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00:38, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Abandoned This has been open for years, so I am closing this. If another editor thinks it does not meet the criteria they are free to open a new one. AIRcorn (talk) 11:02, 25 January 2019 (UTC)
This article does not meet the GA criteria in some important areas, most notably "well-written". There are some odd word choices and structural issues that need work before the article truly meets the well-written, clear and concise criteria. Examples include sentences like
His hastily decision to quit school was a result of his father not being able to pay his school fees.This clearly need fixing, even if it was only replacing "hastily" with "hasty". However, on further examination, the entire sentence does not accurately reflect the source; there's nothing in that article about haste. It's presented there as Brymo's choice, as if there could have been a way for him to remain even though his father couldn't pay the fees.
The Punch also reported that Brymo was invited to the school to partake in the case study presentationwith "partake".
According to The Nation newspaper, Brymo and his management met with Chocolate City representatives in October 2013 to deliberate on mutually-agreeable termswith "deliberate".
reported that(and two of them use
it was reported that); there needs to be variation in wording and sentence structure.
While these are significant, the biggest problem I believe the article has is structural. The chronology skips back and forth: the second paragraph under Early life and career beginnings belongs between the first two paragraphs of the next section. There is nothing initially to indicate that Merchants, Dealers & Slaves was not released under Chocolate City; it isn't until you get to the section specifically about that label and piece things together that you realize that the album was not only self-released, but only a day after it was the injunction came down that prevented it from being sold for about five months, which is doubtless why the discs weren't available until that later time. There's also no indication anywhere that the album had "relatively low acceptance unlike his previous works", as stated in The Punch source—of course, there may not be any information about whether the acceptance might have been hurt by the legal troubles that made the music unavailable for five months right after its release. However, it does make you wonder about that album, especially as the article says that The Nation included TheSonOfaKapenta on its list of the "Albums that failed commercially in 2012"
, and Son was his second album.
As noted earlier, the Chocolate City departure paragraph mostly reads like a timeline, not a narration of what happened—the general sweep, important events like the Spinlet deal that fell through, the injunction and its lifting, and the final result (which is basically unknown, except that Brymo said he didn't win but didn't say what he lost, if anything, when the case was "scrapped", and he kept releasing albums).
This should be enough to start on. When these matters are dealt with, I will do a second-pass review on all of the GA criteria. You might also wish to request a copyedit from the Guild of Copy Editors if some of the prose issues such as word choices need another set of eyes to find. BlueMoonset ( talk) 20:06, 27 December 2017 (UTC)
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Versace1608, the unfit url parameter should be set to yes only if there is inapproppriate content: "spam, advertising, porn, etc.". 404 and other broken links should not be hidden as unfit. – Finnusertop ( talk ⋅ contribs) 18:34, 7 January 2017 (UTC)
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00:38, 7 March 2017 (UTC)Abandoned This has been open for years, so I am closing this. If another editor thinks it does not meet the criteria they are free to open a new one. AIRcorn (talk) 11:02, 25 January 2019 (UTC)
This article does not meet the GA criteria in some important areas, most notably "well-written". There are some odd word choices and structural issues that need work before the article truly meets the well-written, clear and concise criteria. Examples include sentences like
His hastily decision to quit school was a result of his father not being able to pay his school fees.This clearly need fixing, even if it was only replacing "hastily" with "hasty". However, on further examination, the entire sentence does not accurately reflect the source; there's nothing in that article about haste. It's presented there as Brymo's choice, as if there could have been a way for him to remain even though his father couldn't pay the fees.
The Punch also reported that Brymo was invited to the school to partake in the case study presentationwith "partake".
According to The Nation newspaper, Brymo and his management met with Chocolate City representatives in October 2013 to deliberate on mutually-agreeable termswith "deliberate".
reported that(and two of them use
it was reported that); there needs to be variation in wording and sentence structure.
While these are significant, the biggest problem I believe the article has is structural. The chronology skips back and forth: the second paragraph under Early life and career beginnings belongs between the first two paragraphs of the next section. There is nothing initially to indicate that Merchants, Dealers & Slaves was not released under Chocolate City; it isn't until you get to the section specifically about that label and piece things together that you realize that the album was not only self-released, but only a day after it was the injunction came down that prevented it from being sold for about five months, which is doubtless why the discs weren't available until that later time. There's also no indication anywhere that the album had "relatively low acceptance unlike his previous works", as stated in The Punch source—of course, there may not be any information about whether the acceptance might have been hurt by the legal troubles that made the music unavailable for five months right after its release. However, it does make you wonder about that album, especially as the article says that The Nation included TheSonOfaKapenta on its list of the "Albums that failed commercially in 2012"
, and Son was his second album.
As noted earlier, the Chocolate City departure paragraph mostly reads like a timeline, not a narration of what happened—the general sweep, important events like the Spinlet deal that fell through, the injunction and its lifting, and the final result (which is basically unknown, except that Brymo said he didn't win but didn't say what he lost, if anything, when the case was "scrapped", and he kept releasing albums).
This should be enough to start on. When these matters are dealt with, I will do a second-pass review on all of the GA criteria. You might also wish to request a copyedit from the Guild of Copy Editors if some of the prose issues such as word choices need another set of eyes to find. BlueMoonset ( talk) 20:06, 27 December 2017 (UTC)