I can take a look at this! Please be somewhat patient with me, as it is a long article, but I promise I'll be as thorough and quick as I can! — GhostRiver21:15, 12 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the
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Infobox and lede
Commas around "or Maspok"
"initially not involved" → "not initially involved"
Background
Economic crisis
"advocated favouring" → "advocated in favour of"
"in 1964" → "the following year"
Politicisation of reforms
"the head of the League of Communists of Macedonia (SKM) Krste Crvenkovski" → "Krste Crvenkovski, the head of the League of Communists of Macedonia (SKM),"
Peak of the reformist forces
"decided to shelve plans"
National revival
Grievances
Good
Language question
"There were also several denunciations of the Declaration on the Name and Status of the Croatian Literary Language from the SKJ within days." → "Within days, there were also several denunciations of the declaration from the SKJ."
SKH factions
Comma after "and secretary Miko Tripalo"
SKH involvement until mid-1971
The first three paragraphs all begin with "On [date]" – not quite
proseline, but still should be broken up
"Catholic Church for Croatian culture" → "Catholic Church in Croatian culture"
Demands for autonomy and a new constitution
"in establishment of the" → "in establishing"
"Serbian nationalism flared up"
No comma needed after "75 percent of the coverage would be on Croatian topics"
Outside Croatia
"were advocating annexing" → "were advocating the annexation of"
Foreign policy considerations
Comma should be after "for the independence of Croatia" rather than after "or alternatively"
Suppression and purges
November plenum and student protest
Either colon or parentheses after "hosted by the republic's leadership", but not both
Karadordevo meeting and the purges
"New Croatia" should be italicized
Aftermath
Maintenance of reforms
In the first sentence, the election of Perišin is stated to be ten months after the constitutional amendments, but the events are stated as if he was already in that position
"anti-Communist" → "anti-communist"
Pirker's death, in a sentence of its own, feels somewhat trivial, as the aftermath of his death is limited to his number of funeral attendees
"leading it to lose the support of the Serbs of Croatia." → "and subsequently lost support from the Serbs of Croatia."
Comma after "were defeated by Grbić"
Legacy in the final decades of Yugoslavia
"1970s purges" → "purges of the 1970s"
References
Purely for aesthetic reasons, it might be nice to add refbegin/refend tags on the "Sources" to put them into columns rather than having that long single-column list of small text
GhostRiver thank you very much for taking time to review this GAN. I have edited the article after your review to implement your suggestions and address issues you have raised. These include the following two which I'd like to briefly explain here too:
Perišin election dating is correct. There were two different sets of constitutional amendments: one in 1971 amending Yugoslav constitution, and another in 1972 amending the Constitution of the Socialist Republic of Croatia (all Yugoslav federated republics had their own separate constitution). I have added a brief clarification to this passage.
According to Ramet, Pirker's funeral is relevant for the article insofar that the size of the crowd following the purges (and during the period when some forms of repression against individuals associated with Croatian Spring were still ongoing) demonstrated the broad support for the ousted SKH leadership. I have added a sentence to the previously single-sentence paragraph to clarify this.
Tomobe03 Thank you for making those edits. I think that there's some confusion regarding the Perišin election. My central comment being raised here is that the structure of the sentence creates a confusing chronology. You have the main event (the constitutional amendments), which happened in February, and then in the middle is the election, which happens 10 months later. If I am understanding properly, Perišin was not President of the Executive Council of SR Croatia when these amendments were passed, but the phrasing "with Ivo Perišin having been made" makes it sound as if he were in this role at the time. I hope that clarifies a little more what I was trying to get at. — GhostRiver15:08, 14 October 2021 (UTC)reply
GhostRiver, oh right. That's a typo, Perišin was elected in December 1971, as his predecesor (Haramija) was removed from the position within the context of the purges discussed in the article. I've corrected that and added a source to support the date.--
Tomobe03 (
talk)
16:50, 14 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I can take a look at this! Please be somewhat patient with me, as it is a long article, but I promise I'll be as thorough and quick as I can! — GhostRiver21:15, 12 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the
Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed
Infobox and lede
Commas around "or Maspok"
"initially not involved" → "not initially involved"
Background
Economic crisis
"advocated favouring" → "advocated in favour of"
"in 1964" → "the following year"
Politicisation of reforms
"the head of the League of Communists of Macedonia (SKM) Krste Crvenkovski" → "Krste Crvenkovski, the head of the League of Communists of Macedonia (SKM),"
Peak of the reformist forces
"decided to shelve plans"
National revival
Grievances
Good
Language question
"There were also several denunciations of the Declaration on the Name and Status of the Croatian Literary Language from the SKJ within days." → "Within days, there were also several denunciations of the declaration from the SKJ."
SKH factions
Comma after "and secretary Miko Tripalo"
SKH involvement until mid-1971
The first three paragraphs all begin with "On [date]" – not quite
proseline, but still should be broken up
"Catholic Church for Croatian culture" → "Catholic Church in Croatian culture"
Demands for autonomy and a new constitution
"in establishment of the" → "in establishing"
"Serbian nationalism flared up"
No comma needed after "75 percent of the coverage would be on Croatian topics"
Outside Croatia
"were advocating annexing" → "were advocating the annexation of"
Foreign policy considerations
Comma should be after "for the independence of Croatia" rather than after "or alternatively"
Suppression and purges
November plenum and student protest
Either colon or parentheses after "hosted by the republic's leadership", but not both
Karadordevo meeting and the purges
"New Croatia" should be italicized
Aftermath
Maintenance of reforms
In the first sentence, the election of Perišin is stated to be ten months after the constitutional amendments, but the events are stated as if he was already in that position
"anti-Communist" → "anti-communist"
Pirker's death, in a sentence of its own, feels somewhat trivial, as the aftermath of his death is limited to his number of funeral attendees
"leading it to lose the support of the Serbs of Croatia." → "and subsequently lost support from the Serbs of Croatia."
Comma after "were defeated by Grbić"
Legacy in the final decades of Yugoslavia
"1970s purges" → "purges of the 1970s"
References
Purely for aesthetic reasons, it might be nice to add refbegin/refend tags on the "Sources" to put them into columns rather than having that long single-column list of small text
GhostRiver thank you very much for taking time to review this GAN. I have edited the article after your review to implement your suggestions and address issues you have raised. These include the following two which I'd like to briefly explain here too:
Perišin election dating is correct. There were two different sets of constitutional amendments: one in 1971 amending Yugoslav constitution, and another in 1972 amending the Constitution of the Socialist Republic of Croatia (all Yugoslav federated republics had their own separate constitution). I have added a brief clarification to this passage.
According to Ramet, Pirker's funeral is relevant for the article insofar that the size of the crowd following the purges (and during the period when some forms of repression against individuals associated with Croatian Spring were still ongoing) demonstrated the broad support for the ousted SKH leadership. I have added a sentence to the previously single-sentence paragraph to clarify this.
Tomobe03 Thank you for making those edits. I think that there's some confusion regarding the Perišin election. My central comment being raised here is that the structure of the sentence creates a confusing chronology. You have the main event (the constitutional amendments), which happened in February, and then in the middle is the election, which happens 10 months later. If I am understanding properly, Perišin was not President of the Executive Council of SR Croatia when these amendments were passed, but the phrasing "with Ivo Perišin having been made" makes it sound as if he were in this role at the time. I hope that clarifies a little more what I was trying to get at. — GhostRiver15:08, 14 October 2021 (UTC)reply
GhostRiver, oh right. That's a typo, Perišin was elected in December 1971, as his predecesor (Haramija) was removed from the position within the context of the purges discussed in the article. I've corrected that and added a source to support the date.--
Tomobe03 (
talk)
16:50, 14 October 2021 (UTC)reply