I would say earlier that Aitutaki is part of the Cook Islands in the lead. In the following sentence where it mentions the series of storms affecting there, say something like "Part of a series of storms that affected the island group..." I just think a little context earlier would be good. Also, maybe it's worth mentioning just how small Aitutaki is? That would give some welcome context.
"The Joint Typhoon Warning Center... issues tropical cyclone warnings for the western Pacific Ocean and other regions." - maybe change this to southern Pacific Ocean? I usually change this note based on the basin.
"Multiple banding features soon appeared..." - you already mentioned banding. How is this different? And you later said there were no prominent banding features when it became annular
The advisory doesn't specify, "RECENT ANIMATED MULTISPECTRAL SATELLITE IMAGERY AND A 101802Z SSMIS MICROWAVE IMAGE INDICATE THAT THE LOW LEVEL CIRCULATION CENTER (LLCC) IS BEGINNING TO DECOUPLE FROM THE DEEP CONVECTION UNDER THE INFLUENCE OF INCREASING WESTERLY VERTICAL WIND SHEAR."
Cyclonebiskit (
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19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)reply
"The blue lorikeet (Vini peruviana) population suffered dramatic losses due to the storm, with the population on Aitutaki dropping by more than 50 percent." - you should somehow indicate this is an animal, considering the previous sentences were about crops and trees.
"Depression set in among members throughout community the storm-battered community once the rebuilding process began." - I think you just stated your thought twice, but just wanted to check.
I would say earlier that Aitutaki is part of the Cook Islands in the lead. In the following sentence where it mentions the series of storms affecting there, say something like "Part of a series of storms that affected the island group..." I just think a little context earlier would be good. Also, maybe it's worth mentioning just how small Aitutaki is? That would give some welcome context.
"The Joint Typhoon Warning Center... issues tropical cyclone warnings for the western Pacific Ocean and other regions." - maybe change this to southern Pacific Ocean? I usually change this note based on the basin.
"Multiple banding features soon appeared..." - you already mentioned banding. How is this different? And you later said there were no prominent banding features when it became annular
The advisory doesn't specify, "RECENT ANIMATED MULTISPECTRAL SATELLITE IMAGERY AND A 101802Z SSMIS MICROWAVE IMAGE INDICATE THAT THE LOW LEVEL CIRCULATION CENTER (LLCC) IS BEGINNING TO DECOUPLE FROM THE DEEP CONVECTION UNDER THE INFLUENCE OF INCREASING WESTERLY VERTICAL WIND SHEAR."
Cyclonebiskit (
talk)
19:18, 6 May 2015 (UTC)reply
"The blue lorikeet (Vini peruviana) population suffered dramatic losses due to the storm, with the population on Aitutaki dropping by more than 50 percent." - you should somehow indicate this is an animal, considering the previous sentences were about crops and trees.
"Depression set in among members throughout community the storm-battered community once the rebuilding process began." - I think you just stated your thought twice, but just wanted to check.