There are numerous prose issues that I am concered with. For example: "Three of the four singles released from the album in the United States (US)." – Grammar issues and no need to include the US parenthesis; "Eazy-Duz-It was recorded at Audio Achievements, in Torrance, California from 1987 to 1988." – No need to have a comma after Achievements; "...while the D.O.C.'s included "syllabically punchy boasts" and Ice Cube wrote "masterfully insightful first-person narratives."– Comma needed after "wrote"; "Jason Birchmeier from Allmusic gave a considerable amount of note to the album's production..." – "considerable amount of note" – very unusual phrasing for me, please rephrase the "note" part; "leftover electro sounds of mid-'80s Los Angeles" – All Wikipedia articles now need to address things like "80s" – was it the 1780s or 1980s? Even though it may be obvious, it needs to be written out in full. These are just some of the issues I have picked out. I suggest a thrid-party editor give this a pair of fresh eyes and provide a good copy edit of this article.
There are a number of issues to do with the prose to bring it to GA standards. I suggest a good copy edit by a fresh pair of eyes to polish the prose and fix these prose problems. – SMasters (
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10:24, 19 March 2011 (UTC)reply
I've fixed all the issues that you have listed. I'm right now gonna re-check the article, and probably get someone else to look it over.
CrowzRSA20:58, 19 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Thanks for making all the fixes, I'm happy that the article now meets all the requirements for a GA, and I'm happy to pass it. – SMasters (
talk)
13:23, 22 March 2011 (UTC)reply
There are numerous prose issues that I am concered with. For example: "Three of the four singles released from the album in the United States (US)." – Grammar issues and no need to include the US parenthesis; "Eazy-Duz-It was recorded at Audio Achievements, in Torrance, California from 1987 to 1988." – No need to have a comma after Achievements; "...while the D.O.C.'s included "syllabically punchy boasts" and Ice Cube wrote "masterfully insightful first-person narratives."– Comma needed after "wrote"; "Jason Birchmeier from Allmusic gave a considerable amount of note to the album's production..." – "considerable amount of note" – very unusual phrasing for me, please rephrase the "note" part; "leftover electro sounds of mid-'80s Los Angeles" – All Wikipedia articles now need to address things like "80s" – was it the 1780s or 1980s? Even though it may be obvious, it needs to be written out in full. These are just some of the issues I have picked out. I suggest a thrid-party editor give this a pair of fresh eyes and provide a good copy edit of this article.
There are a number of issues to do with the prose to bring it to GA standards. I suggest a good copy edit by a fresh pair of eyes to polish the prose and fix these prose problems. – SMasters (
talk)
10:24, 19 March 2011 (UTC)reply
I've fixed all the issues that you have listed. I'm right now gonna re-check the article, and probably get someone else to look it over.
CrowzRSA20:58, 19 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Thanks for making all the fixes, I'm happy that the article now meets all the requirements for a GA, and I'm happy to pass it. – SMasters (
talk)
13:23, 22 March 2011 (UTC)reply