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I've recapitalized "Transposition of the Great Arteries" as the wikipedia naming guidelines recommend this method to be used for proper names.
Expanded the definition portion of the article.
I'm changing "deoxygenated" back to "oxygen-depleted"...I had used "deoxygenated" in my original version of the article, but found that it sounded awkward in the sentence, and since "oxygenated" occurs in the same sentence, it also sounds repetitive. I chose to use oxygen-depleted instead and found that it improved the sound of the sentence considerably. The two words are absolutely synonymous, so this shouldn't be a problem. With considerable work, this article has feature potential, so it should sound good as well as being factually accurate.
I've removed "(which rises anteriorly from the right ventricle)" and "(rises posteriorly from the left ventricle)" and given these specifics in the opening description, mostly to improve readability, but also to keep tings organized: this paragraph is talking about how the blood is flowing, not the anatomical specifics. The reader also has the illustration to refer to while reading this paragraph. I think this should work.
I have reluctantly removed the following paragraph:
There's a few reasons: there are a number of variants and this wording seems to limit it to these three, which are simply the most common variants; I suspect these statistics are based on the population of the continental US, not on actual worldwide statistics, I should like the demographics of the base of statistics, preferably, worldwide statistics should be shown, or if they cannot be found, it should be specified what demographic the statistics refer to. I have added a "Statistics" heading at the bottom of the page, to avoid having them scattered throughout the page, which can be confusing; I think the statistics should be displayed as a dynamic list. I am not saying that this info should be kept out, merely that I would like to see it added in a way that is more organized and relevent (ie: not based on a single country); this list created another repitition, because the same accompanying defects are discussed in the paragraph immediatly following...so, my suggestion is simply to stay on topic within each heading, and to give statistics their own heading.
I added the "logical fallicy/circular" link back in because I find it appropriately descriptive...if you want to remove it, please discuss it here first. The same is true for the "cardio" and "pulmonary" links in the same paragraph, they help to explain to the reader what is meant by the medical jargon, please use the discussion page first if you wish to change this.
Put the acronyms back into the simple/complex TGA section...I can't see why they were removed...it is a common wikipedia practice to provide a commonly used acronym if one exists, so that is what I have done.
Removed "These other heart defects are essential for survival because without them the body will never get any oxygenated blood" because the wording is bordering on POV, and have explained it more neutrally and in detail in a following paragraph.
I have temporarily removed the info on cc-TGA in preparation to move it to it's own page. This article has always been a d-TGA article - adding in the ccTGA info causes confusion, and at least as much info can be summoned up to create a substantial article for cc-TGA independantly...I have been working on this a bit, but I do not have the experience with it that I do with d-TGA, so all my knowledge of it comes from raw research. Any help on this would be appreciated.
Added lots of expansion in the clinical details, however, was unable to integrate a few details, as I am not sure how they work. Please explain the following symptoms so I (or someone else) can work them in: "Right ventricular heave", "Single loud S2 heart sound", and "Right axis deviation". Also, I'm not sure that there is any difference between hypertrophy or cardiomegaly, so I opted to use the one that would be easier for the average reader to pronounce, and therefore the easiest to read. If I am mistaken and there is a difference, please do let me know the difference as I have been unable to discern it.
Moved DiseaseDisorder Infobox into the description section in order to unclutter the top of the page, and I figured this was the most logical placement for it...if anyone else has any other ideas for this, I would be pleased to hear them.
Changed the illustration to one that displays the difference between normal and d-TGA anatomy, as well as being more descriptive. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bcatt ( talk • contribs) 05:36, 18 November 2005 (UTC)
Thanks for all your great work! I have a concern though -- you state "I've recapitalized 'Transposition of the Great Arteries' as the wikipedia naming guidelines recommend this method to be used for proper names." But from my experience here, most diseases only use capital letters when it is an eponymous disease. -- Arcadian 14:25, 18 November 2005 (UTC)
"Single loud S2 heart sound" is something that is heard ( auscultated) with a stethoscope. "Right axis deviation" is a reading of an ECG. Hypertrophy means that the muscle of the heart (usually just one ventricle, or part of one) is thickened, cardiomegaly means that the whole heart is enlarged. These two concepts are not interchangeable.
I think the part about intensive care of children are good, but it should perhaps be an areticle of its own? -- Ekko 21:03, 3 January 2006 (UTC)
bcatt 02:16, 27 January 2006 (UTC)
If we can put in a little about what makes the Mustard preferable, it would fill out the atrial switch section a little. Is it because of the technical complexity of the Senning? Have they developed a method to avoid the obstruction problems presented by use of synthetic material in the Mustard? I mention these two in the history section of the Jatene procedure article, so it would be good to integrate anything we can into there as well. bcatt 08:53, 10 February 2006 (UTC)
As a medical professional, images of babies with tubes & lines and such do not bother me at all, but I was concerned that others viewing this article might find the images offensive. Instead of removing them (since they do have value & add to the article), I felt that reducing their size was an appropriate middle ground. If anybody wants to see the larger size, they can just click on the image. My only other concern is with privacy issues (HIPAA in the U.S.). 2112 rush 13:27, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
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I am concerned that the "Support" section reads as an advertisement and does not follow Wikipedia guidelines on grammatical conventions. I believe it should be noted that support groups exist online and otherwise, but the two specific groups mentioned seem to be advertising themselves. 132.183.13.29 ( talk) 19:09, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
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I've recapitalized "Transposition of the Great Arteries" as the wikipedia naming guidelines recommend this method to be used for proper names.
Expanded the definition portion of the article.
I'm changing "deoxygenated" back to "oxygen-depleted"...I had used "deoxygenated" in my original version of the article, but found that it sounded awkward in the sentence, and since "oxygenated" occurs in the same sentence, it also sounds repetitive. I chose to use oxygen-depleted instead and found that it improved the sound of the sentence considerably. The two words are absolutely synonymous, so this shouldn't be a problem. With considerable work, this article has feature potential, so it should sound good as well as being factually accurate.
I've removed "(which rises anteriorly from the right ventricle)" and "(rises posteriorly from the left ventricle)" and given these specifics in the opening description, mostly to improve readability, but also to keep tings organized: this paragraph is talking about how the blood is flowing, not the anatomical specifics. The reader also has the illustration to refer to while reading this paragraph. I think this should work.
I have reluctantly removed the following paragraph:
There's a few reasons: there are a number of variants and this wording seems to limit it to these three, which are simply the most common variants; I suspect these statistics are based on the population of the continental US, not on actual worldwide statistics, I should like the demographics of the base of statistics, preferably, worldwide statistics should be shown, or if they cannot be found, it should be specified what demographic the statistics refer to. I have added a "Statistics" heading at the bottom of the page, to avoid having them scattered throughout the page, which can be confusing; I think the statistics should be displayed as a dynamic list. I am not saying that this info should be kept out, merely that I would like to see it added in a way that is more organized and relevent (ie: not based on a single country); this list created another repitition, because the same accompanying defects are discussed in the paragraph immediatly following...so, my suggestion is simply to stay on topic within each heading, and to give statistics their own heading.
I added the "logical fallicy/circular" link back in because I find it appropriately descriptive...if you want to remove it, please discuss it here first. The same is true for the "cardio" and "pulmonary" links in the same paragraph, they help to explain to the reader what is meant by the medical jargon, please use the discussion page first if you wish to change this.
Put the acronyms back into the simple/complex TGA section...I can't see why they were removed...it is a common wikipedia practice to provide a commonly used acronym if one exists, so that is what I have done.
Removed "These other heart defects are essential for survival because without them the body will never get any oxygenated blood" because the wording is bordering on POV, and have explained it more neutrally and in detail in a following paragraph.
I have temporarily removed the info on cc-TGA in preparation to move it to it's own page. This article has always been a d-TGA article - adding in the ccTGA info causes confusion, and at least as much info can be summoned up to create a substantial article for cc-TGA independantly...I have been working on this a bit, but I do not have the experience with it that I do with d-TGA, so all my knowledge of it comes from raw research. Any help on this would be appreciated.
Added lots of expansion in the clinical details, however, was unable to integrate a few details, as I am not sure how they work. Please explain the following symptoms so I (or someone else) can work them in: "Right ventricular heave", "Single loud S2 heart sound", and "Right axis deviation". Also, I'm not sure that there is any difference between hypertrophy or cardiomegaly, so I opted to use the one that would be easier for the average reader to pronounce, and therefore the easiest to read. If I am mistaken and there is a difference, please do let me know the difference as I have been unable to discern it.
Moved DiseaseDisorder Infobox into the description section in order to unclutter the top of the page, and I figured this was the most logical placement for it...if anyone else has any other ideas for this, I would be pleased to hear them.
Changed the illustration to one that displays the difference between normal and d-TGA anatomy, as well as being more descriptive. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bcatt ( talk • contribs) 05:36, 18 November 2005 (UTC)
Thanks for all your great work! I have a concern though -- you state "I've recapitalized 'Transposition of the Great Arteries' as the wikipedia naming guidelines recommend this method to be used for proper names." But from my experience here, most diseases only use capital letters when it is an eponymous disease. -- Arcadian 14:25, 18 November 2005 (UTC)
"Single loud S2 heart sound" is something that is heard ( auscultated) with a stethoscope. "Right axis deviation" is a reading of an ECG. Hypertrophy means that the muscle of the heart (usually just one ventricle, or part of one) is thickened, cardiomegaly means that the whole heart is enlarged. These two concepts are not interchangeable.
I think the part about intensive care of children are good, but it should perhaps be an areticle of its own? -- Ekko 21:03, 3 January 2006 (UTC)
bcatt 02:16, 27 January 2006 (UTC)
If we can put in a little about what makes the Mustard preferable, it would fill out the atrial switch section a little. Is it because of the technical complexity of the Senning? Have they developed a method to avoid the obstruction problems presented by use of synthetic material in the Mustard? I mention these two in the history section of the Jatene procedure article, so it would be good to integrate anything we can into there as well. bcatt 08:53, 10 February 2006 (UTC)
As a medical professional, images of babies with tubes & lines and such do not bother me at all, but I was concerned that others viewing this article might find the images offensive. Instead of removing them (since they do have value & add to the article), I felt that reducing their size was an appropriate middle ground. If anybody wants to see the larger size, they can just click on the image. My only other concern is with privacy issues (HIPAA in the U.S.). 2112 rush 13:27, 10 April 2007 (UTC)
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I am concerned that the "Support" section reads as an advertisement and does not follow Wikipedia guidelines on grammatical conventions. I believe it should be noted that support groups exist online and otherwise, but the two specific groups mentioned seem to be advertising themselves. 132.183.13.29 ( talk) 19:09, 5 September 2018 (UTC)