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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri ( talk · contribs) 05:49, 2 January 2014 (UTC) I'll do this one. ChrisGualtieri ( talk) 05:49, 2 January 2014 (UTC)
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Review details: "upclose" should be "up-close". The text for Squidward is a surprise link for Squiddy, please address this. The modified character appearance should be noted and not uncovered upon mouse-over or clicking of the link. Also this does not provide the necessary context for printed versions of the page. Something I do with my GAN reviews. Same goes for King Krabs. Around this time the plot summary prose has flow issues, "There they meet Squidly, King Krabs former jester locked in the tower for a bad joke playing a clarinet. SpongeBob, Patrick and Squidly are sent King Krabs who orders them to be executed because of an insulting song they perform in front of him." This should be broken up. It is a run-on sentence, but it flows awkwardly. Same with "Planktonimor" and "Black Knight". Wording choice, "A duel ensues, with SpongeBob ultimately winning due to his karate prowess. After the battle, SpongeBob decides to spare her life." this makes it seem like SpongeBob would kill the Black Knight and seems to a bit dramatic. Is this an accurate description of the events? More prose issues, " The dragon eats it and likes it that it becomes obedient to SpongeBob, zapping Planktonimor."
Duplicate source duplication: "Nickelodeon also tied-in with Burger King to release a toyline based on the episode for promotion.[7][7] The toyline consisted of 20 different figures.[7][7]" More of a concern is that the plot summary includes text that is currently used on the Spongebob Wikia. Could you please explain this? The title is clearly a pun on Dungeons and Dragons, yet the numerous cultural references are absent, reducing some of the context and brilliance of the writing. In fact, the plot summary seems to have been written by an entirely different editor and just doesn't meet the requirements for a GA. Could you please re-write it? ChrisGualtieri ( talk) 01:43, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri ( talk · contribs) 05:49, 2 January 2014 (UTC) I'll do this one. ChrisGualtieri ( talk) 05:49, 2 January 2014 (UTC)
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Review details: "upclose" should be "up-close". The text for Squidward is a surprise link for Squiddy, please address this. The modified character appearance should be noted and not uncovered upon mouse-over or clicking of the link. Also this does not provide the necessary context for printed versions of the page. Something I do with my GAN reviews. Same goes for King Krabs. Around this time the plot summary prose has flow issues, "There they meet Squidly, King Krabs former jester locked in the tower for a bad joke playing a clarinet. SpongeBob, Patrick and Squidly are sent King Krabs who orders them to be executed because of an insulting song they perform in front of him." This should be broken up. It is a run-on sentence, but it flows awkwardly. Same with "Planktonimor" and "Black Knight". Wording choice, "A duel ensues, with SpongeBob ultimately winning due to his karate prowess. After the battle, SpongeBob decides to spare her life." this makes it seem like SpongeBob would kill the Black Knight and seems to a bit dramatic. Is this an accurate description of the events? More prose issues, " The dragon eats it and likes it that it becomes obedient to SpongeBob, zapping Planktonimor."
Duplicate source duplication: "Nickelodeon also tied-in with Burger King to release a toyline based on the episode for promotion.[7][7] The toyline consisted of 20 different figures.[7][7]" More of a concern is that the plot summary includes text that is currently used on the Spongebob Wikia. Could you please explain this? The title is clearly a pun on Dungeons and Dragons, yet the numerous cultural references are absent, reducing some of the context and brilliance of the writing. In fact, the plot summary seems to have been written by an entirely different editor and just doesn't meet the requirements for a GA. Could you please re-write it? ChrisGualtieri ( talk) 01:43, 3 January 2014 (UTC)