Not sure about this sentence in the lead For Coexist, The xx drew on the electronic dance music that occurred when they were away on tour in 2010. I find this section about electronic music 'occuring' a bit vague. Unfortunately, in the source for the similar statement in the article (
source 15), Jamies quote is also a bit vague, although he doesn't say anything about it happening in 2010.
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23:21, 21 December 2012 (UTC)reply
Doesnt clarify whether the music that was recorded or performed at clubs. I just wrote that sentence to summarize parts of the background and "Writing and recording" sections: they toured in 2010, the dance music they say they missed out on during their tour, etc.
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01:28, 22 December 2012 (UTC)reply
As usual, the prose is very good. There are bare urls that could be improved,
[1] does not list the position. Otherwise most references are pretty reliable, while some sources are not the most reliable but acceptable. --
Tomcat(
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Not sure about this sentence in the lead For Coexist, The xx drew on the electronic dance music that occurred when they were away on tour in 2010. I find this section about electronic music 'occuring' a bit vague. Unfortunately, in the source for the similar statement in the article (
source 15), Jamies quote is also a bit vague, although he doesn't say anything about it happening in 2010.
FM [
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23:21, 21 December 2012 (UTC)reply
Doesnt clarify whether the music that was recorded or performed at clubs. I just wrote that sentence to summarize parts of the background and "Writing and recording" sections: they toured in 2010, the dance music they say they missed out on during their tour, etc.
Dan56 (
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01:28, 22 December 2012 (UTC)reply
As usual, the prose is very good. There are bare urls that could be improved,
[1] does not list the position. Otherwise most references are pretty reliable, while some sources are not the most reliable but acceptable. --
Tomcat(
7)22:29, 27 December 2012 (UTC)reply