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16:31, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
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- Four para lead is far too much, two large paras is fine for an article of this modest size.
- "off white" wouldn't that be hyphenated in this adjectival usage?
- Done.
- Linked.
- Done.
- You use "It..." about nine consecutive times in the lead. Occasionally throw back to the name.
- Done.
- "May-June or October-January" I would use prose, i.e. May to June, or October to January...
- Done
- " are incubated by" links to a dab page.
- Fixed.
- "an onomatopoeia.[1] Vieillot" care to explain?
- Added.
- "migrates" could link this.
- Linked.
- "nominate race" is race the right word, not species?
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Race is used as a synonym for subspecies, but I'll replace it for clarity.
- "A chivi viero in Sao Paulo, Brazil." fragment, no full stop required.
- Done.
- Not sure you need to link colours like "pale brown". Body parts should be linked however, especially if they're not obvious like "beak".
- Removed links for some of the more obvious colors, and added for the body parts that were unlinked.
- The distribution map in the infobox appears to be colour-coded but there's no key?
- Added.
- "up until 1,900 m " up to an elevation of 1,900 m... There are two or three examples of this.
- Done.
- "Eggs are laid in clutches of 2-4 eggs" repetitive "eggs" and should be an en-dash, or you could even write in prose, of two to four eggs.
- Fixed.
- "The mass of eggs measured" surely this single value is an average?
- Added average.
- "between 10-16 days" between 10 and 16 or just 10–16 days (no need for "between" and should be an en-dash).
- Fixed.
- Fixed.
- Status should contain IUCN's assessment.
- Done.
- Date formats in references should be consistent in format.
- Could you clarify what should be done?
- Ref 8 has a couple of spaced hyphens in the title which should be en-dashes.
- Replaced ref 8 with 6 because they're the same ref.
AryKun (
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12:06, 27 September 2021 (UTC)
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That's it for now, sorry for the delay in the review.
The Rambling Man (
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09:21, 27 September 2021 (UTC)
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