The single was subsequently considered Ivy's signature song, due to heavy promotion → this is not said in the article, add it and source.
Done
Background
later interview → When?
Done fixed per date of interview; good catch!
...the idea of incorporating new genres into their music; → full stop after music, then capital letter.
Done
stated that → doesn't need "that".
Done
"the first songs [we] recorded were jangly and simple and straight-ahead. We started gravitating toward the groovier, slightly more melancholy stuff. It works well with Dominique's voice" → use your own words in some of this quote.
Done re-worded
"Along with the exploration came "stronger" songs" → sounds terrible.
Done re-worded
Composition and release
Musically, "Edge of the Ocean" is an indie pop and trip hop song; → full stop and sources.
Done
"The single was not released elsewhere until May 27, 2002, when it was released as a CD single in the United Kingdom" → in spite of being a unreliable source, the date only has 2001.
Not done. The source is now reliable but there is no, month or day of the release. Still only year.
Critical reception
Flawless.
Done Hey thanks!
Music video and promotion
The video begins with Durand casually walking around in California near the ocean; several shots of nearby boats, cliffs and landscape are interwoven as Durand mouths the song's lyrics. Chase and Schlesinger also appear in the video. → source.
Done YT video is the only source regarding the video out there (that I can find, and trust me, I've looked)
The track was later joked about, with a reviewer noting that "chances are you've heard it and didn't even know it". → not sure if this is the best section for this piece of information.
Done moved
Track listings and formats
See on References section, below.
Done
Credits and personnel
Link mixing, mastering and such only once in this section, in other words, most of them are not linked and need to be once.
15 → Despite being the official video, it's not official source (Ivy's channel), use MTV or other.
I'm not sure what you want me to change regarding this
I was saying to find a reliable source for the video, but since you can't find it with your research and I couldn't as well. Let's leave it at that.
IMDb → unreliable source, replace it.
Done replaced
Overall GA review
Some good and solid info, needs some work here and there. Otherwise is quite good, I'll put it on hold for a week. If you need more time, just let me know.
MarioSoulTruthFan (
talk)
19:08, 21 May 2016 (UTC)reply
The single was subsequently considered Ivy's signature song, due to heavy promotion → this is not said in the article, add it and source.
Done
Background
later interview → When?
Done fixed per date of interview; good catch!
...the idea of incorporating new genres into their music; → full stop after music, then capital letter.
Done
stated that → doesn't need "that".
Done
"the first songs [we] recorded were jangly and simple and straight-ahead. We started gravitating toward the groovier, slightly more melancholy stuff. It works well with Dominique's voice" → use your own words in some of this quote.
Done re-worded
"Along with the exploration came "stronger" songs" → sounds terrible.
Done re-worded
Composition and release
Musically, "Edge of the Ocean" is an indie pop and trip hop song; → full stop and sources.
Done
"The single was not released elsewhere until May 27, 2002, when it was released as a CD single in the United Kingdom" → in spite of being a unreliable source, the date only has 2001.
Not done. The source is now reliable but there is no, month or day of the release. Still only year.
Critical reception
Flawless.
Done Hey thanks!
Music video and promotion
The video begins with Durand casually walking around in California near the ocean; several shots of nearby boats, cliffs and landscape are interwoven as Durand mouths the song's lyrics. Chase and Schlesinger also appear in the video. → source.
Done YT video is the only source regarding the video out there (that I can find, and trust me, I've looked)
The track was later joked about, with a reviewer noting that "chances are you've heard it and didn't even know it". → not sure if this is the best section for this piece of information.
Done moved
Track listings and formats
See on References section, below.
Done
Credits and personnel
Link mixing, mastering and such only once in this section, in other words, most of them are not linked and need to be once.
15 → Despite being the official video, it's not official source (Ivy's channel), use MTV or other.
I'm not sure what you want me to change regarding this
I was saying to find a reliable source for the video, but since you can't find it with your research and I couldn't as well. Let's leave it at that.
IMDb → unreliable source, replace it.
Done replaced
Overall GA review
Some good and solid info, needs some work here and there. Otherwise is quite good, I'll put it on hold for a week. If you need more time, just let me know.
MarioSoulTruthFan (
talk)
19:08, 21 May 2016 (UTC)reply