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Sorry it has taken so long for someone to review this article, but better late than never. There are numerous issues that must be fixed to promote this article, although the writing is quite good.
1) The footnotes are all formatted incorrectly. All punctuation, including he period and parentheses must come before the footnote. Example: This is correct footnoting. [1] Footnotes must all be at the end of the sentence as well. Sentences with more than one footnote should have one of them eliminated.
2) I would recommend giving the article a good copyedit. A number of sentences are too long or are missing commas and other grammatical elements. For example the following sentence needs a comma after 'implemented' The use of electricity to power trains had been experimented with in the previous decade and small scale operations had been implemented but the C&SLR was the first major railway in the world to adopt it as a means of motive power.
3) You need a reference section that lists the published books used for the article in bibliographical format.
4) The legacy section is original research, and unless you can find a reference for it, should be deleted completely.
5) The lead is too short. It should probably be at least three times as long as it currently is. It needs to 'mirror' what is written in the article, that is be a summary of what the article says. At the moment, it one describes what the railway is, and that it became part of the tube. You need to fill in the intermediate years with information from the article.
I will put this article on hold, and if the required changes are made, will promote it. Zeus1234 15:21, 25 October 2007 (UTC)
This is an archive of past discussions. Do not edit the contents of this page. If you wish to start a new discussion or revive an old one, please do so on the current talk page. |
Sorry it has taken so long for someone to review this article, but better late than never. There are numerous issues that must be fixed to promote this article, although the writing is quite good.
1) The footnotes are all formatted incorrectly. All punctuation, including he period and parentheses must come before the footnote. Example: This is correct footnoting. [1] Footnotes must all be at the end of the sentence as well. Sentences with more than one footnote should have one of them eliminated.
2) I would recommend giving the article a good copyedit. A number of sentences are too long or are missing commas and other grammatical elements. For example the following sentence needs a comma after 'implemented' The use of electricity to power trains had been experimented with in the previous decade and small scale operations had been implemented but the C&SLR was the first major railway in the world to adopt it as a means of motive power.
3) You need a reference section that lists the published books used for the article in bibliographical format.
4) The legacy section is original research, and unless you can find a reference for it, should be deleted completely.
5) The lead is too short. It should probably be at least three times as long as it currently is. It needs to 'mirror' what is written in the article, that is be a summary of what the article says. At the moment, it one describes what the railway is, and that it became part of the tube. You need to fill in the intermediate years with information from the article.
I will put this article on hold, and if the required changes are made, will promote it. Zeus1234 15:21, 25 October 2007 (UTC)