Hello Hurricanehink, I will be reviewing this article today. Overall, nice work! Knowing you (well, not IRL :P), it shouldn't be too long before this is listed as a Good Article.--
12george1 (
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16:28, 4 March 2014 (UTC)reply
"The next day the cyclone became extratropical before dissipating on January 25. A few days after Ernest struck, Tropical Storm Felapi affected the same region and produced further flooding." - I think you should split the lede into two paragraphs between these sentences. You should probably add a bit more impact, so then the paragraphs are more symmetrical. Btw, I know that Tropical Storm Felapi doesn't have an article, but maybe you should wikilink to
its section in the
2004–05 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season.
"The disturbance continued its movement to the west-southwest. On January 19 it began intensifying.[1]" - These two sentences are really short. Maybe you could merge them? For example, "The disturbance continued its movement to the west-southwest and began intensifying on January 19.[1]"
After a chat on Facebook, we both agreed that the number of missing people would be unchanged, despite a higher death toll from EMDAT.--
12george1 (
talk)
16:48, 4 March 2014 (UTC)reply
Hello Hurricanehink, I will be reviewing this article today. Overall, nice work! Knowing you (well, not IRL :P), it shouldn't be too long before this is listed as a Good Article.--
12george1 (
talk)
16:28, 4 March 2014 (UTC)reply
"The next day the cyclone became extratropical before dissipating on January 25. A few days after Ernest struck, Tropical Storm Felapi affected the same region and produced further flooding." - I think you should split the lede into two paragraphs between these sentences. You should probably add a bit more impact, so then the paragraphs are more symmetrical. Btw, I know that Tropical Storm Felapi doesn't have an article, but maybe you should wikilink to
its section in the
2004–05 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season.
"The disturbance continued its movement to the west-southwest. On January 19 it began intensifying.[1]" - These two sentences are really short. Maybe you could merge them? For example, "The disturbance continued its movement to the west-southwest and began intensifying on January 19.[1]"
After a chat on Facebook, we both agreed that the number of missing people would be unchanged, despite a higher death toll from EMDAT.--
12george1 (
talk)
16:48, 4 March 2014 (UTC)reply