The article seems in good shape with no major problems. The comments are suggestions to improve the article.
How nice to get such a friendly reviewer! I am on work right away!
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Captions for images that aren't complete sentences should not end in any punctuation.
Done. Missed some, thanks for reminding.
"However, there is 10.3% of difference between the species found in a mitochondrial analysis." - should have citation
Done.
"
Shiwalik Hills in India" - link says
Himalayas with sub-ranges in India, Bhutan, Nepal etc. - so fossils have been only traced to the parts in India?
Done. That is just to mark a location (in the source). I've removed it.
"The dromedary has a possible origin from Arabia" - is there a better way of saying that?
What do you suggest? Can it be 'The dromedary possibly originated in Arabia'?
Under "History", the phrase "these camels" refers to the Persian camels"?
Done. No, dromedaries.
"About a million feral camels are estimated to live in Australia,[23] descendants of domesticated camels that were released or ran away on their own." but in next section it says: "although the escaped population of Australian feral camels is estimated to number at least 300,000." - this seems inconsistent
I removed the second claim. Has no good source.
Physical description section
(removed as I see you have addressed this)
"The lungs are not lobed" - what does this mean?
Done. Biological term, you know, they are parts of lung. I simplified it.
(will continue)
Under "Ecology" it says: "During the breeding season males become very aggressive, sometimes snapping each other and wrestling, while defending the females with them. The male declares his success in the fight with the rival's head between his legs and body." Under "Behavior", it says: "They are not usually aggressive, except the rutting males. The males of the herd disallow their females from interaction with other bachelor males, by standing or walking between them and driving them away."
shouldn't all the breeding behavior be in one place in the article? The info under "Ecology" and the subsection "Behavior" seen to cover the same territory. Could the sections be combined so that related info can be together?
or perhaps the behavior about camels relating to each other could be together, (breeding, aggressive etc.) and their behavior relating to other animals, people separated out in another paragraph or section.
No, not the second option. I think I should transfer the info in 'Ecology' to 'Behavior'. There is no need of mentioning it in 'Ecology'.
The article seems in good shape with no major problems. The comments are suggestions to improve the article.
How nice to get such a friendly reviewer! I am on work right away!
comments
Captions for images that aren't complete sentences should not end in any punctuation.
Done. Missed some, thanks for reminding.
"However, there is 10.3% of difference between the species found in a mitochondrial analysis." - should have citation
Done.
"
Shiwalik Hills in India" - link says
Himalayas with sub-ranges in India, Bhutan, Nepal etc. - so fossils have been only traced to the parts in India?
Done. That is just to mark a location (in the source). I've removed it.
"The dromedary has a possible origin from Arabia" - is there a better way of saying that?
What do you suggest? Can it be 'The dromedary possibly originated in Arabia'?
Under "History", the phrase "these camels" refers to the Persian camels"?
Done. No, dromedaries.
"About a million feral camels are estimated to live in Australia,[23] descendants of domesticated camels that were released or ran away on their own." but in next section it says: "although the escaped population of Australian feral camels is estimated to number at least 300,000." - this seems inconsistent
I removed the second claim. Has no good source.
Physical description section
(removed as I see you have addressed this)
"The lungs are not lobed" - what does this mean?
Done. Biological term, you know, they are parts of lung. I simplified it.
(will continue)
Under "Ecology" it says: "During the breeding season males become very aggressive, sometimes snapping each other and wrestling, while defending the females with them. The male declares his success in the fight with the rival's head between his legs and body." Under "Behavior", it says: "They are not usually aggressive, except the rutting males. The males of the herd disallow their females from interaction with other bachelor males, by standing or walking between them and driving them away."
shouldn't all the breeding behavior be in one place in the article? The info under "Ecology" and the subsection "Behavior" seen to cover the same territory. Could the sections be combined so that related info can be together?
or perhaps the behavior about camels relating to each other could be together, (breeding, aggressive etc.) and their behavior relating to other animals, people separated out in another paragraph or section.
No, not the second option. I think I should transfer the info in 'Ecology' to 'Behavior'. There is no need of mentioning it in 'Ecology'.