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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina ( talk · contribs) 20:18, 18 March 2021 (UTC) reply

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina ( talk) 20:18, 18 March 2021 (UTC) reply

Infobox and lead

• In the infobox: "US" → "U.S."
• Birthdate needs a source (either in infobox or lead).
• Lead summarizes the article so that's in good shape.

Early life and career

• Remove the commas after "study electronics" and "2016 presidential election".
• Everything is sourced so I couldn't find any other issues in this section.

Storming of the Capitol

• Every word in "first responder unit" should be capitalized.
• "were charged" → "was charged"
• Recite sources at the end of each quote per WP:CITE.
• "they are" → "they're"
  • Shouldn't we avoid contractions as per MOS:CONTRACTIONS? Edge3 ( talk) 03:48, 19 March 2021 (UTC) reply

I guess we should. Thanks for the link!

Homicide investigation

• Link CNN.
• CNN actually says that it was "the DC Metropolitan Police Department's homicide branch".
• Move the reference after "murder" to the end of the sentence it is in.

Memorials and funeral

• This section looks good (no issues).

References and other comments

• Mark references from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
• Mark references from The Washington Post with "|url-access=limited".
• CBS New York → WCBS-TV
• New York Times → The New York Times
• Washington Post → The Washington Post
• Try to be consistent whether or not to italicize certain sources such as CNN.
• Sources are all already archived.
• Optional, but try linking websites in each reference.
  • I'm not sure what you mean. Could you please clarify this suggestion? Edge3 ( talk) 03:48, 19 March 2021 (UTC) reply

For example, if a reference is from The New York Times, link it with "|website=[[The New York Times]]".

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR): d ( copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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@ Some Dude From North Carolina: Thanks for your suggestions! I think I've addressed most of them, and left comments for two items that I had questions about. Let me know if I missed anything on your list, or if there are other suggestions that you have! Edge3 ( talk) 03:48, 19 March 2021 (UTC) reply

@ Edge3: Thanks for the quick reply. I have responded to both of your comments above. Some Dude From North Carolina ( talk) 11:42, 19 March 2021 (UTC) reply

Anyway, since most of my main suggestions have already been addressed, I'm passing the article. Some Dude From North Carolina ( talk) 12:18, 19 March 2021 (UTC) reply