"continued into the latest Pleistocene." - the "latest" Pleistocene?
Geography and geology
You should reintroduce that it's in California
"The Cima volcanoes are part of the Mojave National Preserve and since 1973 they make up the Cinder Cones National Natural Landmark.[11][7]" - if there's more about this landmark, you should write a brief human history section on that
link petroglyph?
"In more modern time" - too vague; have a timeline from the source?
" to obtain material for road construction" - think it should be "materials"
"finally volcanoes in the western Basin and Range " - I'd add "Province" after "Basin and Range"
Add a parenthetical for felsic to explain briefly what it means?
"The Cima volcanic field is part of the Mojave Desert, which in turn belongs to the Basin and Range province and features both mountains exceeding 2,000 metres (6,600 ft) height which trend in southeast-northwest direction, with broad valleys between the mountains.[24]" - think this is redundant since you already mentioned the Mojave and Basin/Range and linked them both. I'd cut that part out and expand on the mountains of 6,600ft+ height; or perhaps move this to another part of the section, or the original introduction of the Mojave desert?
"The youngest cone (35°10′53″N 115°49′1″W) in the southwestern part of the field is called Black Tank cone,[30] an older vent lies just south-southwest of it.[31]" - run-on
"Latest" Pleistocene basically means "shortly before the
Holocene". For some reason, there is little discussion out there about the history of the Cinder Cones National Natural Landmark. That paragraph about mountains and valleys is supposed to explain the Mojave Desert a little. I think I got the rest.
Jo-Jo Eumerus (
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06:26, 11 September 2018 (UTC)reply
"covered by blocks with sizes of up to 0.5 metres (1 ft 8 in).[42]" - sizes? which dimension are you referring to here? length? width?
Some repetitive linking in the lower half of this section
" average temperatures of 16–18 °C (61–64 °F) and average precipitation amounting to 150–250 millimetres per year (5.9–9.8 in/year).[38]"- elsewhere you used ranges from max-min, don't switch here - keep consistent throughout
Think you've already linked Holocene in the body
brief description of what "playas" are
"Vegetation in the area includes brittle bush, creosote bush and Mormon tea, and is classified as a scrub community" - second half of this sentence reads awkwardly
"Vegetation grows in clusters separated by soil covered by desert pavement,[58] the youngest cone is unvegetated[59] and little vegetation has developed on other recent volcanic vents and lava flows.[60]" - run-on sentence
Went ahead and changed them - do you see what I was referring to now? A nitpick for sure, but distracting IMO for people reading closely who pay attention to formatting things like that. ceranthor16:53, 11 September 2018 (UTC)reply
"continued into the latest Pleistocene." - the "latest" Pleistocene?
Geography and geology
You should reintroduce that it's in California
"The Cima volcanoes are part of the Mojave National Preserve and since 1973 they make up the Cinder Cones National Natural Landmark.[11][7]" - if there's more about this landmark, you should write a brief human history section on that
link petroglyph?
"In more modern time" - too vague; have a timeline from the source?
" to obtain material for road construction" - think it should be "materials"
"finally volcanoes in the western Basin and Range " - I'd add "Province" after "Basin and Range"
Add a parenthetical for felsic to explain briefly what it means?
"The Cima volcanic field is part of the Mojave Desert, which in turn belongs to the Basin and Range province and features both mountains exceeding 2,000 metres (6,600 ft) height which trend in southeast-northwest direction, with broad valleys between the mountains.[24]" - think this is redundant since you already mentioned the Mojave and Basin/Range and linked them both. I'd cut that part out and expand on the mountains of 6,600ft+ height; or perhaps move this to another part of the section, or the original introduction of the Mojave desert?
"The youngest cone (35°10′53″N 115°49′1″W) in the southwestern part of the field is called Black Tank cone,[30] an older vent lies just south-southwest of it.[31]" - run-on
"Latest" Pleistocene basically means "shortly before the
Holocene". For some reason, there is little discussion out there about the history of the Cinder Cones National Natural Landmark. That paragraph about mountains and valleys is supposed to explain the Mojave Desert a little. I think I got the rest.
Jo-Jo Eumerus (
talk,
contributions)
06:26, 11 September 2018 (UTC)reply
"covered by blocks with sizes of up to 0.5 metres (1 ft 8 in).[42]" - sizes? which dimension are you referring to here? length? width?
Some repetitive linking in the lower half of this section
" average temperatures of 16–18 °C (61–64 °F) and average precipitation amounting to 150–250 millimetres per year (5.9–9.8 in/year).[38]"- elsewhere you used ranges from max-min, don't switch here - keep consistent throughout
Think you've already linked Holocene in the body
brief description of what "playas" are
"Vegetation in the area includes brittle bush, creosote bush and Mormon tea, and is classified as a scrub community" - second half of this sentence reads awkwardly
"Vegetation grows in clusters separated by soil covered by desert pavement,[58] the youngest cone is unvegetated[59] and little vegetation has developed on other recent volcanic vents and lava flows.[60]" - run-on sentence
Went ahead and changed them - do you see what I was referring to now? A nitpick for sure, but distracting IMO for people reading closely who pay attention to formatting things like that. ceranthor16:53, 11 September 2018 (UTC)reply