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Reviewer: Parsecboy ( talk · contribs) 14:07, 2 February 2016 (UTC) reply


  • "The primary role of the larger contre-torpilleur was scouting with battleline defense secondary and attacking the enemy battleline in third place." - this reads awkwardly and took a couple of tries to parse. Part of the problem is non-parallel structure (i.e., you have a list of gerund, noun, gerund)
  • "all weathers" - I think you can ditch the "s"
  • "The former was sunk the next day off Dunkirk and the latter" - former and latter only work when discussing 2 things - you have 3 destroyers mentioned here.
  • "They were turned her over" - something's wrong here
  • link rate of fire
  • One dupe link
  • Hide the dab for U-136
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

Article ( | visual edit | history) · Article talk ( | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Parsecboy ( talk · contribs) 14:07, 2 February 2016 (UTC) reply


  • "The primary role of the larger contre-torpilleur was scouting with battleline defense secondary and attacking the enemy battleline in third place." - this reads awkwardly and took a couple of tries to parse. Part of the problem is non-parallel structure (i.e., you have a list of gerund, noun, gerund)
  • "all weathers" - I think you can ditch the "s"
  • "The former was sunk the next day off Dunkirk and the latter" - former and latter only work when discussing 2 things - you have 3 destroyers mentioned here.
  • "They were turned her over" - something's wrong here
  • link rate of fire
  • One dupe link
  • Hide the dab for U-136

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