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Reviewer: Eric Corbett ( talk · contribs) 15:55, 12 January 2014 (UTC)
Later history
"As of 2014 Cholmondeley Castle is occupied by his mother, Lavinia, who has developed and cares for the garden."That Lavinia cares for the garden (should that be garden or gardens?) is repeated in the Gardens and park section, so probably not needed here as well.
Old Hall
Present building
Chapel
Gardens and park
"Since the middle of the 20th century the gardens have been under the care of Lavinia, the wife of the late 6th Marquess".She was never the wife of the late 6th Marquess, she was the wife of the 6th Marquess and now his widow. Same issue in the lead.
Lead
"The site of the house has been a family seat of the Cholmondeley family since the 12th century."That "family ... family" doesn't look great.
"... who also created the landscape park".Should that be "landscaped park"?
" The structures listed at Grade II include the altered remains of the Old Hall, five of the lodges in and around the estate, and a variety of structures in the gardens.That "structures ... structures" ain't so pretty.
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Reviewer: Eric Corbett ( talk · contribs) 15:55, 12 January 2014 (UTC)
Later history
"As of 2014 Cholmondeley Castle is occupied by his mother, Lavinia, who has developed and cares for the garden."That Lavinia cares for the garden (should that be garden or gardens?) is repeated in the Gardens and park section, so probably not needed here as well.
Old Hall
Present building
Chapel
Gardens and park
"Since the middle of the 20th century the gardens have been under the care of Lavinia, the wife of the late 6th Marquess".She was never the wife of the late 6th Marquess, she was the wife of the 6th Marquess and now his widow. Same issue in the lead.
Lead
"The site of the house has been a family seat of the Cholmondeley family since the 12th century."That "family ... family" doesn't look great.
"... who also created the landscape park".Should that be "landscaped park"?
" The structures listed at Grade II include the altered remains of the Old Hall, five of the lodges in and around the estate, and a variety of structures in the gardens.That "structures ... structures" ain't so pretty.
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