Doesn't look like he had a very notable amateur career, but he did win the 1968 British Junior Billiards Championship, and you can use "cite book |last1=Williams |first1=Luke |last2=Gadsby |first2=Paul |date=2005 |title=Masters of the Baize |location=Edinburgh |publisher=Mainstream |page=127 |isbn=1840188723" if you want to include that.
Thisismoney is a Mail on Sunday article, so I think isn't regarded as a suitable source.
This seems to verify the info.
"he was the son a lorry driver with six other siblings" - something like "he was the son of a lorry driver, and had six siblings"
"Over the next couple of years" - "Over the next few years" (it was more than a couple)
"1977 losing to Thorburn 18–16" - I think it would benefit from a comma: "1977, losing to Thorburn 18–16"
"1979 final" - I think the link should probably just be on the 1979.
"Beginning the new season at the 1984 Jameson International, his mother died." - something like "His mother died as he was beginning the new season at the 1984 Jameson International"
"first tournament victory" - I suggest "first ranking tournament victory". He won the 1982 Irish Professional Championship, as an example of an earlier win.
"to trail 7–9 overnight after two" - consider "to trail 7–9 overnight after the second"
"62–59 with one ball remaining, worth seven points" - I think should be ""62–59 with one ball, worth seven points, remaining"
"The final was broadcast to a peak audience of 18 million viewers in the United Kingdom. As of 2020 this is the highest viewership of any broadcast after midnight in the country,and a record for any programme shown on BBC2. and is considered by many to be the greatest snooker match in history" - how about "The final is considered by many to be the greatest snooker match in history and was broadcast to a peak audience of 18 million viewers in the United Kingdom. As of 2020 this is the highest viewership of any broadcast after midnight in the country, and a record for any programme shown on BBC2."?
"received a victory parade before 10,000 people" - "received a victory parade that 10,000 attended"?
"Taylor reached the final of the 1987 Masters for the only time in his career." - maybe "In 1987 Taylor reached the final of the Masters for the only time in his career."
"Taylor teamed with Higgins to form a Northern Irish team" - suggest rewording, as there was a third team member. Something like "Taylor, Higgins and Tommy Murphy were the Northern Ireland team"
"After this, Higgins threatened Taylor" - why?
"For the rest of the decade, his form dropped," - probably not continually, so maybe a slight reword.
" 11 weeks in the UK Singles Chart" - suggest adding the year.
"The spectacles were often a joking point on the song," - I think there's only one line about them.
"and also commented on specifically by John Virgo" either a new sentence or make it a bit clearer that Virgo's comments weren't in the song.
"After retiring from the Tour, Taylor plays matches has been a commentator and analyst for snooker events for the BBC since 1997" needs a little reworking.
The Royal Mail office opening seems a bit random among what must have been hundreds of exhibitions and promotional appearances, but no harm in keeping it.
Performance and rankings timeline
I checked a sample, looks OK.
Career finals
I verified most results using the CueSport book (cite book |last1=Hayton |first1=Eric |last2=Dee |first2=John |date=2004 |title=The CueSport Book of Professional Snooker: The Complete Record & History |publisher=Rose Villa Publications|isbn=978-0954854904 |pages 940–943). It might be worth adding this as a source.
As for the others:
1975 Pot Black, 1976 Pot Black (could use cite book |last=Morrison|first=Ian |date=1989 |title=Snooker: records, facts and champions |publisher=Guinness Superlatives Ltd |isbn=0851123643 |page=89 )
1979 Bombay International (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions page=97 )
1980 Australian Masters (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions page=97 )
1984 Professional Snooker League (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=107 )
1985 Thailand Masters (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=108 )
1986 Australian Masters (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions page=97 )
1987 Matchroom Professional Championship (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=109 )
1995 Charity Challenge - may be on the Turner site.
1980 Pontins Camber Sands Open (could use cite book |last=Everton |first=Clive |date=1981 |title=The Guinness Book of Snooker |publisher=Guinness Superlatives Ltd |isbn=0851122302 |page=101) (Foulds recieved 30 points per frame)
World Cup 1985-1987 (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=98 )
1987 World Doubles (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=103)
Consider adding a mention of his Irish Professional Championship wins into the body. (Not a requirement, as these are less notable than the events which are mentioned.)
Thanks
Lee Vilenski - I've got a couple of minor comments on the lead, above. (I left looking at that until last.) Not sure whether it's worth redlinking the 1968 British Junior Billiards Championship - maybe just link to British Junior Billiards Championship as that's more likely to be created. Possibly in the next few days.
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk)
22:07, 29 June 2020 (UTC)reply
Doesn't look like he had a very notable amateur career, but he did win the 1968 British Junior Billiards Championship, and you can use "cite book |last1=Williams |first1=Luke |last2=Gadsby |first2=Paul |date=2005 |title=Masters of the Baize |location=Edinburgh |publisher=Mainstream |page=127 |isbn=1840188723" if you want to include that.
Thisismoney is a Mail on Sunday article, so I think isn't regarded as a suitable source.
This seems to verify the info.
"he was the son a lorry driver with six other siblings" - something like "he was the son of a lorry driver, and had six siblings"
"Over the next couple of years" - "Over the next few years" (it was more than a couple)
"1977 losing to Thorburn 18–16" - I think it would benefit from a comma: "1977, losing to Thorburn 18–16"
"1979 final" - I think the link should probably just be on the 1979.
"Beginning the new season at the 1984 Jameson International, his mother died." - something like "His mother died as he was beginning the new season at the 1984 Jameson International"
"first tournament victory" - I suggest "first ranking tournament victory". He won the 1982 Irish Professional Championship, as an example of an earlier win.
"to trail 7–9 overnight after two" - consider "to trail 7–9 overnight after the second"
"62–59 with one ball remaining, worth seven points" - I think should be ""62–59 with one ball, worth seven points, remaining"
"The final was broadcast to a peak audience of 18 million viewers in the United Kingdom. As of 2020 this is the highest viewership of any broadcast after midnight in the country,and a record for any programme shown on BBC2. and is considered by many to be the greatest snooker match in history" - how about "The final is considered by many to be the greatest snooker match in history and was broadcast to a peak audience of 18 million viewers in the United Kingdom. As of 2020 this is the highest viewership of any broadcast after midnight in the country, and a record for any programme shown on BBC2."?
"received a victory parade before 10,000 people" - "received a victory parade that 10,000 attended"?
"Taylor reached the final of the 1987 Masters for the only time in his career." - maybe "In 1987 Taylor reached the final of the Masters for the only time in his career."
"Taylor teamed with Higgins to form a Northern Irish team" - suggest rewording, as there was a third team member. Something like "Taylor, Higgins and Tommy Murphy were the Northern Ireland team"
"After this, Higgins threatened Taylor" - why?
"For the rest of the decade, his form dropped," - probably not continually, so maybe a slight reword.
" 11 weeks in the UK Singles Chart" - suggest adding the year.
"The spectacles were often a joking point on the song," - I think there's only one line about them.
"and also commented on specifically by John Virgo" either a new sentence or make it a bit clearer that Virgo's comments weren't in the song.
"After retiring from the Tour, Taylor plays matches has been a commentator and analyst for snooker events for the BBC since 1997" needs a little reworking.
The Royal Mail office opening seems a bit random among what must have been hundreds of exhibitions and promotional appearances, but no harm in keeping it.
Performance and rankings timeline
I checked a sample, looks OK.
Career finals
I verified most results using the CueSport book (cite book |last1=Hayton |first1=Eric |last2=Dee |first2=John |date=2004 |title=The CueSport Book of Professional Snooker: The Complete Record & History |publisher=Rose Villa Publications|isbn=978-0954854904 |pages 940–943). It might be worth adding this as a source.
As for the others:
1975 Pot Black, 1976 Pot Black (could use cite book |last=Morrison|first=Ian |date=1989 |title=Snooker: records, facts and champions |publisher=Guinness Superlatives Ltd |isbn=0851123643 |page=89 )
1979 Bombay International (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions page=97 )
1980 Australian Masters (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions page=97 )
1984 Professional Snooker League (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=107 )
1985 Thailand Masters (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=108 )
1986 Australian Masters (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions page=97 )
1987 Matchroom Professional Championship (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=109 )
1995 Charity Challenge - may be on the Turner site.
1980 Pontins Camber Sands Open (could use cite book |last=Everton |first=Clive |date=1981 |title=The Guinness Book of Snooker |publisher=Guinness Superlatives Ltd |isbn=0851122302 |page=101) (Foulds recieved 30 points per frame)
World Cup 1985-1987 (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=98 )
1987 World Doubles (could use Snooker: records, facts and champions, page=103)
Consider adding a mention of his Irish Professional Championship wins into the body. (Not a requirement, as these are less notable than the events which are mentioned.)
Thanks
Lee Vilenski - I've got a couple of minor comments on the lead, above. (I left looking at that until last.) Not sure whether it's worth redlinking the 1968 British Junior Billiards Championship - maybe just link to British Junior Billiards Championship as that's more likely to be created. Possibly in the next few days.
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk)
22:07, 29 June 2020 (UTC)reply