3. There are phrases like "intersecting with Harrigan Street at .05 of a mile" throughout the article. It should be "intersecting with Harrigan Street after .05 miles" or something similar.
5. The last sentence of the first section under route description needs clarified. It says "An average of 8,061 people traveled this section of CR 676 in 2001." Is this average per day? per week? You might even be able to remove that line since 2001 is pretty long ago.
I still don't understand the end of the Woodbridge Avenue section. Regarding the map, I didn't see it at first. For the history section, I think it needs a date that it was designated.
Deigo (
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18:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)reply
My input was requested, so a few things that I noticed were:
A left-aligned image under the "Woodbridge Avenue (Mileposts 0.20–0.24)" header
Parentheses inside parentheses in "(the latter, Franklin Street, located at .38 miles (.61 kilometres))." - since the second set is for a conversion, it should be kept for consistency. Can the other part be worked into the sentence without parentheses?
"100 feet after due to no shoulder exists" - awkward phrasing
References 9 and 10 should use "Retrieved on" instead of "accessed on" for consistency, and both should end with a period.
As for the Woodbridge Avenue section, the only problem I see is the awkward phrasing in the last line, which I found hard to understand.
3. There are phrases like "intersecting with Harrigan Street at .05 of a mile" throughout the article. It should be "intersecting with Harrigan Street after .05 miles" or something similar.
5. The last sentence of the first section under route description needs clarified. It says "An average of 8,061 people traveled this section of CR 676 in 2001." Is this average per day? per week? You might even be able to remove that line since 2001 is pretty long ago.
I still don't understand the end of the Woodbridge Avenue section. Regarding the map, I didn't see it at first. For the history section, I think it needs a date that it was designated.
Deigo (
talk)
18:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)reply
My input was requested, so a few things that I noticed were:
A left-aligned image under the "Woodbridge Avenue (Mileposts 0.20–0.24)" header
Parentheses inside parentheses in "(the latter, Franklin Street, located at .38 miles (.61 kilometres))." - since the second set is for a conversion, it should be kept for consistency. Can the other part be worked into the sentence without parentheses?
"100 feet after due to no shoulder exists" - awkward phrasing
References 9 and 10 should use "Retrieved on" instead of "accessed on" for consistency, and both should end with a period.
As for the Woodbridge Avenue section, the only problem I see is the awkward phrasing in the last line, which I found hard to understand.