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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | ||
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | ||
2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | ||
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | ||
2c. it contains no original research. | ||
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | ||
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | ||
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | ||
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | ||
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | ||
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | ||
7. Overall assessment. |
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15:50, 16 May 2013 (UTC)
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13:13, 17 May 2013 (UTC)Bride burning is a form of domestic violence more common in India where a women is burned due to what the husband or his family considers to be an inadequate dowry.- this feels WP:UNDUE, sticks out like a sore thumb unconnected to anything, and I can think of more common and widespread intentional burns like cigarette burns as a form of abuse that are not mentioned, is this sentence really needed? If so it needs to be integrated better.
Fireworks are a common cause burns during holiday seasons in many countries.- appears to be missing "of"
Microwave burns are rare and primarily primarily occur via thermal heating- article content needs to brought in better harmony with source
The remaining blood becomes more concentrated and less in volume- clumsy and a bit unclear, is this meant: "There is significant blood loss, and the remaining blood becomes more concentrated" - it should also be explained which component of the blood is lost to make it more concentrated, it is just moisture? plasma?
Regulation of fireworks appears to decrease the number of injuries caused by them.- Regarding Jeschke p. 46: Source actually appears to say opposite of article content
There is insufficient evidence to support the use of silver containing dressings.[41] Evidence for negative-pressure wound therapy is insufficient to determine its effect.- the bit about neg-pressure isn't exactly worded right, combine these two sentences to say there is insufficient evidence to support either
If intact blisters are present, it is not clear what should be done with them. Some tentative evidence supports leaving them intact.- lead says
Blisters should be left unbroken to reduce the likelihood of infection., make consistent
Tentative evidence also supports the use of aloe vera[56] however it does not appear to be superior to silver sulfadiazine.
Silver sulfadiazine (a type of antibiotic) is not recommended as it potentially prolongs healing time.
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13:28, 17 May 2013 (UTC)
During the healing process antihistamines, message, or transcutaneous nerve stimulation may be used to aid with itching.[6] Antihistamines however are only effective in 20% of people.[43] Tentative evidence supports the use of gabapentin- based on the sources, the last two sentences are talking about pruritis/itching but the article content does not make this clear enough, please make more clear what symptom Antihistamines and gabapentin are for - pain or itching?
Intravenous antibiotics may improve survival in those with large and severe burns.[44] There is however concerns that it increases the risk of fungal infections and antibiotic resistance.[5] Due to the poor quality of the evidence, routine use is not recommended.- "There is however concerns" needs grammar fixed; check the meaning of the content against the source, prophylaxis is recommended perioperatively, does this need to be worked into the content?
Hyperbaric oxygenation may be useful in addition to traditional treatments- don't agree hyperbaric oxygen is "alternative medicine" or at least the source didn't say so, consider moving this elsewhere
Hyperbaric oxygenation may be useful in addition to traditional treatments;[47] however, more research is needed to confirm or deny this.[48- a 2004 Cochrane review is used to supplement a 2013 review article and make a statement about "more research is needed", if there's been more research since 2004 the 2013 review should have it, recommend removing the bit here sourced to the 2004 Cochrane
In one large United States series of people admitted to burn centres on average 4% of people died[14] with a mortality of less than 1% in those with burn areas less than 10% TBSA and 85% in those with more than 90% TBSA burns.- sorry couldn't figure out what is meant here, please clarify
Overall nearly 60% of fatal burns occur in Southeast Asia with a rate of 11.6 per 100,000. In this region of the world fatal burns are twice as common in females as males.- This is surprising, can you include an explanation why?
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Reviewer: Zad68 ( talk · contribs) 15:48, 23 April 2013 (UTC)
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19:45, 23 April 2013 (UTC)
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03:34, 24 April 2013 (UTC)
Zad
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19:21, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
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03:31, 2 May 2013 (UTC)
Zad
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19:49, 15 May 2013 (UTC)
Zad
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14:02, 17 May 2013 (UTC)
Zad
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02:42, 19 May 2013 (UTC)Rate | Attribute | Review Comment |
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | ||
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | ||
2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | ||
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | ||
2c. it contains no original research. | ||
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | ||
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | ||
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | ||
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | ||
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | ||
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | ||
7. Overall assessment. |
Zad
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15:50, 16 May 2013 (UTC)
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13:13, 17 May 2013 (UTC)Bride burning is a form of domestic violence more common in India where a women is burned due to what the husband or his family considers to be an inadequate dowry.- this feels WP:UNDUE, sticks out like a sore thumb unconnected to anything, and I can think of more common and widespread intentional burns like cigarette burns as a form of abuse that are not mentioned, is this sentence really needed? If so it needs to be integrated better.
Fireworks are a common cause burns during holiday seasons in many countries.- appears to be missing "of"
Microwave burns are rare and primarily primarily occur via thermal heating- article content needs to brought in better harmony with source
The remaining blood becomes more concentrated and less in volume- clumsy and a bit unclear, is this meant: "There is significant blood loss, and the remaining blood becomes more concentrated" - it should also be explained which component of the blood is lost to make it more concentrated, it is just moisture? plasma?
Regulation of fireworks appears to decrease the number of injuries caused by them.- Regarding Jeschke p. 46: Source actually appears to say opposite of article content
There is insufficient evidence to support the use of silver containing dressings.[41] Evidence for negative-pressure wound therapy is insufficient to determine its effect.- the bit about neg-pressure isn't exactly worded right, combine these two sentences to say there is insufficient evidence to support either
If intact blisters are present, it is not clear what should be done with them. Some tentative evidence supports leaving them intact.- lead says
Blisters should be left unbroken to reduce the likelihood of infection., make consistent
Tentative evidence also supports the use of aloe vera[56] however it does not appear to be superior to silver sulfadiazine.
Silver sulfadiazine (a type of antibiotic) is not recommended as it potentially prolongs healing time.
Zad
68
13:28, 17 May 2013 (UTC)
During the healing process antihistamines, message, or transcutaneous nerve stimulation may be used to aid with itching.[6] Antihistamines however are only effective in 20% of people.[43] Tentative evidence supports the use of gabapentin- based on the sources, the last two sentences are talking about pruritis/itching but the article content does not make this clear enough, please make more clear what symptom Antihistamines and gabapentin are for - pain or itching?
Intravenous antibiotics may improve survival in those with large and severe burns.[44] There is however concerns that it increases the risk of fungal infections and antibiotic resistance.[5] Due to the poor quality of the evidence, routine use is not recommended.- "There is however concerns" needs grammar fixed; check the meaning of the content against the source, prophylaxis is recommended perioperatively, does this need to be worked into the content?
Hyperbaric oxygenation may be useful in addition to traditional treatments- don't agree hyperbaric oxygen is "alternative medicine" or at least the source didn't say so, consider moving this elsewhere
Hyperbaric oxygenation may be useful in addition to traditional treatments;[47] however, more research is needed to confirm or deny this.[48- a 2004 Cochrane review is used to supplement a 2013 review article and make a statement about "more research is needed", if there's been more research since 2004 the 2013 review should have it, recommend removing the bit here sourced to the 2004 Cochrane
In one large United States series of people admitted to burn centres on average 4% of people died[14] with a mortality of less than 1% in those with burn areas less than 10% TBSA and 85% in those with more than 90% TBSA burns.- sorry couldn't figure out what is meant here, please clarify
Overall nearly 60% of fatal burns occur in Southeast Asia with a rate of 11.6 per 100,000. In this region of the world fatal burns are twice as common in females as males.- This is surprising, can you include an explanation why?
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