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I am nominating this article for a reassessment because I feel there are still some issues with the article. The prose is not clear, references are not correctly formatted and others. I reviewed the article in the first place, but now feel it needs reassessment. Thank you.
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Talk06:40, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
The second sentence is not clear and is confusing. Many instances of poor language "Although only officially released in the US, the song appeared on the charts in Australia". DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me16:14, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
The second paragraph of Background and release contains a lot of confusing sentences squeezed together. What I found:
There are many similarities between Knowles' "Diva" and the song "A Milli" by Lil Wayne, mainly because both tracks are produced by Bangladesh.How can i fix that?
In an interview with MySpace, Knowles was asked whether she agreed that "Diva" is a woman's equivalent to "A Milli". She replied "It is, in a way....it wasn't consciously."[14] Consequently, the song became to be known as the feminine companion to Lil Wayne's A MilliHow can i fix that?
Just correct the "She replied" part. Maybe merge it with the previous sentence??
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The first three sentences of Background seem sloppy and poor to me. Example: Meanwhile, he showed it to American R&B singer Keyshia Cole, who liked the beat of the song, however did not like everything on the record. Later, Cole said she was going to sing the song, however, this time Knowles also wanted the track. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Again, ho was at that particular time working on her third studio album, Fantasy Ride, had remixed "Diva". The remix was supposed to be featured on her Fantasy Ride Mixtape - bad. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)reply
However, its release was scrapped, and on January 20, 2009, "Diva" was released instead to urban radio[5] while "Halo" was sent for mainstream airplay on the same date.[6] On the same date, "Diva" was sent to rhythmic radio alone. – confusing.
Why mention so much about Ego and Halo? Yes, it is needed because it shows the integral concept of the album, that is releasing one Single from "I Am..." and the other form "Sasha".
maybe link stuttering to Wikitionary? No need to link words
Again, In an interview with MySpace, Knowles was asked whether she agreed that "Diva" is a woman's equivalent to "A Milli". She replied "It is, in a way....it wasn't consciously." – please rewrite. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)reply
"Sasha", Knowles' alter ego can even be heard saluting her earning power in the song. – needs fix. I don't like the "can even be heard" part. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)reply
-Critical reception-
Link flagrant to Wikitionary? No need as mentioned before
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I am nominating this article for a reassessment because I feel there are still some issues with the article. The prose is not clear, references are not correctly formatted and others. I reviewed the article in the first place, but now feel it needs reassessment. Thank you.
Novice7 |
Talk06:40, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
The second sentence is not clear and is confusing. Many instances of poor language "Although only officially released in the US, the song appeared on the charts in Australia". DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me16:14, 2 January 2011 (UTC)reply
The second paragraph of Background and release contains a lot of confusing sentences squeezed together. What I found:
There are many similarities between Knowles' "Diva" and the song "A Milli" by Lil Wayne, mainly because both tracks are produced by Bangladesh.How can i fix that?
In an interview with MySpace, Knowles was asked whether she agreed that "Diva" is a woman's equivalent to "A Milli". She replied "It is, in a way....it wasn't consciously."[14] Consequently, the song became to be known as the feminine companion to Lil Wayne's A MilliHow can i fix that?
Just correct the "She replied" part. Maybe merge it with the previous sentence??
Novice7 |
Talk
The first three sentences of Background seem sloppy and poor to me. Example: Meanwhile, he showed it to American R&B singer Keyshia Cole, who liked the beat of the song, however did not like everything on the record. Later, Cole said she was going to sing the song, however, this time Knowles also wanted the track. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Again, ho was at that particular time working on her third studio album, Fantasy Ride, had remixed "Diva". The remix was supposed to be featured on her Fantasy Ride Mixtape - bad. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)reply
However, its release was scrapped, and on January 20, 2009, "Diva" was released instead to urban radio[5] while "Halo" was sent for mainstream airplay on the same date.[6] On the same date, "Diva" was sent to rhythmic radio alone. – confusing.
Why mention so much about Ego and Halo? Yes, it is needed because it shows the integral concept of the album, that is releasing one Single from "I Am..." and the other form "Sasha".
maybe link stuttering to Wikitionary? No need to link words
Again, In an interview with MySpace, Knowles was asked whether she agreed that "Diva" is a woman's equivalent to "A Milli". She replied "It is, in a way....it wasn't consciously." – please rewrite. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)reply
"Sasha", Knowles' alter ego can even be heard saluting her earning power in the song. – needs fix. I don't like the "can even be heard" part. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC)reply
-Critical reception-
Link flagrant to Wikitionary? No need as mentioned before