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Reviewer: Yunshui ( talk · contribs) 11:29, 13 February 2017 (UTC)
Smashing article; I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It's incredibly close to GA, I just have one minor concern about the use of sources (see below):
However, the prose overall is excellent: readable, varied and interesting. The above are minor niggles, and so I'm happy to pass this for 1a. In terms of MOS compliance, I see a few instances of words to watch but most of these are correct in context; I would suggest perhaps reviewing the wording in instances where the opinions of the sources are used (e.g. Some have drawn comparisons between the alphabet and the Old Turkic script, saying that writing in the new alphabet could be mistaken from afar as a Turkish tax list. or Others have claimed that the new railroad doomed the alphabet ) but in these cases the citations make the source of the opinion clear, so I see no reason not to pass on this account.
In terms of the usage in the article, there are arguably several images that don't add much to the reader's understanding of the topic - for example, the wording for File:WikipediaTheFreeEncyclopedia-DeseretAlphabet.svg already appears in the xkcd image, and the Deseret text in File:Peoples Ticket, Salt Lake City, circa 1876, Mormons, front of.jpg is tangential to the image (and nonsensical to boot), though it would be a good example of Deseret being used decoratively if such a section were present in the article text. However, in a long article like this it's good to have images that break up the flow of text a bit.
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Reviewer: Yunshui ( talk · contribs) 11:29, 13 February 2017 (UTC)
Smashing article; I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It's incredibly close to GA, I just have one minor concern about the use of sources (see below):
However, the prose overall is excellent: readable, varied and interesting. The above are minor niggles, and so I'm happy to pass this for 1a. In terms of MOS compliance, I see a few instances of words to watch but most of these are correct in context; I would suggest perhaps reviewing the wording in instances where the opinions of the sources are used (e.g. Some have drawn comparisons between the alphabet and the Old Turkic script, saying that writing in the new alphabet could be mistaken from afar as a Turkish tax list. or Others have claimed that the new railroad doomed the alphabet ) but in these cases the citations make the source of the opinion clear, so I see no reason not to pass on this account.
In terms of the usage in the article, there are arguably several images that don't add much to the reader's understanding of the topic - for example, the wording for File:WikipediaTheFreeEncyclopedia-DeseretAlphabet.svg already appears in the xkcd image, and the Deseret text in File:Peoples Ticket, Salt Lake City, circa 1876, Mormons, front of.jpg is tangential to the image (and nonsensical to boot), though it would be a good example of Deseret being used decoratively if such a section were present in the article text. However, in a long article like this it's good to have images that break up the flow of text a bit.