Organization is a problem because of the lead not representing the body in order. And the "Chart performance" and "Live performances" should be separate.
One sentence, " [...] which was considered a bit risqué for Knowles", has no source and doesn't seem like an objective point of view without the identification of who considered it to be like that.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
No problems.
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
It lacks organization. Here, the music video information is stated first when it is the last section in the article. Re-order to comply with the order of the article's body. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:22, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
"[...] 'Stand Up for Love' (recorded by all three members of Destiny's Child, including Knowles) which became a commercial failure." --> "[...] 'Stand Up for Love', a song recorded by all members of Destiny's Child that became a commercial failure. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:53, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
There's a lot of information about release dates. Remove release information after the second sentence. However, keep the information about the song being included as a bonus track for B'Day. --
ipodnano05 *
leave@message07:10, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Okay, i removed some but not all. I am trying not be rude. Please do not get me wrong but some should remain. For instance, Beyonce did not release in Australia only.Jivesh •
Talk2Me07:18, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
"Bill Lamb of About.com, who treated "Check on It" as not being a "weighty effort", Knowles' vocal arrangements on the song are smooth as well as alluring." Sounds like critical reception. Maybe just saying commenting "The song features smooth vocals on Knowles' part" would suffice. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:53, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
"Bret McCabe noted that her pace could be compared to that of American singer Donna Summer." Also sounds like critical reception. No doubt there. Just move it to the "Critical reception" section.
Such things like comparison etc, are normally placed in composition. I have always been doing this on my Beyonce articles. I strictly edit Beyonce related topics, especially songs in Wikipedia.Jivesh •
Talk2Me07:03, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
I certainly believe you. Greatest hits don't have many reviews and if they do, they are mostly good. Also, there are some songs that you really can't find bad reviews. Maybe this is one of them. --
ipodnano05 *
leave@message07:15, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Thank you for your comprehension. You seem to be a very comprehensive and friendly person.
Jivesh •
Talk2Me 07
I don't understand why these two would be in the same section. The section mostly discusses charts and has two sentences about live performance. Remove the live performance information. Place it below the music video section. And expand on the topic. There is surely more information since it was performed on two world tours.
There is nothing more since the singer has no liking for the song. She rarely performs it. And whenever she does, she only sings the last verse.Jivesh •
Talk2Me06:24, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
I do not know how to describe all that. Actually, i am not a native speaker of English. I can add the locations only. Can you describe it if i give you a link? Well, i do not know if i can ask you this...
Jivesh •
Talk2Me 07
"The tune has been certified." Don't refer to songs as "the tune." It doesn't sound professional. It sounds like something from a magazine. And replace "has been" with "was." DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:59, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
The image is way too large and a six-frame image is certainly not needed for such a simple music video.
I do not want to sound impolite but it is the best i could find and i inserted such an image to show the pink background which is the key concept of th video.Jivesh •
Talk2Me06:22, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Don't worry you're not sounding impolite at all. I know it's hard to find a picture that's really good. You can just take a screenshot yourself if anything. The whole pink concept can clearly be shown through one image. --
ipodnano05 *
leave@message07:01, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
I found
this but she looks like a ghost here. Is it fine?
Jivesh •
Talk2Me 07
Delete. It's not needed. "Release history" is a never-ending list because it is impossible to include every single territory the single was released to. FAs and GAs like "
Smells Like Teen Spirit" and "
Déjà Vu" tend to avoid it.
Book: B'Day thing makes it really hard to read reference. Make an "External links" section, add a link to the YouTube video and place the book thing there. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:56, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Organization is a problem because of the lead not representing the body in order. And the "Chart performance" and "Live performances" should be separate.
One sentence, " [...] which was considered a bit risqué for Knowles", has no source and doesn't seem like an objective point of view without the identification of who considered it to be like that.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
No problems.
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
It lacks organization. Here, the music video information is stated first when it is the last section in the article. Re-order to comply with the order of the article's body. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:22, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
"[...] 'Stand Up for Love' (recorded by all three members of Destiny's Child, including Knowles) which became a commercial failure." --> "[...] 'Stand Up for Love', a song recorded by all members of Destiny's Child that became a commercial failure. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:53, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
There's a lot of information about release dates. Remove release information after the second sentence. However, keep the information about the song being included as a bonus track for B'Day. --
ipodnano05 *
leave@message07:10, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Okay, i removed some but not all. I am trying not be rude. Please do not get me wrong but some should remain. For instance, Beyonce did not release in Australia only.Jivesh •
Talk2Me07:18, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
"Bill Lamb of About.com, who treated "Check on It" as not being a "weighty effort", Knowles' vocal arrangements on the song are smooth as well as alluring." Sounds like critical reception. Maybe just saying commenting "The song features smooth vocals on Knowles' part" would suffice. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:53, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
"Bret McCabe noted that her pace could be compared to that of American singer Donna Summer." Also sounds like critical reception. No doubt there. Just move it to the "Critical reception" section.
Such things like comparison etc, are normally placed in composition. I have always been doing this on my Beyonce articles. I strictly edit Beyonce related topics, especially songs in Wikipedia.Jivesh •
Talk2Me07:03, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
I certainly believe you. Greatest hits don't have many reviews and if they do, they are mostly good. Also, there are some songs that you really can't find bad reviews. Maybe this is one of them. --
ipodnano05 *
leave@message07:15, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Thank you for your comprehension. You seem to be a very comprehensive and friendly person.
Jivesh •
Talk2Me 07
I don't understand why these two would be in the same section. The section mostly discusses charts and has two sentences about live performance. Remove the live performance information. Place it below the music video section. And expand on the topic. There is surely more information since it was performed on two world tours.
There is nothing more since the singer has no liking for the song. She rarely performs it. And whenever she does, she only sings the last verse.Jivesh •
Talk2Me06:24, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
I do not know how to describe all that. Actually, i am not a native speaker of English. I can add the locations only. Can you describe it if i give you a link? Well, i do not know if i can ask you this...
Jivesh •
Talk2Me 07
"The tune has been certified." Don't refer to songs as "the tune." It doesn't sound professional. It sounds like something from a magazine. And replace "has been" with "was." DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:59, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
The image is way too large and a six-frame image is certainly not needed for such a simple music video.
I do not want to sound impolite but it is the best i could find and i inserted such an image to show the pink background which is the key concept of th video.Jivesh •
Talk2Me06:22, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
Don't worry you're not sounding impolite at all. I know it's hard to find a picture that's really good. You can just take a screenshot yourself if anything. The whole pink concept can clearly be shown through one image. --
ipodnano05 *
leave@message07:01, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply
I found
this but she looks like a ghost here. Is it fine?
Jivesh •
Talk2Me 07
Delete. It's not needed. "Release history" is a never-ending list because it is impossible to include every single territory the single was released to. FAs and GAs like "
Smells Like Teen Spirit" and "
Déjà Vu" tend to avoid it.
Book: B'Day thing makes it really hard to read reference. Make an "External links" section, add a link to the YouTube video and place the book thing there. DoneJivesh •
Talk2Me07:56, 10 January 2011 (UTC)reply