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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 07:59, 20 March 2020 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:
- "executing two young sons of Ali's cousin and governor in Yemen" does this mean that Ali's cousin was also the governor of Yemen? If so, suggest making that clearer.
- "Following Ali's death and the abdication of
the latter'shis son Hasan in 661" - say what Ibn Hazim was in the context of this information, medieval historian? Also suggest putting his year of death after his name as you have done with others.
- the naming and family information is confusing alright. Suggest "According to the medieval historian Ibn Hazm, Umayr Abi Artat was Busr's grandfather, and Busr's father's name was Artat."
- "Busr was rewarded with 200 dinars"
- "a campaign by Amr
ibn al-As" as he's already been introduced and Amr has been used, there is at least one other example - the map caption needs (pink) and (green) after the names of the respective opponents
- to subject→to subjugate
- orientlaist→orientalist
- After he's been introduced, Caliph Uthman→Uthman
- link Asceticism
- suggest "and the latter's brother and son, Yazid and Malik respectively."
- suggest "slain the men and took captive the women"→"slayed the men and captured the women"
- suggest "Busr retreated through through central Arabia to avoid Ali's relief troops in the the Hejaz"
- the OCLC for Hitti is 958738109
- the OCLC for Travaux et memoires is 243890056
- Wellhausen is unused
- File:First Fitna Map, Ali-Muawiya Phase.png needs information about what sources were used to create the map
That's me done, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 07:59, 21 March 2020 (UTC)
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Peacemaker67: Thanks for reviewing this nomination and for the helpful suggestions. I have addressed each of your concerns. Please let me know if there's anything else. Cheers, --
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19:21, 22 March 2020 (UTC)
- This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by an acceptably licensed image with an appropriate caption. Passing. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 01:04, 24 March 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 07:59, 20 March 2020 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:
- "executing two young sons of Ali's cousin and governor in Yemen" does this mean that Ali's cousin was also the governor of Yemen? If so, suggest making that clearer.
- "Following Ali's death and the abdication of
the latter'shis son Hasan in 661" - say what Ibn Hazim was in the context of this information, medieval historian? Also suggest putting his year of death after his name as you have done with others.
- the naming and family information is confusing alright. Suggest "According to the medieval historian Ibn Hazm, Umayr Abi Artat was Busr's grandfather, and Busr's father's name was Artat."
- "Busr was rewarded with 200 dinars"
- "a campaign by Amr
ibn al-As" as he's already been introduced and Amr has been used, there is at least one other example - the map caption needs (pink) and (green) after the names of the respective opponents
- to subject→to subjugate
- orientlaist→orientalist
- After he's been introduced, Caliph Uthman→Uthman
- link Asceticism
- suggest "and the latter's brother and son, Yazid and Malik respectively."
- suggest "slain the men and took captive the women"→"slayed the men and captured the women"
- suggest "Busr retreated through through central Arabia to avoid Ali's relief troops in the the Hejaz"
- the OCLC for Hitti is 958738109
- the OCLC for Travaux et memoires is 243890056
- Wellhausen is unused
- File:First Fitna Map, Ali-Muawiya Phase.png needs information about what sources were used to create the map
That's me done, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 07:59, 21 March 2020 (UTC)
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Peacemaker67: Thanks for reviewing this nomination and for the helpful suggestions. I have addressed each of your concerns. Please let me know if there's anything else. Cheers, --
Al Ameer (
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19:21, 22 March 2020 (UTC)
- This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by an acceptably licensed image with an appropriate caption. Passing. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 01:04, 24 March 2020 (UTC)