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It would nice if this page discussed the phrase "St. Vitus Dance," since the disambig page points to this page. The Vitus page, on the other hand, says St. Vitus Dance refers to epilepsy...? Afabbro 19:50, 25 May 2007 (UTC)
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[[ == is chorea characterized by being strictly proximal and increased associated movement? == ]]
Choreia is not a disease; it's a "disorder". This means it's a description of a problem, which can be caused by any number of things. A disease is a single ailment caused by a specific thing. The article name needs to be changed. -- Kaz ( talk) 17:29, 24 February 2011 (UTC)
A Google search yields 2.4 million results for "Chorea" and only 0.1 million results for "Choreia". Also, several major medical entities use the "Chorea" spelling: NIH: http://www.ninds.nih.gov/disorders/chorea/chorea.htm MayoClinic: http://www.mayoclinic.com/health/huntingtons-disease/DS00401/DSECTION=symptoms
I propose that the spelling of the title be corrected to match common usage. 173.170.198.38 ( talk) 20:57, 9 September 2011 (UTC)
The result of the proposal was 'Revised move request submitted - see below. Dubbin ( talk) 12:17, 11 December 2011 (UTC)
– (a) The medical term is unequivocally the primary topic. No results for the dance are in the first 5 pages of a Google search. A disambiguation page is not necessary - since there are only two competing topics, the medical term can mention the dance as a hatnote. (b) The archaic spelling is no longer in use. Google yields 3million hits for 'chorea' but only 130,000 for 'choreia'. This move is uncontroversial but requires an admin, I think Dubbin ( talk) 16:42, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
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1. "choreia" (neurology OR neurological): 35 hits
2. "choreia" (poetry OR Pindar) 380 hits (at a minimum: there is a complex story to tell about that)
Page moved. Can someone check on the redirects? Vegaswikian ( talk) 05:59, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
– The medical term is the primary topic for 'chorea', for which 'choreia' is not used except etymologically. 'Choreia' best defines the Greek dance. See discussion above. Dubbin ( talk) 12:23, 11 December 2011 (UTC)
Thanks to Vegaswikian for these moves. I have adjusted details as necessary at the DAB page, and fixed hatnotes at the moved articles. Noetica Tea? 06:23, 18 December 2011 (UTC) thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by 194.114.146.227 ( talk) 11:26, 8 June 2016 (UTC)
Hi. You’re article has some good information, but is mostly lacking in its syntax and punctuation. Here are the things that stuck out to me as I read through your article:
Also in this section, you have nothing hyperlinked to other pages. This is something you should do to make it easy for your readers to quickly define something they don’t know much about. For example, you talk about genetics early on, and you could link some terms like “dominant trait” that the typical reader might not understand.
At this point, I think you get the idea of the major errors in your article. Probably 95% of the problems in this article are syntax or grammar. By using common editing techniques and perhaps printing your article and having some more friends peer review for you, I think your article will be greatly improved! MSederberg21 ( talk) 06:13, 30 April 2014 (UTC) Thank you for all of the really helpful feedback! I plan on taking a large majority of the advice and directly applying it to my section "Types of Chorea". I am still working on finding correct statistics for a proper comparison to the numbers we have from 1900. Also, if you have any suggestions of what type of image I should upload, I am open to suggestions. Thanks again! SydneyFocht ( talk) 06:27, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
I agree with MSederberg21 that grammar improvements need to be made in the types section. See those notes. As well as the use of choreic movements should actually read choreatic movements. I think you also meant genetic instead of generic in line 2 under types. I agree about subheadings as well, namely they should be ==Huntington's Chorea==, ==Sydenham's Chorea== and ==Gravidarum Chorea==. The discussion on genetics is confusing. Although you list Huntington's Chorea as dominant you later state that it lacks heritability. Perhaps when speaking of the genetics you could state the details of inheritance specifically so that it is understood better by all readers. In the second section you mention when talking about Sydenham's Chorea "This type is increasingly rare and it may be partially due to penicillin..." perhaps restated as "This type is increasingly rare and it may due in part by increased usage of antibiotics such as penicillin, as well as improved living conditions and perhaps also a natural reduction in the frequency of the virus that leads to Sydenham's Chorea." Also if you determine which virus leads to this that would also be good information. In the third section you mention choreic symptoms which should be choreatic symptoms. Do you have a current statistic to compare the 1900 statistic to, because that would give that statement more relevance to the article. You state that Gravidarum can be caused by the use of contraceptives, do you know which ones specifically, as this would be good information to add to this section. When I read the types section I see a lot of information that could mainly use some sentence rearrangement as well as a few spelling errors. Also another side note, the section that includes causes talks about Creutzfeldt-Jakob disease and although it is a hyperlink I think it would also be good to insert a statement here that the common name given to Creutzfeldt-Jakob disease is 'mad cow disease.' Any assistance you would like I would be happy to give, just let me know. The article has great information and it displays a lot of hard work and some additional care is only beneficial. Icecreamcooper ( talk) 08:17, 30 April 2014 (UTC)
uploading images http://File%20Upload%20Wizard /info/en/?search=Wikipedia:File_Upload_Wizard Icecreamcooper ( talk) 02:46, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
I appreciate all of the detailed feedback! I agree that I have quite a few grammatical errors left to fix while I am also working on finding more recent statistics to compare to the ones that I have already mentioned. If I have any further questions, I will be sure to contact you! Thanks again! SydneyFocht ( talk) 06:50, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
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It would nice if this page discussed the phrase "St. Vitus Dance," since the disambig page points to this page. The Vitus page, on the other hand, says St. Vitus Dance refers to epilepsy...? Afabbro 19:50, 25 May 2007 (UTC)
sdljnba;srnb;arsjba; CREEPYYYYY
[[ == is chorea characterized by being strictly proximal and increased associated movement? == ]]
Choreia is not a disease; it's a "disorder". This means it's a description of a problem, which can be caused by any number of things. A disease is a single ailment caused by a specific thing. The article name needs to be changed. -- Kaz ( talk) 17:29, 24 February 2011 (UTC)
A Google search yields 2.4 million results for "Chorea" and only 0.1 million results for "Choreia". Also, several major medical entities use the "Chorea" spelling: NIH: http://www.ninds.nih.gov/disorders/chorea/chorea.htm MayoClinic: http://www.mayoclinic.com/health/huntingtons-disease/DS00401/DSECTION=symptoms
I propose that the spelling of the title be corrected to match common usage. 173.170.198.38 ( talk) 20:57, 9 September 2011 (UTC)
The result of the proposal was 'Revised move request submitted - see below. Dubbin ( talk) 12:17, 11 December 2011 (UTC)
– (a) The medical term is unequivocally the primary topic. No results for the dance are in the first 5 pages of a Google search. A disambiguation page is not necessary - since there are only two competing topics, the medical term can mention the dance as a hatnote. (b) The archaic spelling is no longer in use. Google yields 3million hits for 'chorea' but only 130,000 for 'choreia'. This move is uncontroversial but requires an admin, I think Dubbin ( talk) 16:42, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
Option A | Option B |
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1. "choreia" (neurology OR neurological): 35 hits
2. "choreia" (poetry OR Pindar) 380 hits (at a minimum: there is a complex story to tell about that)
Page moved. Can someone check on the redirects? Vegaswikian ( talk) 05:59, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
– The medical term is the primary topic for 'chorea', for which 'choreia' is not used except etymologically. 'Choreia' best defines the Greek dance. See discussion above. Dubbin ( talk) 12:23, 11 December 2011 (UTC)
Thanks to Vegaswikian for these moves. I have adjusted details as necessary at the DAB page, and fixed hatnotes at the moved articles. Noetica Tea? 06:23, 18 December 2011 (UTC) thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by 194.114.146.227 ( talk) 11:26, 8 June 2016 (UTC)
Hi. You’re article has some good information, but is mostly lacking in its syntax and punctuation. Here are the things that stuck out to me as I read through your article:
Also in this section, you have nothing hyperlinked to other pages. This is something you should do to make it easy for your readers to quickly define something they don’t know much about. For example, you talk about genetics early on, and you could link some terms like “dominant trait” that the typical reader might not understand.
At this point, I think you get the idea of the major errors in your article. Probably 95% of the problems in this article are syntax or grammar. By using common editing techniques and perhaps printing your article and having some more friends peer review for you, I think your article will be greatly improved! MSederberg21 ( talk) 06:13, 30 April 2014 (UTC) Thank you for all of the really helpful feedback! I plan on taking a large majority of the advice and directly applying it to my section "Types of Chorea". I am still working on finding correct statistics for a proper comparison to the numbers we have from 1900. Also, if you have any suggestions of what type of image I should upload, I am open to suggestions. Thanks again! SydneyFocht ( talk) 06:27, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
I agree with MSederberg21 that grammar improvements need to be made in the types section. See those notes. As well as the use of choreic movements should actually read choreatic movements. I think you also meant genetic instead of generic in line 2 under types. I agree about subheadings as well, namely they should be ==Huntington's Chorea==, ==Sydenham's Chorea== and ==Gravidarum Chorea==. The discussion on genetics is confusing. Although you list Huntington's Chorea as dominant you later state that it lacks heritability. Perhaps when speaking of the genetics you could state the details of inheritance specifically so that it is understood better by all readers. In the second section you mention when talking about Sydenham's Chorea "This type is increasingly rare and it may be partially due to penicillin..." perhaps restated as "This type is increasingly rare and it may due in part by increased usage of antibiotics such as penicillin, as well as improved living conditions and perhaps also a natural reduction in the frequency of the virus that leads to Sydenham's Chorea." Also if you determine which virus leads to this that would also be good information. In the third section you mention choreic symptoms which should be choreatic symptoms. Do you have a current statistic to compare the 1900 statistic to, because that would give that statement more relevance to the article. You state that Gravidarum can be caused by the use of contraceptives, do you know which ones specifically, as this would be good information to add to this section. When I read the types section I see a lot of information that could mainly use some sentence rearrangement as well as a few spelling errors. Also another side note, the section that includes causes talks about Creutzfeldt-Jakob disease and although it is a hyperlink I think it would also be good to insert a statement here that the common name given to Creutzfeldt-Jakob disease is 'mad cow disease.' Any assistance you would like I would be happy to give, just let me know. The article has great information and it displays a lot of hard work and some additional care is only beneficial. Icecreamcooper ( talk) 08:17, 30 April 2014 (UTC)
uploading images http://File%20Upload%20Wizard /info/en/?search=Wikipedia:File_Upload_Wizard Icecreamcooper ( talk) 02:46, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
I appreciate all of the detailed feedback! I agree that I have quite a few grammatical errors left to fix while I am also working on finding more recent statistics to compare to the ones that I have already mentioned. If I have any further questions, I will be sure to contact you! Thanks again! SydneyFocht ( talk) 06:50, 6 May 2014 (UTC)
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 5 September 2022 and 17 December 2022. Further details are available
on the course page. Student editor(s):
Ericksmd3839 (
article contribs).
— Assignment last updated by Ericksmd3839 ( talk) 20:00, 9 November 2022 (UTC)