Calvin999 thanks for taking this up, but would you mind if I ask you to review some of the older nominations if you please? I just nominated this yesterday so I think it can wait for sometime. —
Indian:BIO[
ChitChat ]13:25, 4 August 2015 (UTC)reply
I wanted to, then thought leave it. Let FOPM have the full credit. Chuck that, I went ahead and added my name, I did quite the cleanup for the whole article myself too. —
Indian:BIO[
ChitChat ]09:14, 5 August 2015 (UTC)reply
Is Madonna credited in the booklet as just Madonna, or Madonna Ciccone? I thought for songwriting credits, she used the later
by American singer → by American singer and songwriter
While on early stages of the album, → During the early stages of the album,
Madonna was encouraged by her manager to work with him and his team of songwriters. → Who?
worked in seven → worked on seven
was born after → was composed after
and the search → and her search?
, and the desire → Remove 'and' (too many successive uses of 'and' in this sentence)
with musical similarity → with similarities
from music critics → from critics
reaching the top-twenty in five countries. → list them
of his hits. → of his music.
There is a lot of repetition of 'the song' in the Critical reception section, but you only write "Devil Pray" once at the start. Some more variety is needed.
I don't think there's any need to overlook the people involved in the Credits and personnel section.
Ref 4: Digital Spy shouldn't be italics
Same for Ref 6 (Are you choosing to link every instance the publication is used?)
Calvin999 thanks again for taking the time to review and I'm glad you like the song, even its one of my favorites too. I have addressed all the points so please check and let me know if I missed anything. —
Indian:BIO[
ChitChat ]13:32, 9 August 2015 (UTC)reply
Calvin999 thanks for taking this up, but would you mind if I ask you to review some of the older nominations if you please? I just nominated this yesterday so I think it can wait for sometime. —
Indian:BIO[
ChitChat ]13:25, 4 August 2015 (UTC)reply
I wanted to, then thought leave it. Let FOPM have the full credit. Chuck that, I went ahead and added my name, I did quite the cleanup for the whole article myself too. —
Indian:BIO[
ChitChat ]09:14, 5 August 2015 (UTC)reply
Is Madonna credited in the booklet as just Madonna, or Madonna Ciccone? I thought for songwriting credits, she used the later
by American singer → by American singer and songwriter
While on early stages of the album, → During the early stages of the album,
Madonna was encouraged by her manager to work with him and his team of songwriters. → Who?
worked in seven → worked on seven
was born after → was composed after
and the search → and her search?
, and the desire → Remove 'and' (too many successive uses of 'and' in this sentence)
with musical similarity → with similarities
from music critics → from critics
reaching the top-twenty in five countries. → list them
of his hits. → of his music.
There is a lot of repetition of 'the song' in the Critical reception section, but you only write "Devil Pray" once at the start. Some more variety is needed.
I don't think there's any need to overlook the people involved in the Credits and personnel section.
Ref 4: Digital Spy shouldn't be italics
Same for Ref 6 (Are you choosing to link every instance the publication is used?)
Calvin999 thanks again for taking the time to review and I'm glad you like the song, even its one of my favorites too. I have addressed all the points so please check and let me know if I missed anything. —
Indian:BIO[
ChitChat ]13:32, 9 August 2015 (UTC)reply