provide characters' voices" — Can be rephrased as "various Pixar employees typically provide characters' voices temporarily".
Are "Urban Cinefile", "STATUS" magazine reliable sources?
Yes, they are reliable for the statements they're supporting; Urban Cinefile is an online film review website similar to
James Berardinelli's ReelViews, while STATUS is an entertainment magazine in the vein of Entertainment Weekly or People, or perhaps more accurately like Interview.--
Changedforbetter (
talk)
16:48, 25 March 2018 (UTC)reply
"According to
Oscars.org, the character is inspired by both Head's signature glasses and "forthright personality"." — Rephrase it as "According to Head's entry in the
Academy of Motion Picture Arts and Sciences, the character is inspired by both her signature glasses and "forthright personality"."
"100 Greatest American and British Animated Films author Thomas S. Hischak" — You've mentioned the book and the author's full name in the development section. Just Hischak will do.
Some of the magazines/newspapers/websites linked in the previous section ("Rolling Stone", "Slash Film" which redirects to "/Film", "GamesRadar+", "Entertainment Weekly", "Screen Rant") are linked here again. Delink them.