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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger ( talk · contribs) 05:11, 21 May 2013 (UTC) reply

• I'll do this review.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 05:11, 21 May 2013 (UTC) reply
  • Thanks. Take your time.-- FutureTrillionaire ( talk) 03:13, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply

• First impression is that 12472 characters (2123 words) "readable prose size" is a fraction of the length I expected for this topic.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:36, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply

WP:LEAD

• "The Jewish people still await the Messiah's first coming, while Christians await his second coming, when they believe he will fulfill those parts of Messianic prophecy." needs two citations.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:36, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
  • I managed to find a source that covers both statements.-- FutureTrillionaire ( talk) 13:53, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
• You distinguish between Jesus and Christ. What is the date of origin of each term and of the joint term.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:36, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
  • I added info about what Jesus was called before he was called Christ, and when he was called Jesus Christ and by whom.-- FutureTrillionaire ( talk) 13:53, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
• Reminder: The LEAD is a summary of the main body. All content in the LEAD should be in the main body with at least as much detail.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 18:42, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply

Etymology and origins

• This section is currently unfulfilling. I think this is due to both a poor ordering of facts and incomplete facts. Here is my rough approximation of what I would expect.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:54, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
  • "The earliest source of the word comes from the Xth century writings of Greek Scholar X in about the Xth century B.C." -- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:54, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
  • The meaning of the term in its earliest use was XYZ.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:54, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
  • The term was then found in Latin texts dating back to the Yth century. -- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:54, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
  • Now the term permeates language with variations on its spelling appearing in the New Testament.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:54, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
• You talk about spelling standardization without presenting the prior state of confusion. Start with an era of alternate spelling(s) then move to standardization. show all alternate spellings before standardization.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:56, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
• Did adding an h change the pronounciation?-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 03:59, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply
• The first use of the term Christmas should probably be linked. Its origin of use as a term should also be noted.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 04:03, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply

@ TonyTheTiger: Unfortunately, I'm not knowledgeable of this subject enough to make significant improvements. The nominator, User:History2007, has WP:vanished before the review began, and the article is far from GA quality in my opinion. The best thing to do now is probably to withdraw this nomination.-- FutureTrillionaire ( talk) 23:13, 23 May 2013 (UTC) reply

• Withdrawn-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ BIO/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:FOUR) 15:41, 24 May 2013 (UTC) reply