Desert pupfish was nominated as a Natural sciences good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (November 15, 2013). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated. |
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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 26 August 2021 and 25 December 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Nhwon19, Czl1028.
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Major edits were made to this organism page for a term assignment (see banner).
In the first of at least two major overhauls, I added on large section title "Biology and ecology." This section incorporates the previous "Biology" section and expands upon it greatly.
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Additions/expansions needed:
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Bakerb4379 ( talk) 07:54, 3 October 2013 (UTC)
The heading "Biology and ecology" could be changed to "Behavior and Ecology".
In the motor patterns section describing tilting and nipping, you might want to link or explain what you mean by substrate.
The information about sexual preferences, canabalism, and nest parasitism could be put under the reproduction heading. The "Reproduction" section could be renamed "Reproduction and Parenting Behavior". — Preceding unsigned comment added by Batoburen ( talk • contribs) 22:12, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
In an ongoing attempt to bring this article to GA status, I have added the following:
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Bakerb4379 (
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VAleles ( talk) 23:10, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
MLiu19 ( talk) 23:44, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
1) "Furthermore, though pupfish may engage in filial cannibalism, males have been observed to distinguish between eggs fertilized by themselves and by other males using olfactory cues. This behavior has been suggested as an analogue to the rejection of alien eggs by avian victims of nest parasitism." --> "Furthermore, though pupfish may engage in filial cannibalism, males have been observed using olfactory cues to distinguish between eggs fertilized by themselves and those fertilized by other males. This behavior has been suggested to be an analogue to the rejection of alien eggs by avian victims of nest parasitism."
2) "Sidling by the male causes the female to s-shape, which causes to male to s-shape and concurrently wrap his anal fin around the female’s vent." --> "Sidling by the male causes the female to form an S-shape, which causes the male to also form an S-shape and concurrently wrap his anal fin around the female’s vent.?
3) "Though the pair usually separates to leave one fertilized egg in the substrate, the female will very occasionally immediately s-shape and both fish will again perform the sequence through jerking." --> "Though the pair usually separates to leave one fertilized egg in the substrate, the female will very occasionally immediately form an S-shape and both fish will again perform the jerking sequence."
4) "Though they may breed during their first summer, most pupfish do not reproduce until their second summer." --> "Though they may start to breed during their first summer, most pupfish do not reproduce until their second."
5) "It has been noted that the desert pupfish are more abundant in environments with high vegetative cover, pH, and salinity, and low dissolved oxygen and sediment factors, suggesting that living in extreme conditions allows them to survive in environments that are hostile to invasive or nonnative fishes." ---> "The desert pupfish has been noted to be more abundant in environments with high vegetative cover, pH and salinity, and low dissolved oxygen and sediment factors, thus suggesting that living in extreme conditions allows them to survive in environments that are hostile to invasive or nonnative fish." — Preceding unsigned comment added by W.lin17 ( talk • contribs) 04:43, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
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I'll take a look at this one. Comments to follow. -- Yzx ( talk) 17:36, 28 October 2013 (UTC)
There's much good information here, but the organization and prose can be improved, and there could be many more wikilinks. The main content issue is the unorganized list of behaviors. -- Yzx ( talk) 04:59, 29 October 2013 (UTC)
Hello, I am new to Wikipedia and am participating in an article review as part of an undergraduate course. Are all of the motor patterns from a single source, reference number 20? I am not sure if this is an issue, but is there a way to make this obvious other than just having one reference at the end of the list? I know that user Yzx would like to see more articles linked in this article; perhaps the motor pattern section could link to "Animal locomotion," which discusses some of the physics of swimming and has a section on locomotion energetics. I changed the first sentence of the motor pattern section with the word "movement" now linking to "Animal locomotion." Feel free to change this if you think there is a better place for it.
I am unsure if anyone is interested in adding more information to the article, but I suggest looking at "Condition status of the endangered desert pupfish, Cyprinodon macularius Baird and Girard, 1853, in the Lower Colorado River Basin (Mexico)" by Ruiz-Campos, G. (2013) and "Distribution, habitat, and conservation status of desert pupfish (Cyprinodon macularius) in the Lower Colorado River Basin, Mexico" by Varela-Romero, A. (2002)
Also, I am not nominating this article for good article status, I have already been notified about the nomination back log. I have not nominated any articles yet and do not plan to do so in the future.
Amruthapk ( talk) 02:00, 12 November 2013 (UTC)
Please do not nominate this for GA status. If this is for the wikipedia assignment 9, read the new guidelines as sent out by the course TAs. You are making unnecessary work for the GA reviewers (i.e. several months worth), and you should consider revoking your previous nominations. Bakerb4379 ( talk) 01:46, 12 November 2013 (UTC)
Hello Bakerb4379, please see my comment above. I know about the backlog and I have no nominations to revoke. Thanks. Amruthapk ( talk) 02:02, 12 November 2013 (UTC)
It's been almost three weeks since the article was nominated for GA and I've yet to see substantial progress made towards addressing its issues, so thus I must fail the nomination. The main editors are welcome to renominate the article for GA once improvements are made and they are prepared to invest time into addressing reviewer concerns. -- Yzx ( talk) 15:23, 15 November 2013 (UTC)
Desert pupfish was nominated as a Natural sciences good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (November 15, 2013). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated. |
This article is rated B-class on Wikipedia's
content assessment scale. It is of interest to the following WikiProjects: | |||||||||||
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This article was the subject of an educational assignment in Fall 2013. Further details were available on the "Education Program:Washington University in St. Louis/Behavioral Ecology (Fall 2013)" page, which is now unavailable on the wiki. |
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 26 August 2021 and 25 December 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Nhwon19, Czl1028.
Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT ( talk) 19:59, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
Major edits were made to this organism page for a term assignment (see banner).
In the first of at least two major overhauls, I added on large section title "Biology and ecology." This section incorporates the previous "Biology" section and expands upon it greatly.
Additions of note:
Additions/expansions needed:
Also required:
Bakerb4379 ( talk) 07:54, 3 October 2013 (UTC)
The heading "Biology and ecology" could be changed to "Behavior and Ecology".
In the motor patterns section describing tilting and nipping, you might want to link or explain what you mean by substrate.
The information about sexual preferences, canabalism, and nest parasitism could be put under the reproduction heading. The "Reproduction" section could be renamed "Reproduction and Parenting Behavior". — Preceding unsigned comment added by Batoburen ( talk • contribs) 22:12, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
In an ongoing attempt to bring this article to GA status, I have added the following:
I have also rewritten/changed:
I have relocated
Possible areas of further improvement:
Bakerb4379 (
talk) 22:44, 24 October 2013 (UTC)
VAleles ( talk) 23:10, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
MLiu19 ( talk) 23:44, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
1) "Furthermore, though pupfish may engage in filial cannibalism, males have been observed to distinguish between eggs fertilized by themselves and by other males using olfactory cues. This behavior has been suggested as an analogue to the rejection of alien eggs by avian victims of nest parasitism." --> "Furthermore, though pupfish may engage in filial cannibalism, males have been observed using olfactory cues to distinguish between eggs fertilized by themselves and those fertilized by other males. This behavior has been suggested to be an analogue to the rejection of alien eggs by avian victims of nest parasitism."
2) "Sidling by the male causes the female to s-shape, which causes to male to s-shape and concurrently wrap his anal fin around the female’s vent." --> "Sidling by the male causes the female to form an S-shape, which causes the male to also form an S-shape and concurrently wrap his anal fin around the female’s vent.?
3) "Though the pair usually separates to leave one fertilized egg in the substrate, the female will very occasionally immediately s-shape and both fish will again perform the sequence through jerking." --> "Though the pair usually separates to leave one fertilized egg in the substrate, the female will very occasionally immediately form an S-shape and both fish will again perform the jerking sequence."
4) "Though they may breed during their first summer, most pupfish do not reproduce until their second summer." --> "Though they may start to breed during their first summer, most pupfish do not reproduce until their second."
5) "It has been noted that the desert pupfish are more abundant in environments with high vegetative cover, pH, and salinity, and low dissolved oxygen and sediment factors, suggesting that living in extreme conditions allows them to survive in environments that are hostile to invasive or nonnative fishes." ---> "The desert pupfish has been noted to be more abundant in environments with high vegetative cover, pH and salinity, and low dissolved oxygen and sediment factors, thus suggesting that living in extreme conditions allows them to survive in environments that are hostile to invasive or nonnative fish." — Preceding unsigned comment added by W.lin17 ( talk • contribs) 04:43, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Yzx ( talk · contribs) 17:36, 28 October 2013 (UTC)
I'll take a look at this one. Comments to follow. -- Yzx ( talk) 17:36, 28 October 2013 (UTC)
There's much good information here, but the organization and prose can be improved, and there could be many more wikilinks. The main content issue is the unorganized list of behaviors. -- Yzx ( talk) 04:59, 29 October 2013 (UTC)
Hello, I am new to Wikipedia and am participating in an article review as part of an undergraduate course. Are all of the motor patterns from a single source, reference number 20? I am not sure if this is an issue, but is there a way to make this obvious other than just having one reference at the end of the list? I know that user Yzx would like to see more articles linked in this article; perhaps the motor pattern section could link to "Animal locomotion," which discusses some of the physics of swimming and has a section on locomotion energetics. I changed the first sentence of the motor pattern section with the word "movement" now linking to "Animal locomotion." Feel free to change this if you think there is a better place for it.
I am unsure if anyone is interested in adding more information to the article, but I suggest looking at "Condition status of the endangered desert pupfish, Cyprinodon macularius Baird and Girard, 1853, in the Lower Colorado River Basin (Mexico)" by Ruiz-Campos, G. (2013) and "Distribution, habitat, and conservation status of desert pupfish (Cyprinodon macularius) in the Lower Colorado River Basin, Mexico" by Varela-Romero, A. (2002)
Also, I am not nominating this article for good article status, I have already been notified about the nomination back log. I have not nominated any articles yet and do not plan to do so in the future.
Amruthapk ( talk) 02:00, 12 November 2013 (UTC)
Please do not nominate this for GA status. If this is for the wikipedia assignment 9, read the new guidelines as sent out by the course TAs. You are making unnecessary work for the GA reviewers (i.e. several months worth), and you should consider revoking your previous nominations. Bakerb4379 ( talk) 01:46, 12 November 2013 (UTC)
Hello Bakerb4379, please see my comment above. I know about the backlog and I have no nominations to revoke. Thanks. Amruthapk ( talk) 02:02, 12 November 2013 (UTC)
It's been almost three weeks since the article was nominated for GA and I've yet to see substantial progress made towards addressing its issues, so thus I must fail the nomination. The main editors are welcome to renominate the article for GA once improvements are made and they are prepared to invest time into addressing reviewer concerns. -- Yzx ( talk) 15:23, 15 November 2013 (UTC)