It is an interesting article. I am glad to pick it up for a review! Would be making straight forward changes as I go, but, as always, please feel free to revert any, if I make a mistake!
Adityavagarwal (
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15:27, 26 October 2017 (UTC)reply
"included;" extra semi-colon I guess. :P
Good pick-up, used a colon and then semi-colons.
Perhaps the lead could be expanded a bit? Not a compulsion though, as it looks good even now. However, I just thought that we could have a bit more in the lead.
Added a bit about German supervision.
Perhaps give a slight idea of what these German military ranks are, in brackets? Reichsmarschall, etc.
Added notes with footnotes, except Reichsmarschall, which was a unique rank and position.
"the Luftwaffe transfer a training school..." would be better to name the Luftwaffe instead, as it seems ambiguous (I think it is schroder?)!
reworded, see what you think?
"This meeting resolved to shift to a general uprising" This should be reworded.
added "from sabotage operations" after shift
"administration encouraged 545 or 546 prominent" I did not quite understand the numbers... 545 or 546?
There is a note which explains the different numbers in the sources.
It is an interesting article. I am glad to pick it up for a review! Would be making straight forward changes as I go, but, as always, please feel free to revert any, if I make a mistake!
Adityavagarwal (
talk)
15:27, 26 October 2017 (UTC)reply
"included;" extra semi-colon I guess. :P
Good pick-up, used a colon and then semi-colons.
Perhaps the lead could be expanded a bit? Not a compulsion though, as it looks good even now. However, I just thought that we could have a bit more in the lead.
Added a bit about German supervision.
Perhaps give a slight idea of what these German military ranks are, in brackets? Reichsmarschall, etc.
Added notes with footnotes, except Reichsmarschall, which was a unique rank and position.
"the Luftwaffe transfer a training school..." would be better to name the Luftwaffe instead, as it seems ambiguous (I think it is schroder?)!
reworded, see what you think?
"This meeting resolved to shift to a general uprising" This should be reworded.
added "from sabotage operations" after shift
"administration encouraged 545 or 546 prominent" I did not quite understand the numbers... 545 or 546?
There is a note which explains the different numbers in the sources.