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A fact from Clal Center appeared on Wikipedia's
Main Page in the Did you know column on 1 June 2014 (
check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
Did you know... that the architect of the Clal Center(pictured), the first upscale, indoor shopping mall in
Jerusalem, candidly added the project to an Israeli exhibition titled "Bad Jobs"?
We typically do not include citations in the lead. As the lead should not contain any fact excluded from the main text, the citations generally remain in the main text.
while its southern facade faces Agrippas Street...accessible from Kiah Street. Source?
Y I added a new English-language citation for the part about the southern facade and a Hebrew citation for the parking garage entrance on Kiah Street.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Is it Kiah Street or Kiach Street?
Y In English it's Kiah, so I made that spelling consistent.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Alliance Vocational School campus
Can trade school be linked or explained?
Y I linked to
vocational school. I moved the explanation of what went on at this school to the sentence after "trade school".
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
I think you can add a note about what a dunam is. And perhaps "dunam" being a foreign word should have italics.
This is a conversion template, so I am unable to italicize or link it. A dunam is a standard measurement in Ottoman Turkey and its former holdings, like Israel.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
The gate is mounted between two stone pillars.The gate is not standing in its original location Can be merged
Y Sorry, I don't have a source for the exact measurement. I changed it to "further west". The Clal Center is on the corner, on the opposite corner is an apartment house, and then comes the Mahane Yehuda Market parking lot. Here is
a picture to give you an idea of the location of the mural.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Design
The commercial levels What does this mean?
Changed to "shopping levels".
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
these nets are still in place today. When is "today"?
Y Removed this phrase.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Some speculated that Appears vague. Who speculated?
Y It was a popular rumor. I also heard it when I first came to Israel. I rephrased the sentence to avoid "some speculated".
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Use
today, many stores are used as storerooms by Mahane Yehuda Market merchants When is "today"?
Y Dated it by the date of the source.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Who is Kroyanker? You should introduce these people by their full names.
Y He was already introduced by full name and link in Project Goals, but I reintroduced him here.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Sorry, I did not notice it earlier. We need not introduce him again, so I removed the second mention.
Sainsf<^>Feel at home 07:26, 27 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Can foot traffic be linked or explained?
Y I rephrased it as "commercial activity". To my understanding, "commercial activity" refers to sales and stores, while "business activity" refers to office space.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Incident
Sixteen were killed We typically keep numbers above 10 in digits
a father and daughter legal team What does it mean?
Y I fleshed out the description. Does that help?
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Yes, better.
Images: The images appear to have been squashed by the infobox. You can change their aligns so that the text corresponds to the image at least near to it, if not beside it.
I'm not expert on the technical side of things. I put the memorial images one after another under Alliance Vocational School campus and the following images one after another under Design. I don't understand what you want me to do.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
I think I have solved this problem now.
Sainsf<^>Feel at home 07:32, 27 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Note: I would like to note that the Jerusalem Municipality has suddenly taken down its Clal Center page (in Hebrew), which I used for a lot of the information. Will that be a problem?
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Hi @
Sainsf: thanks for starting the review. I've been offline for a few days due to
Purim and
Shabbat, and will get back to you shortly.
Yoninah (
talk) 17:53, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
@
Yoninah: Thanks for your response. I believe the article meets all the GA criteria now. No copyvio detected, sources look good, images are better now and the prose great. I am happy to promote this. Cheers!
Sainsf<^>Feel at home 07:35, 27 March 2016 (UTC)reply
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Israel, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
Israel on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
the discussion and see a list of open tasks.IsraelWikipedia:WikiProject IsraelTemplate:WikiProject IsraelIsrael-related articles
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Architecture, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
Architecture on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
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A fact from Clal Center appeared on Wikipedia's
Main Page in the Did you know column on 1 June 2014 (
check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
Did you know... that the architect of the Clal Center(pictured), the first upscale, indoor shopping mall in
Jerusalem, candidly added the project to an Israeli exhibition titled "Bad Jobs"?
We typically do not include citations in the lead. As the lead should not contain any fact excluded from the main text, the citations generally remain in the main text.
while its southern facade faces Agrippas Street...accessible from Kiah Street. Source?
Y I added a new English-language citation for the part about the southern facade and a Hebrew citation for the parking garage entrance on Kiah Street.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Is it Kiah Street or Kiach Street?
Y In English it's Kiah, so I made that spelling consistent.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Alliance Vocational School campus
Can trade school be linked or explained?
Y I linked to
vocational school. I moved the explanation of what went on at this school to the sentence after "trade school".
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
I think you can add a note about what a dunam is. And perhaps "dunam" being a foreign word should have italics.
This is a conversion template, so I am unable to italicize or link it. A dunam is a standard measurement in Ottoman Turkey and its former holdings, like Israel.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
The gate is mounted between two stone pillars.The gate is not standing in its original location Can be merged
Y Sorry, I don't have a source for the exact measurement. I changed it to "further west". The Clal Center is on the corner, on the opposite corner is an apartment house, and then comes the Mahane Yehuda Market parking lot. Here is
a picture to give you an idea of the location of the mural.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Design
The commercial levels What does this mean?
Changed to "shopping levels".
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
these nets are still in place today. When is "today"?
Y Removed this phrase.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Some speculated that Appears vague. Who speculated?
Y It was a popular rumor. I also heard it when I first came to Israel. I rephrased the sentence to avoid "some speculated".
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Use
today, many stores are used as storerooms by Mahane Yehuda Market merchants When is "today"?
Y Dated it by the date of the source.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Who is Kroyanker? You should introduce these people by their full names.
Y He was already introduced by full name and link in Project Goals, but I reintroduced him here.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Sorry, I did not notice it earlier. We need not introduce him again, so I removed the second mention.
Sainsf<^>Feel at home 07:26, 27 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Can foot traffic be linked or explained?
Y I rephrased it as "commercial activity". To my understanding, "commercial activity" refers to sales and stores, while "business activity" refers to office space.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Incident
Sixteen were killed We typically keep numbers above 10 in digits
a father and daughter legal team What does it mean?
Y I fleshed out the description. Does that help?
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Yes, better.
Images: The images appear to have been squashed by the infobox. You can change their aligns so that the text corresponds to the image at least near to it, if not beside it.
I'm not expert on the technical side of things. I put the memorial images one after another under Alliance Vocational School campus and the following images one after another under Design. I don't understand what you want me to do.
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
I think I have solved this problem now.
Sainsf<^>Feel at home 07:32, 27 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Note: I would like to note that the Jerusalem Municipality has suddenly taken down its Clal Center page (in Hebrew), which I used for a lot of the information. Will that be a problem?
Yoninah (
talk) 20:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
Hi @
Sainsf: thanks for starting the review. I've been offline for a few days due to
Purim and
Shabbat, and will get back to you shortly.
Yoninah (
talk) 17:53, 26 March 2016 (UTC)reply
@
Yoninah: Thanks for your response. I believe the article meets all the GA criteria now. No copyvio detected, sources look good, images are better now and the prose great. I am happy to promote this. Cheers!
Sainsf<^>Feel at home 07:35, 27 March 2016 (UTC)reply