If you're going to list the previous child actors in the "portrayed by" parameter, then a caption is needed for the image. "Elizabeth Hendrickson as Chloe Fisher".
"After brief marriages to Cane and then Billy, Chloe begins an unsuccessful streak of relationships with men including: Chance Chancellor (John Driscoll), Ronan Malloy (Jeff Branson), and most recently Kevin Fisher (Greg Rikaart)." Remove the ":", no need.
I believe the correct linking for John Driscoll is
John Driscoll (actor). Fix all the links to that name.
TV Guide's Nelson Branco --> Nelson Branco of TV Guide
"Katherine Tina Valentine was introduced by then-executive producer" --> former executive producer
Unlink Elizabeth Hendrickson in the casting section.
Put "Y&R" and "AMC" in italics (in the quote in the casting section).
"Hendrickson was pleased that the writers decided to give Chloe a backstory," add something like "saying:" to the end of that.
"Hendrickson compared their relationship, which ensued as a result of Chloe practically "threatening him", to the psychological thriller film Fatal Attraction (1987)" --> "to the 1987 psychological thriller film Fatal Attraction".
"Billy Abbott (Billy Millor)" --> I'm assuming "Millor" was a typo? It's spelt "Miller".
"However, the marriage and romance was prematurely ended to pave the way for the reunion between Billy and his highschool sweetheart Mac Browning (Clementine Ford)". Change "highschool" to "high school".
"and mob princess Angelina Veneziano's (Diana DeGarmo) intense crush on Kevin (Which leads to a brief marriage, with Angelina's mob father threatening to kill Kevin if he doesn't wed his daughter)" --> "Which" should be with a lower case w.
Remove redundancy of "A writer from Zap2it" in reception. Just say "They wrote,".
Considering how the "in popular culture" section consists of just one fact, I would suggest merging it into reception somehow.
Overall, these concerns need to be addressed before the review can go any further. Once they have been, I will return to pass/fail the article. Cheers, --
Brick House 337 19:24, 22 August 2013 (UTC)reply
Fixed everything so far. Thankyou for taking on the review! — Arre 03:54, 23 August 2013 (UTC)reply
Final GA review
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
Overall, the article is in good article condition. I don't see any further issues that need to be addressed. Pass. --
Brick House 337 04:03, 23 August 2013 (UTC)reply
Thankyou so much Brick House, for the review, and for making it so fast as usual. Much love!— Arre 04:11, 23 August 2013 (UTC)reply
If you're going to list the previous child actors in the "portrayed by" parameter, then a caption is needed for the image. "Elizabeth Hendrickson as Chloe Fisher".
"After brief marriages to Cane and then Billy, Chloe begins an unsuccessful streak of relationships with men including: Chance Chancellor (John Driscoll), Ronan Malloy (Jeff Branson), and most recently Kevin Fisher (Greg Rikaart)." Remove the ":", no need.
I believe the correct linking for John Driscoll is
John Driscoll (actor). Fix all the links to that name.
TV Guide's Nelson Branco --> Nelson Branco of TV Guide
"Katherine Tina Valentine was introduced by then-executive producer" --> former executive producer
Unlink Elizabeth Hendrickson in the casting section.
Put "Y&R" and "AMC" in italics (in the quote in the casting section).
"Hendrickson was pleased that the writers decided to give Chloe a backstory," add something like "saying:" to the end of that.
"Hendrickson compared their relationship, which ensued as a result of Chloe practically "threatening him", to the psychological thriller film Fatal Attraction (1987)" --> "to the 1987 psychological thriller film Fatal Attraction".
"Billy Abbott (Billy Millor)" --> I'm assuming "Millor" was a typo? It's spelt "Miller".
"However, the marriage and romance was prematurely ended to pave the way for the reunion between Billy and his highschool sweetheart Mac Browning (Clementine Ford)". Change "highschool" to "high school".
"and mob princess Angelina Veneziano's (Diana DeGarmo) intense crush on Kevin (Which leads to a brief marriage, with Angelina's mob father threatening to kill Kevin if he doesn't wed his daughter)" --> "Which" should be with a lower case w.
Remove redundancy of "A writer from Zap2it" in reception. Just say "They wrote,".
Considering how the "in popular culture" section consists of just one fact, I would suggest merging it into reception somehow.
Overall, these concerns need to be addressed before the review can go any further. Once they have been, I will return to pass/fail the article. Cheers, --
Brick House 337 19:24, 22 August 2013 (UTC)reply
Fixed everything so far. Thankyou for taking on the review! — Arre 03:54, 23 August 2013 (UTC)reply
Final GA review
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
Overall, the article is in good article condition. I don't see any further issues that need to be addressed. Pass. --
Brick House 337 04:03, 23 August 2013 (UTC)reply
Thankyou so much Brick House, for the review, and for making it so fast as usual. Much love!— Arre 04:11, 23 August 2013 (UTC)reply