This should be two sentences: In the 2016–17 season, he was included in the Europa League Team of the Week in November. andHe also progressed to the final that year but lost to Manchester United. DoneRRD (
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05:20, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
Van de Beek has often been scouted by top Europeanforeign clubs likesuch as Bayern Munich and FC Barcelona. ("often" doesn't add anything) DoneRRD (
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05:20, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
There should be a sentence in the club paragraph about playing full-time and scoring a decent number of goals in the 2017–18 season. DoneRRD (
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11:53, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
General comment: Divide the paragraphs by season instead of year. This is common practice for football articles.
The first paragraph should end after: At the end of the 2014–15 season, he won the AFC Ajax Talent of the Future award.
The second paragraph should end after: Spanish newspaper Mundo Deportivo reported that Barcelona was considering options to secure his services.
The third paragraph should end after: He went on to replace Schöne in the 70th minute of the Europa League final against Manchester United, with Ajax losing the match 2–0.[26]
On 27 January 2015, he signed a contract extension, which willto keep him at the club until mid-2018 (future tense no longer applies, since it is mid-2018 now)
Switch the order of these two sentences: Commenting on the goal, he said that he would not soon forget it.[14] In the same match, his head collided with opposition player Joona Toivio's causing his left eyebrow to bleed.[15] DoneRRD (
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10:41, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
Also, replace In the same match with As he scored the header. Right now, it's not clear that the head injury happened while he scored the goal. DoneRRD (
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10:41, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
He went on to win the club's Goal of the Month Award for the goal. That goal also won him the club's Goal of the Month Award. (change emphasis)
Champions League debut against PAOK starting in the 1–1 draw
In April 2017, the Daily Express reported that Barcelona and Bayern Munich were scouting Van de Beek.[27] (move this to the previous paragraph before the description of the Europa League final) DoneRRD (
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10:41, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
The 2017–2018 preseason matches should be labelled "2017–18" (cut the second 20)
As Courcelles pointed out, U19 appearances should be documented in the prose. Did he play in any big tournaments? Did any of his four goals come in big matches?
It is clear that the non-Dutch teams (Germany, Scotland, England) are all under-17. No need to re-write that. DoneRRD (
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11:51, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
Okay, it looks better now. A few more things I've spotted:
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he made his competitive debut for the club in an a UEFA Europa League match (it should be 'a', not 'an')
In 2017During the 2017-18 season, Van de Beek established himself as a fixture in Ajax's starting eleven. He scored his first hat-trick for the club and finished the season further went on to score 10 more with 13 goals during the season. (Add that he became a starter this season. Just cite the total goal tally, since the hat trick wasn't his first set of goals during the season.)
Put the sentence on scouting as the last sentence in the paragraph (since it is not so time-sensitive)
Personal life
In the very first part, there's a capitalization typo for Van de Beek
took Donny to itstheir stadium
Rody plays for who plays for Veensche Boys (typo)
There is an extra space before the very last citation.
Club career
Given the length of the section, I would suggest adding a few sub-section headers. Maybe just two of them: "Early career" at the beginning, and "2016–present: Ajax first team mainstay" for the last part.
and was also playingplayed regularly for the Ajax under-19 team in the UEFA Youth League. (mainly a tense issue)
Champions League debut against PAOK, starting in the 1–1 draw. (Add a comma. Sorry about the confusion before.)
Van de Beek replacedHe went on to replace Schöne in the 70th minute of the Europa League final against Manchester United, with Ajax losing the match 2–0.
He scored a goal in both the legs...
scored a hat-trick in aan 8–0 league victory ('an', not 'a')
besides givingadding six assists (I don't think "giving" sounds right here.)
This should be two sentences: In the 2016–17 season, he was included in the Europa League Team of the Week in November. andHe also progressed to the final that year but lost to Manchester United. DoneRRD (
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05:20, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
Van de Beek has often been scouted by top Europeanforeign clubs likesuch as Bayern Munich and FC Barcelona. ("often" doesn't add anything) DoneRRD (
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05:20, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
There should be a sentence in the club paragraph about playing full-time and scoring a decent number of goals in the 2017–18 season. DoneRRD (
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11:53, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
General comment: Divide the paragraphs by season instead of year. This is common practice for football articles.
The first paragraph should end after: At the end of the 2014–15 season, he won the AFC Ajax Talent of the Future award.
The second paragraph should end after: Spanish newspaper Mundo Deportivo reported that Barcelona was considering options to secure his services.
The third paragraph should end after: He went on to replace Schöne in the 70th minute of the Europa League final against Manchester United, with Ajax losing the match 2–0.[26]
On 27 January 2015, he signed a contract extension, which willto keep him at the club until mid-2018 (future tense no longer applies, since it is mid-2018 now)
Switch the order of these two sentences: Commenting on the goal, he said that he would not soon forget it.[14] In the same match, his head collided with opposition player Joona Toivio's causing his left eyebrow to bleed.[15] DoneRRD (
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10:41, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
Also, replace In the same match with As he scored the header. Right now, it's not clear that the head injury happened while he scored the goal. DoneRRD (
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10:41, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
He went on to win the club's Goal of the Month Award for the goal. That goal also won him the club's Goal of the Month Award. (change emphasis)
Champions League debut against PAOK starting in the 1–1 draw
In April 2017, the Daily Express reported that Barcelona and Bayern Munich were scouting Van de Beek.[27] (move this to the previous paragraph before the description of the Europa League final) DoneRRD (
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10:41, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
The 2017–2018 preseason matches should be labelled "2017–18" (cut the second 20)
As Courcelles pointed out, U19 appearances should be documented in the prose. Did he play in any big tournaments? Did any of his four goals come in big matches?
It is clear that the non-Dutch teams (Germany, Scotland, England) are all under-17. No need to re-write that. DoneRRD (
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11:51, 11 July 2018 (UTC)reply
Okay, it looks better now. A few more things I've spotted:
Lead
he made his competitive debut for the club in an a UEFA Europa League match (it should be 'a', not 'an')
In 2017During the 2017-18 season, Van de Beek established himself as a fixture in Ajax's starting eleven. He scored his first hat-trick for the club and finished the season further went on to score 10 more with 13 goals during the season. (Add that he became a starter this season. Just cite the total goal tally, since the hat trick wasn't his first set of goals during the season.)
Put the sentence on scouting as the last sentence in the paragraph (since it is not so time-sensitive)
Personal life
In the very first part, there's a capitalization typo for Van de Beek
took Donny to itstheir stadium
Rody plays for who plays for Veensche Boys (typo)
There is an extra space before the very last citation.
Club career
Given the length of the section, I would suggest adding a few sub-section headers. Maybe just two of them: "Early career" at the beginning, and "2016–present: Ajax first team mainstay" for the last part.
and was also playingplayed regularly for the Ajax under-19 team in the UEFA Youth League. (mainly a tense issue)
Champions League debut against PAOK, starting in the 1–1 draw. (Add a comma. Sorry about the confusion before.)
Van de Beek replacedHe went on to replace Schöne in the 70th minute of the Europa League final against Manchester United, with Ajax losing the match 2–0.
He scored a goal in both the legs...
scored a hat-trick in aan 8–0 league victory ('an', not 'a')
besides givingadding six assists (I don't think "giving" sounds right here.)