This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.
Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
In the Plot, "Willy's employees", shouldn't it be "Wonka's employees"? In the Development section, ""I tried to find kids who had something of the character in them. Mike Teavee was the hardest," director Tim Burton explained", no need to mention Burton's first name. This is me, but in the Awards section, this sentence ---> "Gabriella Pescucci was nominated the Academy Award for Best Costume Design", reads odd.
In the Plot, the hyphens needs to be
dashes. In the Development section, why is Roald Dahl's daughter name linked?Same section, "...but he faced scheduling conflicts and contractual obligations with Minority Report and The Lookout" ---> "...but he faced scheduling conflicts and contractual obligations with Minority Report (2002) and The Lookout (2007)", so that it can
provide context for the reader. Same section, "He had previously produced another of the author's adaptations with James and the Giant Peach" ---> "He had previously produced another of the author's adaptations with the 1996 feature James and the Giant Peach" or something like that. Same section, link "1971 film adaption" once. In the Filming section, "The Wonka Factory exterior was coincidentally constructed on the same backlot Burton had used for Gotham City in Batman" ---> "The Wonka Factory exterior was coincidentally constructed on the same backlot Burton had used for Gotham City in the 1989 feature Batman". In the Music section, dates aren't supposed to be linked.
In the Development section, you have "1971 film adaptation" linked twice. Either unlink it or replace it with Willy Wonka & the Chocolate Factory, in the second occurrence, since its obvious what you're talking about in the beginning of the section.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Are there sources available for the Music section?
I'm glad Igordebraga fixed the Music section. :) Yeah, from the article's history, everything seems to be calm now. It is. Thank you to Wildroot for getting the stuff I left at the talk page, because I have gone off and placed the article as GA. Congrats. ;) --
ThinkBlue (HitBLUE)14:38, 20 August 2009 (UTC)reply
This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.
Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
In the Plot, "Willy's employees", shouldn't it be "Wonka's employees"? In the Development section, ""I tried to find kids who had something of the character in them. Mike Teavee was the hardest," director Tim Burton explained", no need to mention Burton's first name. This is me, but in the Awards section, this sentence ---> "Gabriella Pescucci was nominated the Academy Award for Best Costume Design", reads odd.
In the Plot, the hyphens needs to be
dashes. In the Development section, why is Roald Dahl's daughter name linked?Same section, "...but he faced scheduling conflicts and contractual obligations with Minority Report and The Lookout" ---> "...but he faced scheduling conflicts and contractual obligations with Minority Report (2002) and The Lookout (2007)", so that it can
provide context for the reader. Same section, "He had previously produced another of the author's adaptations with James and the Giant Peach" ---> "He had previously produced another of the author's adaptations with the 1996 feature James and the Giant Peach" or something like that. Same section, link "1971 film adaption" once. In the Filming section, "The Wonka Factory exterior was coincidentally constructed on the same backlot Burton had used for Gotham City in Batman" ---> "The Wonka Factory exterior was coincidentally constructed on the same backlot Burton had used for Gotham City in the 1989 feature Batman". In the Music section, dates aren't supposed to be linked.
In the Development section, you have "1971 film adaptation" linked twice. Either unlink it or replace it with Willy Wonka & the Chocolate Factory, in the second occurrence, since its obvious what you're talking about in the beginning of the section.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
Are there sources available for the Music section?
I'm glad Igordebraga fixed the Music section. :) Yeah, from the article's history, everything seems to be calm now. It is. Thank you to Wildroot for getting the stuff I left at the talk page, because I have gone off and placed the article as GA. Congrats. ;) --
ThinkBlue (HitBLUE)14:38, 20 August 2009 (UTC)reply