I accidentally had too much fun at the local Irish pub tonight, so I will probably be reviewing this during teacher in-service time tomorrow. — GhostRiver 02:22, 25 August 2021 (UTC)reply
"His father makes "Balestar" surfboards, which are sold in most surf shops. Tom also runs a shop off of Slater Avenue in Huntington Beach." → "His father runs a
surfboard shop off of Slater Avenue in Huntington Beach, and also makes "Balestar" surfboards, which are sold widely in surf shops."
Use the "convert" template for "83mph" to make it 83 mph (134 km/h)
"During Spring training, he went 1–1 with a 6.75 ERA, getting reassigned to the minors on March 28, though he remained a part of the organization's long-term plans." → "After going 1–1 with a 6.75 ERA during spring training, he was reassigned to the minors on March 28, but remained a part of the organization's long-term plans."
Do we know what caused Zimmermann to go on the DL?
Comma after "from free agency and"
2010
"in order for him to convert to being a relief pitcher" → "to begin the process of converting him to a relief pitcher"
Same as above, do we know why Atilano was hurt?
I don't think you need to mention that Weeks played the following day; it's certainly not recommended to start again right after getting nailed in the head, but I'm pretty sure Tatis just did it after Kennedy beanballed him
On second thought, maybe "Much like Weeks, Reynolds was fine" → "Neither batter suffered a serious injury"
2011
I'm not sure the best way to reword this, but "to begin the season" shows up twice in consecutive sentences
I'm wondering if there's more of a story here about the Tommy John surgery – did he leave the game with pain, had it been lingering? No worries if you can't find much more information, but worth checking out
Didn't see anything about him leaving the game with pain (though I'd imagine that he did), but I did put that he struggled in that game, as well as a quote from when he returned in 2015 (in the Reds section).
Sanfranciscogiants17 (
talk) 22:16, 26 August 2021 (UTC)reply
"In 6 games (5 starts) → "In six games (five starts)" per
MOS:NUMBERS
Pittsburgh Pirates organization
"After starting the 2014 season on the disabled list for the Triple-A Indianapolis Indians, he rehabbed with a couple of rookie-level teams, then joined the Double-A Altoona Curve on July 31." → "Although he was assigned to the Triple-A
Indianapolis Indians, Balester opened the season on the disabled list and did not start pitching until he underwent a rookie-level rehab assignment. On July 31, he joined the Double-A
Altoona Curve."
Drop the context for Indianapolis in the second para, as you mentioned it in the first
"Making three starts for the Lions, he lost each of them, posting an 8.03 ERA." → "He lost all three starts that he did make for the Lions, and recorded an 8.03 ERA in the process."
"and Balester considered retiring." → "and Balester considered retirement."
Last professional season
I think you can shorten the WL to just "American Association", as that's what they tend to go by
Pitching style
Same as earlier, wherever a speed is listed, use the convert template to include the km/h as well
Elaborate on the back leg dropping – how specifically did that impact his release?
The part about his sister might fit better in the early life, with the other stuff about surfing
Where it says "grew his mustache again", there haven't been previous references to said mustache, so it flows awkwardly
I also assume this was a
Movember thing, in which case that page should probably be linked
References
In [17], change the work from "Pennlive.com" to The Patriot-News
Detroit Free Press has a "The" in [58] but not in [52]; I believe not having it is the correct one
"MiLB.com" is inconsistently capitalized (I'm looking at [47] in particular)
General comments
We're going to disregard the any issues from previous GA nominations have not been adequately addressed criteria, as the previous review was an auto-fail from literally a decade ago.
No stability issues (only one regular editor)
Pictures are both allowed for use and are relevant to the article, as they all relate to the subject
Earwig score looks good, the higher results are all attributed direct quotes
All the usual minor fixes – putting on hold for now, and ping me as always if you have questions! — GhostRiver 21:23, 25 August 2021 (UTC)reply
Great work, passing now! — GhostRiver 15:27, 28 August 2021 (UTC)reply
I accidentally had too much fun at the local Irish pub tonight, so I will probably be reviewing this during teacher in-service time tomorrow. — GhostRiver 02:22, 25 August 2021 (UTC)reply
"His father makes "Balestar" surfboards, which are sold in most surf shops. Tom also runs a shop off of Slater Avenue in Huntington Beach." → "His father runs a
surfboard shop off of Slater Avenue in Huntington Beach, and also makes "Balestar" surfboards, which are sold widely in surf shops."
Use the "convert" template for "83mph" to make it 83 mph (134 km/h)
"During Spring training, he went 1–1 with a 6.75 ERA, getting reassigned to the minors on March 28, though he remained a part of the organization's long-term plans." → "After going 1–1 with a 6.75 ERA during spring training, he was reassigned to the minors on March 28, but remained a part of the organization's long-term plans."
Do we know what caused Zimmermann to go on the DL?
Comma after "from free agency and"
2010
"in order for him to convert to being a relief pitcher" → "to begin the process of converting him to a relief pitcher"
Same as above, do we know why Atilano was hurt?
I don't think you need to mention that Weeks played the following day; it's certainly not recommended to start again right after getting nailed in the head, but I'm pretty sure Tatis just did it after Kennedy beanballed him
On second thought, maybe "Much like Weeks, Reynolds was fine" → "Neither batter suffered a serious injury"
2011
I'm not sure the best way to reword this, but "to begin the season" shows up twice in consecutive sentences
I'm wondering if there's more of a story here about the Tommy John surgery – did he leave the game with pain, had it been lingering? No worries if you can't find much more information, but worth checking out
Didn't see anything about him leaving the game with pain (though I'd imagine that he did), but I did put that he struggled in that game, as well as a quote from when he returned in 2015 (in the Reds section).
Sanfranciscogiants17 (
talk) 22:16, 26 August 2021 (UTC)reply
"In 6 games (5 starts) → "In six games (five starts)" per
MOS:NUMBERS
Pittsburgh Pirates organization
"After starting the 2014 season on the disabled list for the Triple-A Indianapolis Indians, he rehabbed with a couple of rookie-level teams, then joined the Double-A Altoona Curve on July 31." → "Although he was assigned to the Triple-A
Indianapolis Indians, Balester opened the season on the disabled list and did not start pitching until he underwent a rookie-level rehab assignment. On July 31, he joined the Double-A
Altoona Curve."
Drop the context for Indianapolis in the second para, as you mentioned it in the first
"Making three starts for the Lions, he lost each of them, posting an 8.03 ERA." → "He lost all three starts that he did make for the Lions, and recorded an 8.03 ERA in the process."
"and Balester considered retiring." → "and Balester considered retirement."
Last professional season
I think you can shorten the WL to just "American Association", as that's what they tend to go by
Pitching style
Same as earlier, wherever a speed is listed, use the convert template to include the km/h as well
Elaborate on the back leg dropping – how specifically did that impact his release?
The part about his sister might fit better in the early life, with the other stuff about surfing
Where it says "grew his mustache again", there haven't been previous references to said mustache, so it flows awkwardly
I also assume this was a
Movember thing, in which case that page should probably be linked
References
In [17], change the work from "Pennlive.com" to The Patriot-News
Detroit Free Press has a "The" in [58] but not in [52]; I believe not having it is the correct one
"MiLB.com" is inconsistently capitalized (I'm looking at [47] in particular)
General comments
We're going to disregard the any issues from previous GA nominations have not been adequately addressed criteria, as the previous review was an auto-fail from literally a decade ago.
No stability issues (only one regular editor)
Pictures are both allowed for use and are relevant to the article, as they all relate to the subject
Earwig score looks good, the higher results are all attributed direct quotes
All the usual minor fixes – putting on hold for now, and ping me as always if you have questions! — GhostRiver 21:23, 25 August 2021 (UTC)reply
Great work, passing now! — GhostRiver 15:27, 28 August 2021 (UTC)reply