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Canberra MRT station (NS12) is an elevated Mass Rapid Transit (MRT) station in Sembawang, Singapore. It is the 12th station eastbound on the North South line and is located along Canberra Link at the junction with Canberra Way.-- copy edited
With several green features included in the station during construction-- name a few exmaples
Taking it slow on this one as this article actually needs substantial improvement, and I'd rather make those improvements now than fail it. -- Truflip99 ( talk) 23:27, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
the Draft Master Plan 2013 was officially gazetted to become the Master Plan 2014 in June that year.-- June of that year
in response to these Master Plans-- lower case master plans
On 27 April 2015, LTA awarded China State Construction Engineering Corporation (Singapore Branch) Contract 158 for the Design and Construction of Canberra Station at a sum of S$90 million.-- LTA awarded Contract 158 to China State...
Heavy construction work began on 26 March 2016-- comma after date
Between 18 and 20 May 2019, a 72 m (236 ft) long rail crossover track was constructed at the northern end of Canberra station to connect the two tracks.-- use this convert = {{convert|72|m|ft|adj=mid|-long}}
such as the power outage that occurred on 7 July 2015-- this would be more appropriate in parentheses I think
For the construction team's efforts to integrate landscaping and the use of eco-friendly materials, the station was awarded a Platinum certification under the Building and Construction Authority's new Green Mark scheme for transit stations. Canberra station is the first MRT station to attain such a rating.-- I think this is more appropriate in the next section
More later. -- Truflip99 ( talk) 16:11, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
An estimated 17,000 households will benefit from the station.-- government predictions should be taken with a grain of salt; "is expected to benefit"...; also this sentence is better off as the second sentence in the next paragraph
There are new and forthcoming Housing and Development Board (HDB) public housing developments, private condominiums as well as landed properties (Sembawang Springs Estate) near the station. In addition, it serves Yishun Industrial Park A, which houses mainly manufacturing companies along with the Singapore Civil Defence Force 3rd Division Headquarters and the Yishun Fire Station.-- source?
Canberra Plaza (currently under construction)-- under construciton as of April 2020...
It will be completed by the end of 2019.-- update?
now a subsidiary of Surbana Jurong-- both? if not indicate former or latter
thus the station shapes...-- is shaped
to allow natural light to enter it.-- omit "it"
Louvers were used to provide ventilation.-- used --> installed
The station has five entrances.-- where?
An elevated sheltered footbridge built across Canberra Link-- omit "elevated" as it is understood with footbridge; "across" --> "over"
The artwork in the station, Symbiosis, was painted by Singaporean artist Tan Zi Xi. It aims to emphasise the symbiotic relationship between flora and fauna. Residents and stakeholders from the nearby Sembawang Group Representation Constituency contributed to the artwork by drawing imaginative plants and animals after a workshop that involved a nature walk. Ms Tan developed their drawings further to suit the lively design of the station.-- this is better off in the previous paragraph; omit "Ms"
More later. -- Truflip99 ( talk) 03:07, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
I am satisfied with this article. Passing. -- Truflip99 ( talk) 03:15, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Canberra MRT station (NS12) is an elevated Mass Rapid Transit (MRT) station in Sembawang, Singapore. It is the 12th station eastbound on the North South line and is located along Canberra Link at the junction with Canberra Way.-- copy edited
With several green features included in the station during construction-- name a few exmaples
Taking it slow on this one as this article actually needs substantial improvement, and I'd rather make those improvements now than fail it. -- Truflip99 ( talk) 23:27, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
the Draft Master Plan 2013 was officially gazetted to become the Master Plan 2014 in June that year.-- June of that year
in response to these Master Plans-- lower case master plans
On 27 April 2015, LTA awarded China State Construction Engineering Corporation (Singapore Branch) Contract 158 for the Design and Construction of Canberra Station at a sum of S$90 million.-- LTA awarded Contract 158 to China State...
Heavy construction work began on 26 March 2016-- comma after date
Between 18 and 20 May 2019, a 72 m (236 ft) long rail crossover track was constructed at the northern end of Canberra station to connect the two tracks.-- use this convert = {{convert|72|m|ft|adj=mid|-long}}
such as the power outage that occurred on 7 July 2015-- this would be more appropriate in parentheses I think
For the construction team's efforts to integrate landscaping and the use of eco-friendly materials, the station was awarded a Platinum certification under the Building and Construction Authority's new Green Mark scheme for transit stations. Canberra station is the first MRT station to attain such a rating.-- I think this is more appropriate in the next section
More later. -- Truflip99 ( talk) 16:11, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
An estimated 17,000 households will benefit from the station.-- government predictions should be taken with a grain of salt; "is expected to benefit"...; also this sentence is better off as the second sentence in the next paragraph
There are new and forthcoming Housing and Development Board (HDB) public housing developments, private condominiums as well as landed properties (Sembawang Springs Estate) near the station. In addition, it serves Yishun Industrial Park A, which houses mainly manufacturing companies along with the Singapore Civil Defence Force 3rd Division Headquarters and the Yishun Fire Station.-- source?
Canberra Plaza (currently under construction)-- under construciton as of April 2020...
It will be completed by the end of 2019.-- update?
now a subsidiary of Surbana Jurong-- both? if not indicate former or latter
thus the station shapes...-- is shaped
to allow natural light to enter it.-- omit "it"
Louvers were used to provide ventilation.-- used --> installed
The station has five entrances.-- where?
An elevated sheltered footbridge built across Canberra Link-- omit "elevated" as it is understood with footbridge; "across" --> "over"
The artwork in the station, Symbiosis, was painted by Singaporean artist Tan Zi Xi. It aims to emphasise the symbiotic relationship between flora and fauna. Residents and stakeholders from the nearby Sembawang Group Representation Constituency contributed to the artwork by drawing imaginative plants and animals after a workshop that involved a nature walk. Ms Tan developed their drawings further to suit the lively design of the station.-- this is better off in the previous paragraph; omit "Ms"
More later. -- Truflip99 ( talk) 03:07, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
I am satisfied with this article. Passing. -- Truflip99 ( talk) 03:15, 9 April 2020 (UTC)