The class, the class is redundant in the first para of the lead. Rephrase. Primary armament didn't include any 6-inch guns. Laid down dates not suitable for lead. Expand third para, better describing their service. Geographic locations OK for peacetime activity, but should link to campaigns for wartime.
Description and design section grossly inadequate for a class article. See Parsecboy's
König class battleship for a good example of what needs to be included. That's what I've used as my model. My policy is to link and or convert everything in the infobox and in the main text; it's not an issue if you choose not to do it here, but it will be at ACR if you want to take this that far. Convert the displacement in the infobox. Link directly to water-tube boilers. More details needed on ship's careers. Consider using a table listing construction dates, etc.
B. Focused:
Is no range or endurance figure available? Coal, oil or mixed-firing? Only one link to Dardanelles Campaign needed. How many boilers?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have
fair use rationales:
The pictures of Ocean and Goliath are improperly licensed. If you want to use them then you need a NFUR. I'd suggest finding other pictures with better licenses. Anything credited to the Imperial War Museum should be fine.
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
The class, the class is redundant in the first para of the lead. Rephrase. Primary armament didn't include any 6-inch guns. Laid down dates not suitable for lead. Expand third para, better describing their service. Geographic locations OK for peacetime activity, but should link to campaigns for wartime.
Description and design section grossly inadequate for a class article. See Parsecboy's
König class battleship for a good example of what needs to be included. That's what I've used as my model. My policy is to link and or convert everything in the infobox and in the main text; it's not an issue if you choose not to do it here, but it will be at ACR if you want to take this that far. Convert the displacement in the infobox. Link directly to water-tube boilers. More details needed on ship's careers. Consider using a table listing construction dates, etc.
B. Focused:
Is no range or endurance figure available? Coal, oil or mixed-firing? Only one link to Dardanelles Campaign needed. How many boilers?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have
fair use rationales:
The pictures of Ocean and Goliath are improperly licensed. If you want to use them then you need a NFUR. I'd suggest finding other pictures with better licenses. Anything credited to the Imperial War Museum should be fine.
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions: