Hello, I will be reviewing this article against the
good article criteria over the next several days, performing noncontroversial copyedits in the meantime. I will then come back with the review and place it here. I will not fail the article just because it is not completed within 7 days, but I will expect to see some work or a note stating that you won't be able to edit for several days. Thanks!
Reaper Eternal (
talk)
17:34, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Oi, that's fast. Usually it takes weeks before an article is reviewed. The architecture is not yet finished. I am one of the main contributors (but not the nominator, I would have waited with that) and I hope to be able to finish this section this weekend, but I am not sure whether that is going to work. --
Zoeperkoe (
talk)
18:09, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Overall this looks good! I will AGF that the offline sources support what you say, since I have none of the books.
Copyediting & prose
"After the assassination of Atsiz bin Uvak, the project was finished the Seljuk ruler Tutush I." Huh? Do you mean "was finished by the Seljuk ruler"?
Done
"The citadel continued to serve as barracks and prison until 1986, when excavations and restorations started that continue until today." Did they stop this very day? Or are they ongoing? "Until" implies an endpoint.
Done
After an introductory prepositional phrase, you need a comma before beginning the main clause. I corrected some of these, but they are very widespread. (For example, "In 1234 John of Damascus rode a donkey." should be "In 1234, John of Damascus rode a donkey."
Done
Referencing & links
The walls are partly obscured from sight by the urban fabric of Damascus, which has encroached upon the citadel during the 19th and 20th centuries. The shops along the north side of the Al-Hamidiyah Souq are built against the citadel's southern façade, while parts of the eastern defences are also obscured by buildings. The buildings that stood against the western wall have been cleared in the 1980s. Unreferenced.
Done
Ref #47 has as publisher "www.nmdcsyria.org". Change this to the actual publisher of the website.
Done
Sectioning & structure
Shouldn't the section "Description of the citadel" be "Description of the new citadel" since that is what you are describing?
Hello, I will be reviewing this article against the
good article criteria over the next several days, performing noncontroversial copyedits in the meantime. I will then come back with the review and place it here. I will not fail the article just because it is not completed within 7 days, but I will expect to see some work or a note stating that you won't be able to edit for several days. Thanks!
Reaper Eternal (
talk)
17:34, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Oi, that's fast. Usually it takes weeks before an article is reviewed. The architecture is not yet finished. I am one of the main contributors (but not the nominator, I would have waited with that) and I hope to be able to finish this section this weekend, but I am not sure whether that is going to work. --
Zoeperkoe (
talk)
18:09, 3 March 2011 (UTC)reply
Overall this looks good! I will AGF that the offline sources support what you say, since I have none of the books.
Copyediting & prose
"After the assassination of Atsiz bin Uvak, the project was finished the Seljuk ruler Tutush I." Huh? Do you mean "was finished by the Seljuk ruler"?
Done
"The citadel continued to serve as barracks and prison until 1986, when excavations and restorations started that continue until today." Did they stop this very day? Or are they ongoing? "Until" implies an endpoint.
Done
After an introductory prepositional phrase, you need a comma before beginning the main clause. I corrected some of these, but they are very widespread. (For example, "In 1234 John of Damascus rode a donkey." should be "In 1234, John of Damascus rode a donkey."
Done
Referencing & links
The walls are partly obscured from sight by the urban fabric of Damascus, which has encroached upon the citadel during the 19th and 20th centuries. The shops along the north side of the Al-Hamidiyah Souq are built against the citadel's southern façade, while parts of the eastern defences are also obscured by buildings. The buildings that stood against the western wall have been cleared in the 1980s. Unreferenced.
Done
Ref #47 has as publisher "www.nmdcsyria.org". Change this to the actual publisher of the website.
Done
Sectioning & structure
Shouldn't the section "Description of the citadel" be "Description of the new citadel" since that is what you are describing?