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22:43, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
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Hello, I am
Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.
Full review coming very soon.
Carbrera (
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22:43, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
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- The single cover image requires an alt
- You can remove the caption because it is the unanimous cover for the physical and digital releases
- Please remove "Chart position", "Reviews", and "Miscellaneous" from the infobox
- "It premiered" → "It was released"
- "song's commercial appeal. Critics also felt it..." → "song's commercial appeals; they also felt it..."
- If the song was on the chart for 12 straight weeks, could you add "consecutive" before 12?
- "were directed for the single;" → "were created for the single;"
- Can you rephrase the last sentence in this paragraph?
Background and composition
- Instead of "On September 10," could you say "Two days later"?
- The first 'p' in 'Pop music' should be lowercased
- "The use of drum machines were overlapped..." → "The use of drums machines was overlapped..."
- Italicize "AllMusic" please
- "song. Sullivan highlighted..." → "song; Sullivan highlighted..."
- Italicize "Idolator" please
- "positive in their review. They commended the..." → "positive in their review; they commended the..."
- Instead of using just "Greg", you said user "A reviewer" since "Greg" is just so informal
- "in his review. He commended the..." → "in his review; he commended the..."
- In the above comment, you could also use "praised" instead of "commended"
- Instead of "&" you should say "and"
- Remove the link to "Asian Junkie"; it's unnecessary
- Put quotation marks around "21 Greatest K-Pop Songs of All Time List"; capitalized 'songs' as wel
- Reword to "The single charted on US Dance Club Songs chart; it debuted at number 42 and peaked at number 27 for the week ending December 27, 2008."
- "plan" → "planned"
- The rest is great!
- Reword the first sentence please; it's a bit confusing
- In the final sentence, change "label" to "labelled"
- Rename section to "Track listing"
- You could columnize this so it's more compacy
Great job! Per standard procedure, I shall place on hold for seven days. Great job as always!
Carbrera (
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03:28, 3 April 2016 (UTC)
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- @
Carbrera: Done and dusted! :)
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03:29, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
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