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Reviewer: Kingsif ( talk · contribs) 23:19, 25 July 2020 (UTC)
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The bar was ordered to..., but not necessary
necessary licensing- for alcohol or music or something else? Lead doesn't have to give all details, but shouldn't be unnecessarily vague.
Include terminal punctuation within the quotation marks only if it was present in the original material, and otherwise place it after the closing quotation mark.Accordingly, I've put the punctuation inside when it was in the source material and outside when it wasn't.
included in the mixsounds, to me, too colloquial. It could be replaced with another phrasing.
an annual ceremony à la the Oscars- love the French, but how about just "like", or "akin to" if you want to be upmarket ;)
that had recently occurred- for posterity's sake, could this become "that had then-recently occurred"
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The bar was ordered to..., but not necessary
necessary licensing- for alcohol or music or something else? Lead doesn't have to give all details, but shouldn't be unnecessarily vague.
Include terminal punctuation within the quotation marks only if it was present in the original material, and otherwise place it after the closing quotation mark.Accordingly, I've put the punctuation inside when it was in the source material and outside when it wasn't.
included in the mixsounds, to me, too colloquial. It could be replaced with another phrasing.
an annual ceremony à la the Oscars- love the French, but how about just "like", or "akin to" if you want to be upmarket ;)
that had recently occurred- for posterity's sake, could this become "that had then-recently occurred"