I will be picking up the review of this one - both for the Wiki Cup and the GA cup as well. I will be making my review comments over the next couple of days.
Looking at the rest of the hits, it is mainly the quotes it detects, which look to be in order. Y
Disambiguation links
No issues Y
External links
Reference 48 needs registration, that needs to be indicated in the citation
Reference 86 needs registration, that needs to be indicated in the citation
Reference 92 has a download issue?
Well Written
Lead
"competition, and" does not need a comma
"users pay an entry fee" - I think "players" is the better term here
"prizes, while" does not need the comma
"such as most prominently" simplify to "most prominently"
Gameplay
"remainder lose" I believe it should be "remainders", plural
"they must beat" - since it's not a fight out about "defeat" or "score more points than"?
"(including college football and the NFL)" if you change it to "(both college football and the NFL)" you don't have "including" used back to back,
"as League of Legends", perhaps clarify with "as the League of Legends online game" or words to that effect?
Early examples
"but later shut down." - do you have a year you can put on that?
Growth
", and realizing" perhaps use "when he realized"
"same month, the National" I think you don't need the comma
"The company also planned to expand the scope of its MLB partnership." this sentence says nothing really.
The sentence starting with "In October 2014" should be moved up so it's chronological and comes before 2015
Mainstream popularity
"The mainstream growth of daily fantasy sports heading into 2015 was credited to several factors, including the convenience of the format in comparison to season-length fantasy sports, aggressive marketing campaigns focusing on prospective cash prizes (with some contests featuring advertised cash prices of up to $1 million), as well as their availability on mobile devices—which compliments technologically-oriented lifestyles." - that's quite a long sentence, can it be reworded as perhaps two sentences?
"yearly, and that" does not need the comma
"FanDuel and DraftKings also expanded" the use of the word "also" would imply others had done it first, but the article does not state that?
Increased scrutiny
Is August considered "late" in the year? I would think it more like "mid-2015"
"lawsuit was settled out of court" - I assume it was settled without the details being divulged?
Classification as gambling
typo "activitiy" should of course be "activity"
What does "IAmA" stand for?
Legal definitions of skill and chance
"statutes are found" - does not need the word "are"
"found in Title 18, such as the Federal Wire Act," - sounds like "Title 18" is in a lot of acts? but this is Title 18 of the Federal Wire Act specifically right? If so then "such as" is not appropriate.
UIGEA carve-out
using the term nor in the "banks, nor cover" seems to reflect back to something I am not seeing, I do not see the "neither" portion of the "neither/nor" structure.
Self-imposted restrictions
Title typo - should be "imposed"
Legal challenges
"Due to the uncertain legality of DFS under local gambling laws in their opinions" makes it sound like it was totally their choice - article states that some were directly illegal and others were "clearly unfriendly", not what the article states.
"Attorney General Lisa Madigan ruled under" should be "ruled that under"
"The sites may continue to operate pending the result of court hearings." since time has passed please state it categorically, they either did or did not operate.
"arguments square with existing Texas law" too informal a phrase.
"He also, however", reoder to "However, he also stated"
New York ruling and lawsuit
"they may continue" should be "they could continue"
"On March 21, 2016, DraftKings and FanDuel agreed to cease offering paid games in the state of New York, and abide by the results of an appellate court hearing scheduled to occur in September 2016, assuming that DFS legislation is not passed by then, which will determine if the services must pay restitution." that is a little unclear, can you tighten up the language, perhaps less "run-on"ish?
Sources/verifiable
I am seeing references that do not list the date of the article, any time the article has a date listed it should be listed in the reference to ensure we have the appropriate time reference
I see various sources that do not have an author listed in the reference but there is one listed on the article. Should always be included when it is known.
In places a source is listed as "Re/code" and others simply as "Recode" yet it's the same website. Be consistent please.
Reference 67 is a 14 page PDF, can we get a specific page reference so we don't have to trawl through all 14 pages to find the citation
The rest are looking reliable and other than formatting are fine.
Broad in coverage
I believe so yes
Neutral
So starting out by using the term "rake-off" and then linking to an article that defines it as "a bribe" is not really a good way to stay neutral. Alright that's a much better explanation, thank you.
MPJ-US21:42, 30 March 2016 (UTC)reply
the term "it has been argued" or "it has been debated" without any qualifiers is considered
weasel words
Stable
I am not seeing a significant amount of edit warring. it's a topic that's in the news a lot and seems to draw in a lot of people adding and removing stuff but not what i would consider a content war. I am glad to see that there was a dedicated effort to take the "advertising" elements out of it, not turning it into a directory of DFS site.
Illustrated / Images
None, shame
@
ViperSnake151: - I have completed my review for now and I am putting the article on hold for up to 7 days to allow improvements to be made to it. Let me know if you need more time or have questions etc.
MPJ-US23:24, 30 March 2016 (UTC)reply
@
ViperSnake151: - I really have not seen much activity since April 6, five days and I see some issues that have not been either fixed or addressed. I am just wondering where you're at with this? if it hits seven days of no activity and no input from you I will consider closing it
I will be picking up the review of this one - both for the Wiki Cup and the GA cup as well. I will be making my review comments over the next couple of days.
Looking at the rest of the hits, it is mainly the quotes it detects, which look to be in order. Y
Disambiguation links
No issues Y
External links
Reference 48 needs registration, that needs to be indicated in the citation
Reference 86 needs registration, that needs to be indicated in the citation
Reference 92 has a download issue?
Well Written
Lead
"competition, and" does not need a comma
"users pay an entry fee" - I think "players" is the better term here
"prizes, while" does not need the comma
"such as most prominently" simplify to "most prominently"
Gameplay
"remainder lose" I believe it should be "remainders", plural
"they must beat" - since it's not a fight out about "defeat" or "score more points than"?
"(including college football and the NFL)" if you change it to "(both college football and the NFL)" you don't have "including" used back to back,
"as League of Legends", perhaps clarify with "as the League of Legends online game" or words to that effect?
Early examples
"but later shut down." - do you have a year you can put on that?
Growth
", and realizing" perhaps use "when he realized"
"same month, the National" I think you don't need the comma
"The company also planned to expand the scope of its MLB partnership." this sentence says nothing really.
The sentence starting with "In October 2014" should be moved up so it's chronological and comes before 2015
Mainstream popularity
"The mainstream growth of daily fantasy sports heading into 2015 was credited to several factors, including the convenience of the format in comparison to season-length fantasy sports, aggressive marketing campaigns focusing on prospective cash prizes (with some contests featuring advertised cash prices of up to $1 million), as well as their availability on mobile devices—which compliments technologically-oriented lifestyles." - that's quite a long sentence, can it be reworded as perhaps two sentences?
"yearly, and that" does not need the comma
"FanDuel and DraftKings also expanded" the use of the word "also" would imply others had done it first, but the article does not state that?
Increased scrutiny
Is August considered "late" in the year? I would think it more like "mid-2015"
"lawsuit was settled out of court" - I assume it was settled without the details being divulged?
Classification as gambling
typo "activitiy" should of course be "activity"
What does "IAmA" stand for?
Legal definitions of skill and chance
"statutes are found" - does not need the word "are"
"found in Title 18, such as the Federal Wire Act," - sounds like "Title 18" is in a lot of acts? but this is Title 18 of the Federal Wire Act specifically right? If so then "such as" is not appropriate.
UIGEA carve-out
using the term nor in the "banks, nor cover" seems to reflect back to something I am not seeing, I do not see the "neither" portion of the "neither/nor" structure.
Self-imposted restrictions
Title typo - should be "imposed"
Legal challenges
"Due to the uncertain legality of DFS under local gambling laws in their opinions" makes it sound like it was totally their choice - article states that some were directly illegal and others were "clearly unfriendly", not what the article states.
"Attorney General Lisa Madigan ruled under" should be "ruled that under"
"The sites may continue to operate pending the result of court hearings." since time has passed please state it categorically, they either did or did not operate.
"arguments square with existing Texas law" too informal a phrase.
"He also, however", reoder to "However, he also stated"
New York ruling and lawsuit
"they may continue" should be "they could continue"
"On March 21, 2016, DraftKings and FanDuel agreed to cease offering paid games in the state of New York, and abide by the results of an appellate court hearing scheduled to occur in September 2016, assuming that DFS legislation is not passed by then, which will determine if the services must pay restitution." that is a little unclear, can you tighten up the language, perhaps less "run-on"ish?
Sources/verifiable
I am seeing references that do not list the date of the article, any time the article has a date listed it should be listed in the reference to ensure we have the appropriate time reference
I see various sources that do not have an author listed in the reference but there is one listed on the article. Should always be included when it is known.
In places a source is listed as "Re/code" and others simply as "Recode" yet it's the same website. Be consistent please.
Reference 67 is a 14 page PDF, can we get a specific page reference so we don't have to trawl through all 14 pages to find the citation
The rest are looking reliable and other than formatting are fine.
Broad in coverage
I believe so yes
Neutral
So starting out by using the term "rake-off" and then linking to an article that defines it as "a bribe" is not really a good way to stay neutral. Alright that's a much better explanation, thank you.
MPJ-US21:42, 30 March 2016 (UTC)reply
the term "it has been argued" or "it has been debated" without any qualifiers is considered
weasel words
Stable
I am not seeing a significant amount of edit warring. it's a topic that's in the news a lot and seems to draw in a lot of people adding and removing stuff but not what i would consider a content war. I am glad to see that there was a dedicated effort to take the "advertising" elements out of it, not turning it into a directory of DFS site.
Illustrated / Images
None, shame
@
ViperSnake151: - I have completed my review for now and I am putting the article on hold for up to 7 days to allow improvements to be made to it. Let me know if you need more time or have questions etc.
MPJ-US23:24, 30 March 2016 (UTC)reply
@
ViperSnake151: - I really have not seen much activity since April 6, five days and I see some issues that have not been either fixed or addressed. I am just wondering where you're at with this? if it hits seven days of no activity and no input from you I will consider closing it