Nothing major to fix, just a few small changes. "Luckily, Krusty's trained chimp Mr. Teeny sees the life-threatening explosives, which he throws into the network executives' office, killing them, though, they reconstitute themselves." -> I know you explain this later, but you could probably do with clarifying what you mean by "reconstitute themselves" here since it's the first mention. "He announces his departure of the Krusty the Klown show after the executives give him notes during filming of a sketch" -> should be departure from. DVD Talk's Jason Bailey wrote that both "Insane Clown Poppy" and "Day of the Jackanapes" "really shine" -> if you phrase it as "DVD Talk's Jason Bailey wrote that this episode and "Insane Clown Poppy" both "really shine"" then you lose the awkward-looking consecutive quotation marks.
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have
fair use rationales:
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
N/A.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Just going to hold this until the 1A fixes are seen to. If you want to add an image from some of the free images of Kelsey Grammar or Al Jean, feel free, but it's entirely optional.
GRAPPLEX22:36, 24 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Since Queenieacoustic has been inactive for a few weeks I went ahead and fixed the problems. I removed the mention of the executives reconstituting themselves from the Plot section since that's not an important part of the storyline. Thanks for the review!
Theleftorium(talk)16:27, 26 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Looks good to me. Was going to fix it myself if I hadn't heard back within the week, so you've saved me the effort. :P Ready to pass this one now. Well done both of you, then.
GRAPPLEX17:40, 26 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Nothing major to fix, just a few small changes. "Luckily, Krusty's trained chimp Mr. Teeny sees the life-threatening explosives, which he throws into the network executives' office, killing them, though, they reconstitute themselves." -> I know you explain this later, but you could probably do with clarifying what you mean by "reconstitute themselves" here since it's the first mention. "He announces his departure of the Krusty the Klown show after the executives give him notes during filming of a sketch" -> should be departure from. DVD Talk's Jason Bailey wrote that both "Insane Clown Poppy" and "Day of the Jackanapes" "really shine" -> if you phrase it as "DVD Talk's Jason Bailey wrote that this episode and "Insane Clown Poppy" both "really shine"" then you lose the awkward-looking consecutive quotation marks.
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have
fair use rationales:
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
N/A.
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Just going to hold this until the 1A fixes are seen to. If you want to add an image from some of the free images of Kelsey Grammar or Al Jean, feel free, but it's entirely optional.
GRAPPLEX22:36, 24 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Since Queenieacoustic has been inactive for a few weeks I went ahead and fixed the problems. I removed the mention of the executives reconstituting themselves from the Plot section since that's not an important part of the storyline. Thanks for the review!
Theleftorium(talk)16:27, 26 August 2011 (UTC)reply
Looks good to me. Was going to fix it myself if I hadn't heard back within the week, so you've saved me the effort. :P Ready to pass this one now. Well done both of you, then.
GRAPPLEX17:40, 26 August 2011 (UTC)reply