Hey, I'll be reviewing this article for you! To make things easier, I'm going to call out the main things I've spotted, and will help by doing some small copyedits afterwards. Hope this is okay; comments so far:
Lead
"pitched it to director Frank Darabont. The film was pitched" - in the second instance of 'pitched', could we use another word?
"were in the mix to direct" - perhaps "were each considered as directors"
"Foxx received a nomination for the Academy Award for Best Supporting Actor; while film editors Jim Miller and Paul Rubell were nominated for the Academy Award for Best Film Editing." - simplify by removing the text highlighted in bold
The first two paragraphs here are quite big - could we split them?
Each paragraph details a given trend of information. First paragraph is the film getting pitched. Second is the more active development stage where actors and the eventual director came into play. I feel it would lead to a few too many paragraphs or one off sentences about relatively the same type of information.
Rusted AutoParts06:51, 15 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Could we include a 'Home media' section, if this was released on DVD?
Finding specific sources indicating home release dates has been tricky. Alot of them are just directing people towards where it can be bought and I don't believe those types of sources are usable here. I found a review of the DVD but no date of release was specified.
Rusted AutoParts06:56, 15 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Box office
"ranking #1" - "ranking number one"
" it grossed a total of $116,758,588 for a total worldwide gross of $217,764,291." - could simplify by removing parts in highlighted in bold. Thanks,
L15017:37, 10 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Thanks for your replies and fixes. I just checked the sources, and this is all ok. I made some minor copyedits but let me know if you object to any of them. All in all, this looks good! Swiftly passing now.
L15017:49, 15 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Hey, I'll be reviewing this article for you! To make things easier, I'm going to call out the main things I've spotted, and will help by doing some small copyedits afterwards. Hope this is okay; comments so far:
Lead
"pitched it to director Frank Darabont. The film was pitched" - in the second instance of 'pitched', could we use another word?
"were in the mix to direct" - perhaps "were each considered as directors"
"Foxx received a nomination for the Academy Award for Best Supporting Actor; while film editors Jim Miller and Paul Rubell were nominated for the Academy Award for Best Film Editing." - simplify by removing the text highlighted in bold
The first two paragraphs here are quite big - could we split them?
Each paragraph details a given trend of information. First paragraph is the film getting pitched. Second is the more active development stage where actors and the eventual director came into play. I feel it would lead to a few too many paragraphs or one off sentences about relatively the same type of information.
Rusted AutoParts06:51, 15 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Could we include a 'Home media' section, if this was released on DVD?
Finding specific sources indicating home release dates has been tricky. Alot of them are just directing people towards where it can be bought and I don't believe those types of sources are usable here. I found a review of the DVD but no date of release was specified.
Rusted AutoParts06:56, 15 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Box office
"ranking #1" - "ranking number one"
" it grossed a total of $116,758,588 for a total worldwide gross of $217,764,291." - could simplify by removing parts in highlighted in bold. Thanks,
L15017:37, 10 September 2020 (UTC)reply
Thanks for your replies and fixes. I just checked the sources, and this is all ok. I made some minor copyedits but let me know if you object to any of them. All in all, this looks good! Swiftly passing now.
L15017:49, 15 September 2020 (UTC)reply