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I'll take this one. Reviewer: SusunW ( talk · contribs) 16:40, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
Will check to see if there are any actual issues as I review sources. SusunW ( talk) 17:50, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
She was known for her habits of performing barefoot and stopping performances to smoke and drink on stage. Reading the body it says she did that at intermission. Maybe I'm being too picky, but one seems spontaneous (stopping performance) and the other seems planned (intermission).
She won the Grammy Award for Best Contemporary World Music Album in 2003and
Évora's ninth album, Voz d'Amor, won a Grammy Award in 2004Martin p. 92 says 2003 was for Voz d'Amor in Best Contemporary World Music category, whereas Abah says the same category and album but in 2004. Checking newspapers.com it was released and nominated in 2003 but the award ceremony happened on 8 February 2004. I don't know how you reword this, perhaps nominated in 2003, awarded in 2004, but it needs to be consistent throughout the article.
released two 45 RPM recordsis a direct quote. Either mark it as such or reword. Possibly two singles?
Évora had two children, a son and a daughter, about eight years apartdon't see the eight years apart in Decker? The LA Times says she "had three children from three different fathers," and one of them died. So was it two or three?
and was a single motheris not in Decker; instead it is in Moon p. 266. Just move the citation for Decker to follow
divorced three times,
Évora decided to retire from musicmay not accurately reflect the situation. I mean did she decide or did she have to do it because her health (mental and physical) wouldn't allow her to? According to Martin, the combination of inadequate nutrition, alcoholism, and depression left her struggling to survive and a group of citizens took up a collection to get her into treatment and pay for her medical expenses. p 87
she was discovered by music producer José "Djô" da Silvahere there is no mention of his nationality at all and to me, it seems a disconnection because as I said his name is Portuguese and I think it would automatically make the reader wonder why he took her to Paris. I think it eliminates confusion to say he was a Cape Verdean living in France. Cited to Martin p. 88.
They had trouble finding a distributoris on p 88, so your citation needs to reflect both 88-89.
global toursbe better phrased as "touring globally"? And I think you should flip this sentence and the next one because she didn't go to the US until 1995, but the Théâtre de la Ville concert was in 1992.
successful tour in the United Stateadd an "s" to States.
In 2010, Évora performedto
career due to poor healthis cited to Publico, which is a Portuguese newspaper, not a webpage. The newspaper confirms only that she had open-heart surgery in May 2010 in Paris and retired in September 2011 after doctors ordered her to cancel an upcoming tour. I've looked at nearly every source used in the article and find none that give the details in the article about 8, 11, or 16 May. Unless you can find a source, this information needs to be removed.
Évora died in São Vicenteseems oddly worded. One cannot die "in" an island, one is "on" an island. Nevertheless, the article in Público (Spain) doesn't say where she died. The LA Times says she died at a hospital in Mindelo, on São Vicente.
One sentence neither makes a paragraph nor should be given undue weight with an article section. It isn't as if she was an actor or even starred in the films. Were it me, I would add them to the "Return to music and international success" section following She released several more albums, each two to three years apart, over the following years
. At a minimum, the years should be given for the films and preferably the roles she played. (I would also suggest you input the archive link for the NY Times as the site is paywalled for many trying to access it from outside the US.)
I'm going to have to break here and will return tomorrow. SusunW ( talk) 23:20, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
In 1997, Évora wonhas an error message CS1 maint: unfit URL, but links to a page of photos. It doesn't verify the text and I'm not sure it could be called a reliable, independent source. This Billboard article, p. 60 confirms the win and provides the information that best album was for Cabo Verde.
She then metBana makes it seem like she met him and he asked her to work in his restaurant. In actuality they toured in the US together and then he asked her to work in the restaurant per Lima-Neves. (Touring on another continent is a big deal when one is a performer.) SusunW ( talk) 14:02, 18 October 2023 (UTC)
making her one of the few prominent African musical artists who did not change her performances to a global language to increase marketabilitydoes not seem to be supported by the source cited. Do you have a source that says performing in Kriol was atypical for Africans? Reviewing the other sources, it didn't have anything to do with a marketing ploy. Arenas p 62 says she wasn't able to communicate other than in Portuguese or Kriol.
honored on stampsprobably better to say "her portrait was featured on Cape Verdean postage stamps and on the 2000 Escudos banknotes" or she was honored with her portrait being featured ..." Also wouldn't a better independent source like better] reflect WP policy?
statue of herperhaps add "by Domingos Luisa"?
a butterfly in the family Lycaenidae named Chilades evorae which is found on the island of Santo Antão, and a species of sea slug called Aegires evorae, which exists in the northeast part of the island of Sal in the area of Calhetinha.is direct quote from the Pulse Live and Face to Face articles and should be marked with ".
Thebiguglyalien I think that's it. As always, you are free to question any of my remarks. Thank you for working on the article. I genuinely enjoyed reading it and learning about her. Will put it on hold and won't get back to it today. My husband and I are celebrating our anniversary. SusunW ( talk) 18:35, 15 October 2023 (UTC)
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Thebiguglyalien after reviewing the changes and your comments, I think it meets the criteria. The only outstanding item is the first US tour, but I won't hold up passing it for that. I think it is important, you may not, so it isn't critical to the pass. Sorry to lose the photos, but I couldn't see a way around that. Really appreciate your work on her. Congrats. Give me a few minutes to do all the updates.
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I'll take this one. Reviewer: SusunW ( talk · contribs) 16:40, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
Will check to see if there are any actual issues as I review sources. SusunW ( talk) 17:50, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
She was known for her habits of performing barefoot and stopping performances to smoke and drink on stage. Reading the body it says she did that at intermission. Maybe I'm being too picky, but one seems spontaneous (stopping performance) and the other seems planned (intermission).
She won the Grammy Award for Best Contemporary World Music Album in 2003and
Évora's ninth album, Voz d'Amor, won a Grammy Award in 2004Martin p. 92 says 2003 was for Voz d'Amor in Best Contemporary World Music category, whereas Abah says the same category and album but in 2004. Checking newspapers.com it was released and nominated in 2003 but the award ceremony happened on 8 February 2004. I don't know how you reword this, perhaps nominated in 2003, awarded in 2004, but it needs to be consistent throughout the article.
released two 45 RPM recordsis a direct quote. Either mark it as such or reword. Possibly two singles?
Évora had two children, a son and a daughter, about eight years apartdon't see the eight years apart in Decker? The LA Times says she "had three children from three different fathers," and one of them died. So was it two or three?
and was a single motheris not in Decker; instead it is in Moon p. 266. Just move the citation for Decker to follow
divorced three times,
Évora decided to retire from musicmay not accurately reflect the situation. I mean did she decide or did she have to do it because her health (mental and physical) wouldn't allow her to? According to Martin, the combination of inadequate nutrition, alcoholism, and depression left her struggling to survive and a group of citizens took up a collection to get her into treatment and pay for her medical expenses. p 87
she was discovered by music producer José "Djô" da Silvahere there is no mention of his nationality at all and to me, it seems a disconnection because as I said his name is Portuguese and I think it would automatically make the reader wonder why he took her to Paris. I think it eliminates confusion to say he was a Cape Verdean living in France. Cited to Martin p. 88.
They had trouble finding a distributoris on p 88, so your citation needs to reflect both 88-89.
global toursbe better phrased as "touring globally"? And I think you should flip this sentence and the next one because she didn't go to the US until 1995, but the Théâtre de la Ville concert was in 1992.
successful tour in the United Stateadd an "s" to States.
In 2010, Évora performedto
career due to poor healthis cited to Publico, which is a Portuguese newspaper, not a webpage. The newspaper confirms only that she had open-heart surgery in May 2010 in Paris and retired in September 2011 after doctors ordered her to cancel an upcoming tour. I've looked at nearly every source used in the article and find none that give the details in the article about 8, 11, or 16 May. Unless you can find a source, this information needs to be removed.
Évora died in São Vicenteseems oddly worded. One cannot die "in" an island, one is "on" an island. Nevertheless, the article in Público (Spain) doesn't say where she died. The LA Times says she died at a hospital in Mindelo, on São Vicente.
One sentence neither makes a paragraph nor should be given undue weight with an article section. It isn't as if she was an actor or even starred in the films. Were it me, I would add them to the "Return to music and international success" section following She released several more albums, each two to three years apart, over the following years
. At a minimum, the years should be given for the films and preferably the roles she played. (I would also suggest you input the archive link for the NY Times as the site is paywalled for many trying to access it from outside the US.)
I'm going to have to break here and will return tomorrow. SusunW ( talk) 23:20, 14 October 2023 (UTC)
In 1997, Évora wonhas an error message CS1 maint: unfit URL, but links to a page of photos. It doesn't verify the text and I'm not sure it could be called a reliable, independent source. This Billboard article, p. 60 confirms the win and provides the information that best album was for Cabo Verde.
She then metBana makes it seem like she met him and he asked her to work in his restaurant. In actuality they toured in the US together and then he asked her to work in the restaurant per Lima-Neves. (Touring on another continent is a big deal when one is a performer.) SusunW ( talk) 14:02, 18 October 2023 (UTC)
making her one of the few prominent African musical artists who did not change her performances to a global language to increase marketabilitydoes not seem to be supported by the source cited. Do you have a source that says performing in Kriol was atypical for Africans? Reviewing the other sources, it didn't have anything to do with a marketing ploy. Arenas p 62 says she wasn't able to communicate other than in Portuguese or Kriol.
honored on stampsprobably better to say "her portrait was featured on Cape Verdean postage stamps and on the 2000 Escudos banknotes" or she was honored with her portrait being featured ..." Also wouldn't a better independent source like better] reflect WP policy?
statue of herperhaps add "by Domingos Luisa"?
a butterfly in the family Lycaenidae named Chilades evorae which is found on the island of Santo Antão, and a species of sea slug called Aegires evorae, which exists in the northeast part of the island of Sal in the area of Calhetinha.is direct quote from the Pulse Live and Face to Face articles and should be marked with ".
Thebiguglyalien I think that's it. As always, you are free to question any of my remarks. Thank you for working on the article. I genuinely enjoyed reading it and learning about her. Will put it on hold and won't get back to it today. My husband and I are celebrating our anniversary. SusunW ( talk) 18:35, 15 October 2023 (UTC)
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Thebiguglyalien after reviewing the changes and your comments, I think it meets the criteria. The only outstanding item is the first US tour, but I won't hold up passing it for that. I think it is important, you may not, so it isn't critical to the pass. Sorry to lose the photos, but I couldn't see a way around that. Really appreciate your work on her. Congrats. Give me a few minutes to do all the updates.
SusunW (
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14:18, 18 October 2023 (UTC)