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There are considerable prose issues, such as the capitalization of genre names that do not introduce a sentence, "dance/pop vocalist", "Cherry Pop has been recorded" - is it still being recorded?, "Being an Electronic / Pop song, Stan describes the song as J-Pop" - how are these relevant to each other... There is a lot of poor grammar and tense issues. If you struggle with English, I'd recommend that you ask for assistance
WP:GOCE with these articles you keep nominating so that you can learn more about English grammar and punctuation and see how it should be copyedited.
Then there's formatting issues everywhere. For example: Read
Template:Infobox single for how the infobox should be correctly formatted, for example the "Records" in the label parameters are omitted, flatlists are used for genres and only the first genre should be capitalized, we don't use references in the infobox when they've already referenced the same things in the prose, overlinking of "Erik Lidbom". The depreciated music video parameter, these should be in an external links section. The "see release history" is redundant and depreciated. The charts are incorrectly formatted there's no "scope" parameters, and the charts section should be before the release history section not after...
Then there's the biggest issue: the article in its entirety is unreliably and/or improperly sourced. Please familiarize yourself with policies such as
WP:RS,
WP:NEWSBLOG,
WP:YOUTUBE,
WP:NOENG. Your video synopsis is entirely
WP:SYNTH.
Then there's the video screenshot and music sample which will most likely be deleted in future because their captions give no idea as to why they are needed/being used, nor do they properly co-relate/explain the corresponding prose.
The article isn't even of C-class quality I'm afraid. You should really begin to familiarize yourself with the Wikipedia policies I've pointed out to you above before believing an article is of GA status. You should also become familiar with
WP:WIAGA. If you are having trouble with understanding what the WP:WIAGA or Wikipedia policies are, try modelling your articles on an article like
Like a Virgin (song) or
The Edge of Glory to try and pick what mistakes you're doing and what your articles missing and what GA articles should look like. I'm sorry, and I hope you don't feel discouraged, keep up the enthusiasm! However, this is an Immediate ✗ Fail by all means... CoolMarc05:42, 21 September 2015 (UTC)reply
In the image's alt, add a space after "be seen." and change the period into a semicolon
Capitalize the 'a' in alt so it's in the same style as everything else (just for appearance sake)
Remove the flatlist from genre as only one genre is listed
Lead
Paragraph 1
Change the digital download link from "digital distribution" to "music download"
Change 'from the record.o 'from Unlocked.'
Paragraph 2
'Regisor' is not a word
Remove the 'a' before choreography
Remove 'inside a white room'; it's unnecessary
Is it necessary that we include it topped the iTunes charts in Japan? I mean, Adele's "Hello" topped like 40some iTunes charts and none of it's mentioned in her article
Composition
Change section title to 'Background and composition'
Change 'Further working' to 'Further's work'; this sentence needs to be worded as there are too many clauses
Change "Stan's interviews prior to the release of 'Cherry Pop'.[5] She also noticed influences..." to "Stan's interviews prior to the release of 'Cherry Pop'; she also noticed influences..." (This means you should also move Ref #5 to the end of the sentence)
Say "An administrator of IasiFun..."
Remove the link to 'kiss'
Reception
Paragraph 1
Rename this section 'Critical reception'
Please provide a topic sentence, like: "Cherry Pop" received generally mixed reviews from music critics upon release.
I don't understand what the first sentence (the one about The Singles Jukebox) you have is trying to convey
Anthony Easton's review belongs more in composition than here
Remove the date from Hitfire's review; just say "Hitfire praised the song's chorus as being..."
'Chours' is not a word
Is 'trashy' a good thing?
Yes, it is.
Add 'like' before you list "her previously launched songs"
Change 'launched' to 'released'
Hitfire's review is overly long; could the last sentence be removed? And, are there more reviews available for this song? Perhaps you could look at album reviews for more...
Paragraph 2
Rename this section 'Commercial performance'
Again, is the iTunes information really necessary?
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There are considerable prose issues, such as the capitalization of genre names that do not introduce a sentence, "dance/pop vocalist", "Cherry Pop has been recorded" - is it still being recorded?, "Being an Electronic / Pop song, Stan describes the song as J-Pop" - how are these relevant to each other... There is a lot of poor grammar and tense issues. If you struggle with English, I'd recommend that you ask for assistance
WP:GOCE with these articles you keep nominating so that you can learn more about English grammar and punctuation and see how it should be copyedited.
Then there's formatting issues everywhere. For example: Read
Template:Infobox single for how the infobox should be correctly formatted, for example the "Records" in the label parameters are omitted, flatlists are used for genres and only the first genre should be capitalized, we don't use references in the infobox when they've already referenced the same things in the prose, overlinking of "Erik Lidbom". The depreciated music video parameter, these should be in an external links section. The "see release history" is redundant and depreciated. The charts are incorrectly formatted there's no "scope" parameters, and the charts section should be before the release history section not after...
Then there's the biggest issue: the article in its entirety is unreliably and/or improperly sourced. Please familiarize yourself with policies such as
WP:RS,
WP:NEWSBLOG,
WP:YOUTUBE,
WP:NOENG. Your video synopsis is entirely
WP:SYNTH.
Then there's the video screenshot and music sample which will most likely be deleted in future because their captions give no idea as to why they are needed/being used, nor do they properly co-relate/explain the corresponding prose.
The article isn't even of C-class quality I'm afraid. You should really begin to familiarize yourself with the Wikipedia policies I've pointed out to you above before believing an article is of GA status. You should also become familiar with
WP:WIAGA. If you are having trouble with understanding what the WP:WIAGA or Wikipedia policies are, try modelling your articles on an article like
Like a Virgin (song) or
The Edge of Glory to try and pick what mistakes you're doing and what your articles missing and what GA articles should look like. I'm sorry, and I hope you don't feel discouraged, keep up the enthusiasm! However, this is an Immediate ✗ Fail by all means... CoolMarc05:42, 21 September 2015 (UTC)reply
In the image's alt, add a space after "be seen." and change the period into a semicolon
Capitalize the 'a' in alt so it's in the same style as everything else (just for appearance sake)
Remove the flatlist from genre as only one genre is listed
Lead
Paragraph 1
Change the digital download link from "digital distribution" to "music download"
Change 'from the record.o 'from Unlocked.'
Paragraph 2
'Regisor' is not a word
Remove the 'a' before choreography
Remove 'inside a white room'; it's unnecessary
Is it necessary that we include it topped the iTunes charts in Japan? I mean, Adele's "Hello" topped like 40some iTunes charts and none of it's mentioned in her article
Composition
Change section title to 'Background and composition'
Change 'Further working' to 'Further's work'; this sentence needs to be worded as there are too many clauses
Change "Stan's interviews prior to the release of 'Cherry Pop'.[5] She also noticed influences..." to "Stan's interviews prior to the release of 'Cherry Pop'; she also noticed influences..." (This means you should also move Ref #5 to the end of the sentence)
Say "An administrator of IasiFun..."
Remove the link to 'kiss'
Reception
Paragraph 1
Rename this section 'Critical reception'
Please provide a topic sentence, like: "Cherry Pop" received generally mixed reviews from music critics upon release.
I don't understand what the first sentence (the one about The Singles Jukebox) you have is trying to convey
Anthony Easton's review belongs more in composition than here
Remove the date from Hitfire's review; just say "Hitfire praised the song's chorus as being..."
'Chours' is not a word
Is 'trashy' a good thing?
Yes, it is.
Add 'like' before you list "her previously launched songs"
Change 'launched' to 'released'
Hitfire's review is overly long; could the last sentence be removed? And, are there more reviews available for this song? Perhaps you could look at album reviews for more...
Paragraph 2
Rename this section 'Commercial performance'
Again, is the iTunes information really necessary?
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