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Reviewer: delldot ∇. 04:10, 27 September 2009 (UTC)
Great work overall, but I'm putting this on hold until the following comments are dealt with, mainly involving fleshing out and adding sections:
Done.--
Rcej (
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Done. I replaced the diagram with
Image:Respiratory system complete en.svg--
Rcej (
talk) 05:33, 1 October 2009 (UTC)
Done.--
Rcej (
talk) 08:27, 2 October 2009 (UTC)
Done.--
Rcej (
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Done
delldot
∇. 01:19, 10 October 2009 (UTC)
Done. Added a prognosis section.--
Rcej (
talk) 07:01, 10 October 2009 (UTC)
Done. Added a classification section; will still expand it further, though.--
Rcej (
talk) 08:24, 28 September 2009 (UTC)
Done.
Rcej (
talk) 08:08, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
Overall very high quality work, and the referencing is great! Let me know if you have any questions of if I can help with the work. I'm not trying to ask you to do the impossible here; if the info's really not out there then that's just the way it has to be. I'll look over the changes you make in response to this and see if there's anything else to comment on. delldot ∇. 04:10, 27 September 2009 (UTC)
There are 3 interesting journal abstracts about DPB I found sort of under the radar. The mechanism of macrolides on p. aerugenosa, with a mention of DPB and some contemporaries is at PMID 16086598. Also, specific differences between findings in DPB and bronchiolitis obliterans from PMID 19543504; possibly some differential diagnosis content could be added. Then, there is a possible DPB/Rheumatoid arthritis association, which isn't a surprise. That's PMID 9727799. Anyway, more good stuff... it just takes time to write. It's sometimes hard to juggle between relevant/technical/boring, aye? heh.-- Rcej ( talk) 07:34, 5 October 2009 (UTC)
Litte update. There is quite a bit more on the DPB/RA/Obliterans association than I thought, so it might take a while to sift through the additional journal 'shinola'. heh. Anyway, that's where I am, presently.-- Rcej ( talk) 06:17, 14 October 2009 (UTC)
Still at it...will probably be ready for the gar-white glove in another weekish. Thx for the patience. I'm going to have to revise some of the 'long-term treatment' and prognosis info. in light of PMID 9455056. Anyway; we're almost there.-- Rcej ( talk) 07:26, 29 October 2009 (UTC)
I am going to stop here, with that latest expansion to prognosis. Everything else that could be added is primarily uber-technical schmeel about the innerworkings of p. aeruginosa or macrolides, which doesn't necessarily belong. Anyway, take another read thru whenever, and I can fix or fiddle with anything you think needs it... if it isn't GACkable yet. heh.-- Rcej ( talk) 08:17, 10 November 2009 (UTC)
Great work making improvements, I'm very impressed. I do think that the article covers the topic in sufficient depth, which had been my primary concern before. I gave the article another pass and had a few more comments, but these are pretty minor and should be easy to fix.
Done.
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
Done. I reduced it as a defintion incorp'd into main paragraph.
Rcej (
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Done.
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
Done. Eww, not my finest literary moment there... LOL
Rcej (
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Done.
Rcej (
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Done.
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
I'll give you a chance to address these before passing it. Overall very impressive work bringing this article up to par! delldot ∇. 20:34, 13 November 2009 (UTC)
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Reviewer: delldot ∇. 04:10, 27 September 2009 (UTC)
Great work overall, but I'm putting this on hold until the following comments are dealt with, mainly involving fleshing out and adding sections:
Done.--
Rcej (
talk) 05:33, 1 October 2009 (UTC)
Done. I replaced the diagram with
Image:Respiratory system complete en.svg--
Rcej (
talk) 05:33, 1 October 2009 (UTC)
Done.--
Rcej (
talk) 08:27, 2 October 2009 (UTC)
Done.--
Rcej (
talk) 08:40, 1 October 2009 (UTC)
Done
delldot
∇. 01:19, 10 October 2009 (UTC)
Done. Added a prognosis section.--
Rcej (
talk) 07:01, 10 October 2009 (UTC)
Done. Added a classification section; will still expand it further, though.--
Rcej (
talk) 08:24, 28 September 2009 (UTC)
Done.
Rcej (
talk) 08:08, 29 September 2009 (UTC)
Overall very high quality work, and the referencing is great! Let me know if you have any questions of if I can help with the work. I'm not trying to ask you to do the impossible here; if the info's really not out there then that's just the way it has to be. I'll look over the changes you make in response to this and see if there's anything else to comment on. delldot ∇. 04:10, 27 September 2009 (UTC)
There are 3 interesting journal abstracts about DPB I found sort of under the radar. The mechanism of macrolides on p. aerugenosa, with a mention of DPB and some contemporaries is at PMID 16086598. Also, specific differences between findings in DPB and bronchiolitis obliterans from PMID 19543504; possibly some differential diagnosis content could be added. Then, there is a possible DPB/Rheumatoid arthritis association, which isn't a surprise. That's PMID 9727799. Anyway, more good stuff... it just takes time to write. It's sometimes hard to juggle between relevant/technical/boring, aye? heh.-- Rcej ( talk) 07:34, 5 October 2009 (UTC)
Litte update. There is quite a bit more on the DPB/RA/Obliterans association than I thought, so it might take a while to sift through the additional journal 'shinola'. heh. Anyway, that's where I am, presently.-- Rcej ( talk) 06:17, 14 October 2009 (UTC)
Still at it...will probably be ready for the gar-white glove in another weekish. Thx for the patience. I'm going to have to revise some of the 'long-term treatment' and prognosis info. in light of PMID 9455056. Anyway; we're almost there.-- Rcej ( talk) 07:26, 29 October 2009 (UTC)
I am going to stop here, with that latest expansion to prognosis. Everything else that could be added is primarily uber-technical schmeel about the innerworkings of p. aeruginosa or macrolides, which doesn't necessarily belong. Anyway, take another read thru whenever, and I can fix or fiddle with anything you think needs it... if it isn't GACkable yet. heh.-- Rcej ( talk) 08:17, 10 November 2009 (UTC)
Great work making improvements, I'm very impressed. I do think that the article covers the topic in sufficient depth, which had been my primary concern before. I gave the article another pass and had a few more comments, but these are pretty minor and should be easy to fix.
Done.
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
Done. I reduced it as a defintion incorp'd into main paragraph.
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
Done.
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
Done. Eww, not my finest literary moment there... LOL
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
Done.
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
Done.
Rcej (
talk) 07:41, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
I'll give you a chance to address these before passing it. Overall very impressive work bringing this article up to par! delldot ∇. 20:34, 13 November 2009 (UTC)